Depression Loveable Hurt

Started by Usul December 3rd, 2010 8:47 AM
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Usul

Cease my heart beat's weave.

Male
Seen September 1st, 2013
Posted May 20th, 2012
84 posts
12.5 Years
Love, Imprisoning me
A absolute lock-up.
She left me undone in the dirt,
I'm tired of living just to die,
If she wasn't there;
I would already terminate myself,
Something needed to be done.

Like a thousand hot knives,
Cutting through my body sadly,
If I was helplessly bleeding;
On the floor unfortunately
How can someone be so heartless
And let you bleeding the surface,
A heart of displeasement
Has been destroyed into
Thousand miserable pieces.

Unhealthfuly and courageous
Waiting for my life,
To expanding to nothing,
Emotionless I stand up the grond,
Shiver and trembling I walk.

My eyes haze and gaze the sight.
Tried to turn around for now;
My body hits the wall painful,
Collapsed my body down into the ground.

She slowly walks with those deadly legs,
To my emotionless body sadnessly;
In an almost dying progressive form,
She audaciously sits on my lap and;
Clamping her legs around my waist.

She look with an tearbuild in her eyes;
Into the mine as we embrace each other,
I'm so depressed to go on,
You will be sorry when I will be gone.



Age 29
Male
Seen October 13th, 2021
Posted February 2nd, 2017
1,093 posts
13.8 Years
Again, a job very well done, Usul!
And the whole seductive mood in the second half of the poem really sparks my thinking.

Oh, and here are a few errors you should fix.

I'm tired of living just to die,
Something needed to be done.
Has been destroyed into
Emotionless I stand up the ground,
In an almost dying progressive form,
She audaciously sits on my lap and;