Dead and gone; suicide.

Started by Usul January 2nd, 2011 9:12 PM
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meow

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I'll just comment on the poem. o.o'

Leaving apart a few grammatical errors, this is truly a remarkable piece of poetry. It flows pretty well and the descriptions are strong and vivid. If you are reading this, I must tell you that you're an amazing poet and should continue writing poems.

bobandbill

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Because nothing says 'we care so don't do it' like a lot of ........... and a short message from a few words. =p Guys, at least be on topic and don't bypass the character limit please, because that sort of posting is against the rules and honestly doesn't help anyone either.

That said, to the OP: - you shouldn't consider suicide if that is what you are seriously thinking (but, well, see the link posted in that other thread of yours as that'd say anything one'd want to say better quite likely), and in the case you're faking this suicide as a dramatic way to leave on a Pokemon forum, then that's pretty sad attention-grabbing.

And just quickly so this is somewhat on-topic in itself - the poem is all right I suppose - certainly vivid and dark - although do note it is quietness instead of quietlyness, and
Bringing the world to it's knees;
its over it's.
Cutting memories drilling into my chest like an thousand knife,
'thousand knife' doesn't fit - either knives or a different word in place of thousand if you wish to keep 'knife' in... say 'burning', maybe?

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