Check to see if your roleplay has been accepted! v.2 Page 5

Started by moon March 12th, 2011 2:39 AM
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moon

they/them
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Posted 23 Hours Ago
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15.5 Years
VelocityQ's RP thread is denied.
You describe the academy pretty well but there is no real background story. The RP feels substance-less. Please add some kind of story for the players to imagine themselves in, and describe why there are criminals there. Incorporate them into the plot?
paired with Ivysaur

Skymin

Age 30
AU
Seen February 18th, 2023
Posted March 16th, 2018
5,114 posts
16.7 Years
buddymps99 RP thread is denied.
You lack any kind of storyline, you don't have a sign up sheet and your spelling and grammar is quite poor. I can see that you're new here, so I suggest that you maybe reread the rules (which can be accessed here!) and perhaps have a look through the roleplays that are already up as a rough guide of what you need for an accepted roleplay!

Skymin

Age 30
AU
Seen February 18th, 2023
Posted March 16th, 2018
5,114 posts
16.7 Years
MasterLink742's RP is denied.
The idea is interesting enough, though you haven't really specified what exactly the plot is, what exactly the setting is, what is happening in this universe nor what the characters are going to do in it. I know with parallel universes, people like keeping the world mysterious so the players can find out on their journey but a few 'whys' and 'hows' incorporated into it would be fantastic, so players know exactly what their signing up to!


And now, MasterLink742, your RP is accepted!

Skymin

Age 30
AU
Seen February 18th, 2023
Posted March 16th, 2018
5,114 posts
16.7 Years
luigimario84's RP thread is declined.
There's no plot, no proper sign up sheet and your grammar, spelling and punctuation is very poor. I suggest reading over the rules thoroughly.

Miss Doronjo's RP is accepted! Sounds interesting! :D

Skymin

Age 30
AU
Seen February 18th, 2023
Posted March 16th, 2018
5,114 posts
16.7 Years
MasterLink742's OOC thread is accepted!

TheFinalWatchman's RP thread is accepted! EXPELLIARMUS!

Roserade's OOC/SU thread is accepted, provided you edit your rules and add in a rating. But it does look very interesting indeed!

Yagerbomb's OOC/SU thread is accepted! May the force be with you.

Skymin

Age 30
AU
Seen February 18th, 2023
Posted March 16th, 2018
5,114 posts
16.7 Years
luigimario84's 'Legendary catcher' RP is declined.
You don't have a rating for one, and two, your plot is fairly vague. There's not much detail on the 'why's and 'how's on the plot. More details, please!

RubberKid's RP is declined.
As interesting as the plot sounds, you have quite poor grammar and punctuation, which is a must when posting anything in these boards. Try reposting again, and adding in a rules section too!

luigimario84's 'Seperation' RP is accepted, but do keep in mind about your punctuation and grammar. Good luck with your first RP!

Skymin

Age 30
AU
Seen February 18th, 2023
Posted March 16th, 2018
5,114 posts
16.7 Years
chef30's RP is accepted! Just keep in mind your spelling, okay?

Fuyu's IC thread is accepted!

Blayze~'s RP is accepted!

Scarf Blade's OOC/SU thread is accepted! Though, being Elfen Lied (and the amount of violence the series has), maybe to put a suggested age against the M, please.

Skymin

Age 30
AU
Seen February 18th, 2023
Posted March 16th, 2018
5,114 posts
16.7 Years
Moogles' OOC/SU is accepted!

Roserade's RP is accepted! Thanks for fixing that up.

Stingray's RP and OOC/SU is accepted! Though, I will add the background story is a little vague. Would you like to add some background story to each individual district as well? It's not compulsory, but it will help your players understand the universe a little more.

Legendarian Mistress' RP is accepted!

Skymin

Age 30
AU
Seen February 18th, 2023
Posted March 16th, 2018
5,114 posts
16.7 Years
toptheworld's RP is accepted!

Aura Rift's RP is accepted, provided you edit in a rating as soon as you can!

Xlugon Pyro's OOC/SU thread and Eight's IC thread are accepted.

Tomandgreen's OOC/SU and RP threads are declined.
Your RP has barely any story whatsoever! This kind of... roleplay, I guess that's what it is, is probably better off in the Other Trivia section as it's not one for a hard story, with more of a gimmick in it than a plot.

PkMnTrainer Yellow's OOC thread is accepted! I'll go edit those things in the IC now, alright!

Skymin

Age 30
AU
Seen February 18th, 2023
Posted March 16th, 2018
5,114 posts
16.7 Years
jasonwolf's Generations has been declined.
I really did like the spooky aura with the music but, as interesting as it is, the story lacks depth for what is happening now with the world. What makes this different from the other journey roleplays? Do you have any twists planned for later on? The start is really great, it's just... missing something!

Supervegeta's Avatar: The Last Airbender- Chaos Uprising OOC/SU is accepted!

Skymin

Age 30
AU
Seen February 18th, 2023
Posted March 16th, 2018
5,114 posts
16.7 Years
Hayzel's (Tobenamed) Region is denied.

First of all, you really should have a few things confirmed before you post, such as the name of the region and the professor's name. If you need help naming things, you should post a post in the Roleplay Discussion Thread and see what everyone else says. You might get a few suggestions, just make sure you don't flood the thread up with stuff. Second, your spoilers are all broken, so presentation-wise, your post comes up with a bunch of [/spoiler] tags. I think that's because you put a '=c.' in the spoiler tags, so you'll need to fix all that up. Third, you have almost no storyline. I know it's a new region, but maybe you could put a small backstory about how the region was found, who the players are, what's happening in the region at the moment etc. Gives players a little insight in what they are actually signing up to. Fourth, you have no rules, no ratings and no sign up sheet, which are essential to all writings.

So, I suggest going through it again, editing what you need, maybe posting (in spoiler tags) some stuff to see if anyone can help you.