Pleading in lies.

Started by Usul December 16th, 2010 11:48 AM
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Usul

Cease my heart beat's weave.

Male
Seen September 1st, 2013
Posted May 20th, 2012
84 posts
12.5 Years
Spoiler:
You may not understand it, but I still love you.
We've shared the most deepest pain, suffering, happiness, and joy.
You left me in disgrace crushed me, defied my will.

I hope you will cry, I hope you'll be hurt,
Making yourself feeling down and torture the depression;
Feeling like me, which I have felt for, for 4 years.

I have been suffering because of you;
Now you will see the pain, The pain I'm going through;
Those drenched and insanity suffered and dead-pose circles;
Where I have been laying in within my emotionless life.

Insecurenigly tried to held back my tears from the top of my eyes,
This depression forms you are dying to see;
Lives deep inside of my heart, under my skin and bounded through my soul.
I'm begging on my knees for your help, It was you who believe in me,
It was you who breathed life into me, signing me in into the underground world,

Dispite the depression by writing till I fall dead against a wall,
I couldn't stop thinkin' about it, every second you were in my thoughs,
In my head, in my mind, in my dreams; you are teaseningly my ceaselessity,
You look so beautiful down on your knees, but your lies keep beating;
Through the anger line of my blackened pieced heart parts to the darkness path.

Do me a favour and leave me alone let me live depressed in this life,
Ending me for an thousand time, laying left with my heart in pieces,
No longer a fighter since I have giving up pledge myself to the permanent death;
As I imagine for the years that have passed by you, you are gone--no longer hope to stay,
And rebuild something that have no point in, hope and bravery; I am drenched in lies.



Zeffy

g'day

Male
Seen December 1st, 2022
Posted January 30th, 2021
6,395 posts
14.1 Years
You may not understand it, but I still you.
The "bit I still you" part seems off. It doesn't make any sense too. I guess its "but I still love you"?
I hope you will cry, I hope you will hurt,
Making yourself feeling down and torture the depression;
Feeling like me, which I have felt for, for 4 years.
"I hope you will hurt," again, is a bit off. I think it should be "I hope you'll be hurt,"

Well, that's everything I saw wrong. Nice poem!
Age 29
Male
Seen October 13th, 2021
Posted February 2nd, 2017
1,093 posts
13.8 Years
Uhh. My mother was a romance poet, my dad was a emotional poet and my grandfather made 3-4 books in his time, which was around the year 70' - 80'.
Wow!
That's very interesting!
Do you by chance still have some poems they have written?
Age 29
Male
Seen October 13th, 2021
Posted February 2nd, 2017
1,093 posts
13.8 Years
They died, and my grandfather died before I was born, so yeah.
That's why I don't have any provement of it.
If I had it, I'll be glad to show you it.
That's....shocking.
I feel very sorry for you.

But, who told you about your parents' writings if they passed away when you were only 4?

Usul

Cease my heart beat's weave.

Male
Seen September 1st, 2013
Posted May 20th, 2012
84 posts
12.5 Years
That's....shocking.
I feel very sorry for you.

But, who told you about your parents' writings if they passed away when you were only 4?
I still have a old brother of the age of 34, who told me everything about it when I grew older, at like the age 14.
If I didn't started write at like 12-13, he would of never told me about it.



Usul

Cease my heart beat's weave.

Male
Seen September 1st, 2013
Posted May 20th, 2012
84 posts
12.5 Years
Nah, it's okay. I'm not ashamed of it anymore.
With my aunt who was planning for a long time to do a world tour.
So she couldn't take me with her, and my brother had just new house,
Other one was kinda place, for only like two people, and one bed room.
His new house had more abilitys, etc and so on; so he took me with him.
I live there with his girlfriend and his son.