Tamed

Started by Angel Tabitha December 5th, 2004 8:00 PM
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Age 32
Seen July 5th, 2007
Posted April 6th, 2005
944 posts
18.5 Years
Ok this is a song/poem thing.I'm not sure which it is really though.


I've always been indepentdant,
I've always been free,
But you've done something hard,
You've managed to tame me.

I've always been a rogue,
I've always been tough,
But you've turned me around,
You've tamed me.

I used to run free,
I wanted to be let be,
But now you've changed me,
And all I want now,
Is to be with you.

I used to be alone,
I used to be without anyone,
But now I have you,
And now I'm glad
That you've tamed me.

Call me a lap dog,
Call me a pet,
Call me a weakling if you will,
But I don't care,
I'm glad that you've tamed me.

I once was idependant,
I once was free,
But now you've tamed me.
I once was a rogue,
I once was tough,
But now you've tamed me.

All I once knew,
Now has changed,
There are new rules,
This is a new game,
But I don't mind,
Because it was I,
That let you tame me.

Kyosuke

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Age 34
Pickering, On
Seen August 8th, 2018
Posted May 17th, 2014
2,485 posts
19.7 Years
Yes I can see some poem/song material there for sure, you used proper song type rhyming words, and at the time its like a poem. You pulled that off very nicely.

I can just picture it being some sort of song now ^^, it was really good.
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Seen March 30th, 2005
Posted March 11th, 2005
1,912 posts
18.6 Years
I think it's a wonderful song, Angel! Seeing as it's a song, the flow is very important. I think you could fix it up a bit more if you're looking for rhymes. Otherwise, the song/poem's meaning and originality is beautiful. ^_^

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