As a note, double posting to bump to ask for reviews/etc is against the rules. It is a general problem with fanfiction sections on forums that some people go unreviewed when starting out (my first foray netted me one review, and I know many who got nothing for multiple chapters). Best way to deal with that is to post around in other people's stories (I have seen you make a post already in the Lounge area though so that's a good start already =p), and maybe have a link to your fic in your signature so you're 'seen' more often.
As another beside, I've closed your thread in the Lounge section (there's no need for two after all) - I'll keep this thread here unless you have no intent to keep this going as a story in which case I or Astinus can move it for you to that section.
Anyway I took a glance - there's some interesting parts here (for instance I quite liked the idea of the grunts trying to think of random things to prevent the Alakazam's Mind Reader from working) and there's a good basis for a pretty darn good fight scene there as well. There's some cleaning up that could occur in places though - I'll mention a couple of things just taken from...say, this bit:
Drake and Jane look at each other with concern. Jane "How did you steal it from its master, any well trained pokemon would rather die than be under someones control." Grunt laughs "Well if there isn't a master to die for then it makes it pretty easy, plus our organization has been working on this." showing a dark and red pokeball.
Firstly - you'd want to split your story up into more paragraphs, partly because the laws of writing decree that every time someone different speaks, a new paragraph ought to be started, and partly because it's easier to read when you have each 'part' or idea separated into their own...well separate parts, and presentation is pretty significant for stories on the Internet - one tends to prefer to want to read the story that is well spaced than one that is a wall of text. It is good to see you are not using a different text colour though and when you did paragraph it had the line of spacing - it just needs more to it.
Next is that this piece could use some more proofreading. Stuff like 'showing a dark and red pokeball.' or 'Jane "*dialogue*...' with the out-of-place 'Jane' isn't correctly constructed and can't stand up as its own sentence, along with the missing capital (but there are better ways to word it as I'll mention in a moment). A spell and grammar check would catch a few of these things as well, and a good way to see if what you wrote makes sense is to read your sentences out loud - if it sounds off, then it probably is. That goes for run-on sentences too (sentences that are continued too long by commas, etc instead of being made into separate sentences) - e.g.:
Drake and Jane are sprawled across the floor Drake releases his Poliwrath, it explodes from its pokeball with a powerful Hydro Pump hitting both of the Grunt's pokemon, giving the Rangers a cushion, Jane releases her Mr. Mime, using the Light Screens provided by Mr. Mime, Jane shoots at the Alakazam as the Mr. Mime trades blow after blow with the Alakazam.
Besides the run-on issue, I'd suggest using past tense for stories as it is generally easier to write out - present tense can be done but it usually requires a fair bit of skill and can still come off as sounding awkward. On top of that, although there's some nice description here and there I'd suggest adding even just a bit more to give us more of an idea how things happen, what things/creatures look like, etc. Hence one way to reword that would be to, say:
Drake and Jane lay sprawled across the floor. Grunting with pain, Drake managed to get back up and released his Poliwrath. The blue Pokemon exploded from its pokeball with a powerful Hydro Pump which hit both of the Grunt's pokemon, giving the Rangers a cushion. Meanwhile Jane released her Mr. Mime and got to her feet behind the protection of the Light Screens conjured up by Mr. Mime, before shooting at the Alakazam as the Mr. Mime traded blow after blow with the Alakazam.
A lot of sentences here read oddly like a command of a script rather than a line of description of what is happening in a story - e.g.
Grunt picking up the duffle bag
when 'The Grunt picked up the duffle bag.' fits better.
As for the first quote, using the above techniques/improvements suggested:
Drake and Jane look at each other with concern.
"How did you steal it from its master? Any well trained pokemon would rather die than be under someone's control."
The grunt merely laughed. "Well if there isn't a master to die for then it makes it pretty easy! Plus our organization has been working on this," he added, as he showed the pair a dark-and-red pokeball.
That's a general set of things I spotted anyway and would make a considerable improvement to your story if you applied the above. I hope that was of help to you, and good luck with your story!