I will fall on my knees

Started by Midori Chi December 30th, 2004 5:29 PM
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Texas
Seen October 27th, 2019
Posted September 8th, 2016
5,522 posts
18.8 Years
Okay...once AGAIN...I'd like to share another song by me...

I know this happened one but, I just can't let you go.
We still have things in common and I bet, that, you know.
It's still hard to be-lieve that we're only friends.
I have some words to tell you that will never,ever,end....

I will fall on my knees....to be with you.
I will fall on my knees....just to do what you do.
I will fall on my knees....cause we're on-ly friends....
I will fall on my knees!

I have this in my memory, like it's still,going, on.
I really try,everyday to make it, be gone.
I just can't take it. I'll have to live, like a nor-mal one.
Yeah, we're friends, through all the ends. And we do have fun...

I will fall on my knees....to be with you.
I will fall on my knees....just to do what you do.
I will fall on my knees....cause we're on-ly friends....
I will fall on my knees!

I will fall on my knees!!
Age 30
In my imagination...?
Seen January 2nd, 2005
Posted January 2nd, 2005
70 posts
18.4 Years
Like usual, this is a very good song, Trappy. =3 Although the next step you could take is making it a little longer. ^______^ Great job once again!

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Seen August 8th, 2018
Posted May 17th, 2014
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19.7 Years
I agree with Riyuko, the song content is very nice and you're good at writing these things, but its not very long and thats the only thing now that can be improved right now.
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Seen February 14th, 2012
Posted February 14th, 2012
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18.8 Years
Yeah...I based this on the feelings for this one person...Anyway...thanx for the compliment!
Who is this 'one person'?? :\

EDIT:Oh yeah,the song is great!! But like every one else is saying,it could be longer.But thats the only thing wrong with it. :D :D

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Seen March 30th, 2005
Posted March 11th, 2005
1,912 posts
18.6 Years
Well, seeing as I don't know what the rythm is for your song, I had to guess. XD But, from what I've seen the song doesn't seem half-bad. I might recommend making a few more stanzas, just to lengthen the song a bit more. Unless, of course, if you repeat the chorus a few times. ^_~ It was an overall nice song, trap-door. Great job! =D

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Texas
Seen October 27th, 2019
Posted September 8th, 2016
5,522 posts
18.8 Years
Er..actually...I DOES repeat the chorus twice at the end....I'll fix that!

I know this happened one but, I just can't let you go.
We still have things in common and I bet, that, you know.
It's still hard to be-lieve that we're only friends.
I have some words to tell you that will never,ever,end....

I will fall on my knees....to be with you.
I will fall on my knees....just to do what you do.
I will fall on my knees....cause we're on-ly friends....
I will fall on my knees!

I have this in my memory, like it's still,going, on.
I really try,everyday to make it, be gone.
I just can't take it. I'll have to live, like a nor-mal one.
Yeah, we're friends, through all the ends. And we do have fun...

I will fall on my knees....to be with you.
I will fall on my knees....just to do what you do.
I will fall on my knees....cause we're on-ly friends....
I will fall on my knees!

I will fall on my knees....to be with you.
I will fall on my knees....just to do what you do.
I will fall on my knees....cause we're on-ly friends....
I will fall on my knees!

I will fall on my knees!!