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Seen January 14th, 2008
Posted January 14th, 2008
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Goku is now a dimensional traveller with Shenlong as his transport. He enjoyed this job, having the chance to see alternates of his friends. He so happened to go to Mirai Trunk's universe...

"Trunks!" Goku shouted. Trunks turned around. He was standing on a cliff, his clothes torn, His sword was snapped in half, wounds all over him.

"Goku?" Trunks was shocked. He could easily tell it was Goku by his crazy hairstyle and his muscle mass. Even he as a child, through intensive training with Gohan wasn't that strong. He embraced him. Everyone else he knew has died. His mother, his father... His best friend Gohan...(Note that Goten doesn't exist in this universe because Goku and Chichi got killed).

"I sense the threat." Goku said. "He can't be... A Super Saiyan!?"

"It is. He goes by the name Broly." Trunks replied. He looked up at a white dot in the sky.

"Broly huh? I've beat him before... But he's so much stronger..." Goku said.

Goku and Trunks arrived at where Broly landed.

"Kakarot huh?" Broly teased. You still haven't grown up! It's been so many years, and look at you! Still a little wimp." His hatred grew into energy. He powered up to Super Saiyajin form.

"Haaa!!!" Goku and Trunks yelled. They both turned into Super Saiyajin, in a battle stance. Broly charged up a Ki Blast and threw it straight at Goku and Trunks. Trunks got knocked out in one blow!

[End of Part 1]
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Age 29
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Seen January 14th, 2008
Posted January 14th, 2008
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[Part 2]
Goku couldn't do anything. Going Super Saiya-jin 3rd grade would drain his energy out. Super Saiya-jin 2 could be easily wiped out. He had to give it a try.

"Haaaaa!" Goku roared. A blast of energy surged towards his hair. Giving his hair a few more inches in length, and the aura even brighter.

"Kame... Ha... Me... HAAA!!!" Goku cried. His first sensei's trademark attack shot out. Broly took one hand out and stopped it.

"Don't forget I'm the Legendary Super Saiyan! Now die, Kakarot!" Broly increased in muscle mass again. He has at least 5 times bigger than Goku was. He threw his gigantic fist towards Goku, Goku dodging just barely.

"You may be big and strong, but you are slow!" Goku remarked. He ran around in circles shooting Ki Blasts at Broly, nothing working at all.

"I've had enough..." Broly powered up again, His muscle mass bulging more than ever. "Goodbye, Kakarot." He charged a Ki Blast and shot it at Goku.

"KAIOKEN!" Goku screamed. The words echoed in the distant, Goku didn't save himself. He fell back, paralyzed.

"Kakarot..." A voice said. It was the voice of Bardock... Goku knew it. It was his father. "Remember the legend? Once in a thousand years, there will be a Super Saiya-jin? It's not Broly... It is you. You are the true Super Saiya-jin." The voice faded away.
But how could he? Son of a 3rd class warrior... The Legendary Super Saiya-jin? Did Goku do anything outstanding as a Saiya-jin? Everyone could go to the first level, Gohan was even to reach the second level. The third level could be reached by him and Gotenks. Vegeta and Him can reach the fourth level too. That's it! Vegeta used the brute ray, making his transformation artificial. So Goku is the Legendary Super Saiyan. Not Broly... It was him!

"HAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!" Goku cried. He screamed at the top of his lungs. Crimson lightning crackled above Goku. He reverted back to hsi original size, His shirt torn apart with red hair covering it. His tail grew back, his hair flowing longer but not as long as Super Saiya-jin third level.

"What is this!?" Broly cried.

"This is... The True... Legendary... Super..." Goku paused. "SAIYAN!" Pride supported him as he cried out his own races name. He threw both hands back. "Prepare to die... Under the hands of... Kakarot..." He paused one more time. "Ten times... Ka... Me... Ha... Me..." Energy crackled as Goku began to transfer all his energy into it. "HAAAAAA!!!"

10 Kamehamehas shot out, Broly, completely unaware got hit by all 10.

"Good... Job... Go-" Trunks couldn't complete the sentence. He was completely knocked out. Goku reverted back to his kid size and fed Trunks a Senzu Bean. Trunk recovered. Drawing his snapped sword to support himself.

"This is your universe. Give him the final blow." Goku said. Trunks charged all his energy up. "Burning... ATTACK!" Blood began to flow from Broly... Trunks was the last chunk of Saiyan blood in his universe... He was the strongest!

"Trunks, you did well. Your father would be proud of you." Goku just managed to give Trunks a pat on his shoulder.

"See you... If I ever do..." Goku used his Bukujutsu and flew off.

Trunks looked at the Sunset. That was for his father, his mother, Gohan... He picked up his broken sword and walked away. "Until we meet again... Goku."
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Its not to good actually Omega II, it doesnt really have that thribe about it......
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Seen March 30th, 2005
Posted March 11th, 2005
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I thought this fic was quite interesting, and I don't even watch DBZ. XD I think your overall plot is good, but you really need to go into more detail. You should explain the looks of Goku more, perhaps state what he looks like in his Super Saiyan form.

Also, the battle between Goku and Broly could go into more detail as well.

Other than that, I think this is turning out to be a very interesting fic! I do hope you soon write more chapters for this fic. ^____^

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Seen March 30th, 2005
Posted March 11th, 2005
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Well, yes, a one-shot is like good practice though! XD I thin kyou can really make this fic soooo much better! Really, the main thing is detail detail detail. ^o^ As long as you put effort into your work, it will turn out wonderful. But if you don't believe in your writing then you'll never improve. You should always strive to be as best as you can be in any project. ^_~

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Seen March 30th, 2005
Posted March 11th, 2005
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It's all right. Just try add more detail. You tend to quickly jump from one scene to the next without a good enough transition. There's the Fan Fiction Adive thread that got stickied a little bit ago. You should go check it out, there's some useful info. there that should be of help to you. ^___^

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