The Shadow of Broken Dreams

Started by Sumomo & Kotoko December 29th, 2004 7:11 PM
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Sumomo & Kotoko

Seen February 14th, 2012
Posted February 14th, 2012
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This is 2 songs that I mixed-(Shadow by Ashlee Simpson,and Boulevard Of Broken Dreams by Green Day.)

The Shadow of Broken Dreams

I was six years old
When my parents went away
I was stuck inside a broken life
I couldn't wish away

I walk a lonely road
The only one that I have ever known
Don't know where it goes
But it's home to me and I walk alone

My shadows the only one that walks beside me
My shallow hearts the only thing that's beating
Sometimes I wish someone out there will find me
Till then I walk alone

All the days collided
One less perfect than the next
I was stuck inside someone else's life and always second best
Oh, I love you now 'cause now I realize
That it's safe outside to come alive in my identity
So if you're listening
There's so much more to me you haven't seen

My shadows the only one that walks beside me
My shallow hearts the only thing that's beating
Sometimes I wish someone out there will find me
Till then I walk alone

I was living in the shadow
Of someone else's dream
Trying to find a hand to hold but every touch felt cold to me
I'm living in a new day
I'm living it for me
And now that I am wide awake
Then I can finally be...

I walk this empty street
On the Boulevard of broken dreams
Where the city sleeps
And I'm the only one and I walk alone

My shadows the only one that walks beside me
My shallow hearts the only thing that's beating
Sometimes I wish someone out there will find me
Till then I walk alone!

I walk this empty street
On the Boulevard of broken dreams
Where the city sleeps
And I'm the only one and I walk alone
I walk this empty street
On the Boulevard of broken dreams
Where the city sleeps
And I'm the only one and I walk alone......

Kyosuke

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Thats a really good two song combination, it had somewhat of a nice poetic flow to it, and you did an excellent job combining the two songs, but something just feels missing to it that I can't identify right now.

Ashlee Simpson and Green Day, should do a collaberation after reading that XD.
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That was truly a great poem/song Raven! ^_____________^ I think I only spotted one spelling error, but other than that, your poem is very well written. I believe this poem expresses how some people try to reach out but are unnoticed, so they feel as if there's not a soul in the world who even cares about them. This, unfortunatley, leads to some...*ahem*...most unwanted thoughts in their minds. Awsome job! =D

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Sumomo & Kotoko

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Posted February 14th, 2012
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....*sighs* You have a point...*sighs many times* Why do you have to like gothic stuff!?
Cuz gothic is cool-(some times).
That was truly a great poem/song Raven! ^_____________^ I think I only spotted one spelling error, but other than that, your poem is very well written. I believe this poem expresses how some people try to reach out but are unnoticed, so they feel as if there's not a soul in the world who even cares about them. This, unfortunatley, leads to some...*ahem*...most unwanted thoughts in their minds. Awsome job! =D

~Kelsey
Thanx Kelsey :D Oh,and could you tell me where the spelling error is?? :\
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Posted March 11th, 2005
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This is 2 songs that I mixed-(Shadow by Ashlee Simpson,and Boulevard Of Broken Dreams by Green Day.)

The Shadow of Broken Dreams

I was six years old
When my parents went away
I was stuck inside a broken life
I couldn't wish away

I walk a lonely road
The only one that I have ever known
Don't know where it goes
But it's home to me and I walk alone

My shadows the only one that walks beside me
My shallow hearts the only thing that's beating
Sometimes I wish someone out there will find me
Till then I walk alone

All the days collided
One less perfect than the next
I was stuck inside someone else's life and always second best
Oh, I love you now 'cause now I realize
That it's safe outside to come alive in my identity
So if you're listening
There's so much more to me you haven't seen

My shadows the only one that walks beside me
My shallow hearts the only thing that's beating
Sometimes I wish someone out there will find me
Till then I walk alone

I was living in the shadow
Of someone else's dream
Trying to find a hand to hold but every touch felt cold to me
I'm living in a new day
I'm living it for me
And now that I am wide awake
Then I can finally be...

I walk this empty street
On the Boulevard of broken dreams
Where the city sleeps
And I'm the only one and I walk alone

My shadows the only one that walks beside me
My shallow hearts the only thing that's beating
Sometimes I wish someone out there will find me
Till then I walk alone!

I walk this empty street
On the Boulevard of broken dreams
Where the city sleeps
And I'm the only one and I walk alone
I walk this empty street
On the Boulevard of broken dreams
Where the city sleeps
And I'm the only one and I walk alone......
It's actually more of a grammar error. Well, it's nothing to be worried about, that's why I didn't mention it. But since you asked, here it is:
hearts = heart's

From the way you used it in your poem, you were showing possession, therefore you just needed an apostraphy. ^____^

~Kelsey
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..*) .*)
(. (.` ♥ Kelsey

Now officially moving to a new name, with Steve's OK, I shall now be known as Mori Seirei. ^.~

Sumomo & Kotoko

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Posted February 14th, 2012
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It's actually more of a grammar error. Well, it's nothing to be worried about, that's why I didn't mention it. But since you asked, here it is:
hearts = heart's

From the way you used it in your poem, you were showing possession, therefore you just needed an apostraphy. ^____^

~Kelsey
Oh,thanx.I'll check for spelling errors when I mix other songs. :D :D
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Posted March 11th, 2005
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It's really OK, I just like to help people out with little things too. Sometimes, one may accidentally spell a word wrong that it gives it a whole new meaning. XD So if I see that, I point it out just in case. ^___^ Keep up the great work on your songs and poems, Raven. ^^

~Kelsey
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..*) .*)
(. (.` ♥ Kelsey

Now officially moving to a new name, with Steve's OK, I shall now be known as Mori Seirei. ^.~

Sumomo & Kotoko

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Posted February 14th, 2012
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It's really OK, I just like to help people out with little things too. Sometimes, one may accidentally spell a word wrong that it gives it a whole new meaning. XD So if I see that, I point it out just in case. ^___^ Keep up the great work on your songs and poems, Raven. ^^

~Kelsey
Thanx muches. :D I might mix another song when I get back.I'll have t find some to mix.Thanx for the comments every one :D :D