Topica

Started by Sawyer December 22nd, 2004 9:49 PM
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Posted April 6th, 2011
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"But one man of a million men..." What does this mean you ask? Well it can mean many different things, depending on your perspective, but we focus on the only important one- a man in the army may seem useless as one, but that is not always true, as you will find in this story.

This one's only gonna have 10 chapters, so i'll try to make 'em last. it focuses on a man in an army who believes in himself and his team even at the most hopeless situations. believing in yourself clearly pays off, and the real power of one... is hope.

"Is the bridge ready for battle?" Captain Reeska asked worryingly. They were about to face the great war of their time, but this was only the beginning. Long ago, robots started controlling Earth, and their will was so great that all the humans fled to an underground city called "Topica", where they would have to endure multiple attacks by the mechanical menaces. "Yes, sir!" said the Bridge Warfare Conductor. It was clear that the humans were ready for the first battle, the beginning of an almost everlasting war. "I'm scared, daddy," said the child of Chrono Tsuka. "Everything's going to be okay, Jexon," said Chrono, lifting his only son Jexon. "Just have hope. Just have hope." Jexon didn't have much hope, nor did almost everyone in the entire city. But Chrono did. He knew that somehow, they would get through this. He didn't know that he had great power, and another resistance did also. Chrono was inside his home when he heard a beep on the computer. He went to check it, and it said: Chrono, meet me at Brooxon Cross 5 He obeyed the computer, and when he got there, he saw a shady figure. It turned around, and he noticed it was a woman. "Hello, Chrono, my name is Zaenos. Let me show you something," she said in a calm voice. She led him to a hovercraft, and they got in. The craft flew to a strange place that looked like a giant ship. They got out and walked in the ship.

well, that's not a chapter, just the intro XD i'll post chapter 1 when i figure out more about what i should write.

Kyosuke

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Started out really well, and ended in the same way. A war type fan-fic should be intereting, and the prolouge that you did pretty much described how it felt being in war (well the beginning anyway XD), but it should be very interesting how this turns up because it already caught my interest.
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Seen December 14th, 2013
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yay! okay umm... let me think...

He took one look at the interior of the ship and his mouth dropped open. It was filled with robotic warfare tons of it. "Can't wait to go to war, huh?" Zaenos said sarcastically. "In fact, I really can't wait. Unlike most people, I have faith in our forces," Chrono said eagerly. She scoffed, and called someone named Creatine. "Is he the one we were looking for?" Creatine said seriously. "He's the one," Zaenos replied. "Then it is time," he said strangely. He walked to the head of the ship and Chrono followed. "We give you a gun and you shoot... I wish it was that easy," Creatine said, "I am the captain of this ship and I lead part of the rebellion. I obviously ask very much of you. Your first mission... is to get there." He pointed to an extremely tall tower. "Get inside there, and you'll see a bunch of guards. Your job is to get past them. I have faith that you will be able to do that, and much more," he said solemnly, "Take the Sathle 9 to get there, and get out when you're ready." Creatine pointed to a pod with a turret in the front. Chrono got in, and was immediately launched at what seemed like the speed of light. He was going so fast that he could hardly control the pod. He started to see a pack of flying robots, but he was going too fast for them to see. When he saw the base of the tower, he slowed it down, and landed it to the ground. He walked through the door of the tower, and saw 6 guards standing around talking. They didn't notice him until he took out a submachine gun and shot the closest one to him. They ran back to the edge of the first floor, and pulled out handguns. He ran behind a pillar and jumped to the other side, shooting another one dead. Then a guard jumped out in front of him, but Chrono had really good reflexes. He shot the guard, and jumped into the middle noticing the 3 guards hiding behind pillars. He walked up, and shot to the side, and turned and shot the next one. Then he jumped up and shot down the last of them. He walked to the door at the end, and opened it up. He said on the speaker on his mouth,"I'm in."

how was that? IMO, this seems a little like the Matrix oO XD
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Posted March 11th, 2005
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I read your Intro. and your first chapter. n_n I think they are really good. They truly are interesting, as most war stories are. I have one suggestion: try using paragraphs. ^^ It just makes everything easier to read. Plus, paragreaphs help to separate different scenes and thoughts etc. Overall nice job ACManga! I think your first chapter was a bit like the Matrix. XD

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