Poisons [PG-13]

Started by aRedMoon December 31st, 2004 8:08 PM
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aRedMoon

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PC A/N: Guess what? This is another song fic I've done. I liked it a lot, when I wrote it way back in April... yeah. So I think I'll go ahead and post it here. And yeah, warning, if you understand the implication, it's defiantly PG-13. If you don't get it... then oh well. Won't make that big of a difference. Enjoy the writings of a very depressed boy~


A/N: Well, here's another little songfic-y thing... it's written to "Toxic" by good ole Britney. And no, it's not referring to anyone in particular, just a general boy...


Poisons

Baby, cant you see
Im calling
A guy like you
Should wear a warning
Its dangerous
Im fallin


It wasn't right. He knew it... but the feeling... it wasn't something he could just give up. It gave him the energy to continue, to know that he was still able to feel. But deep down, he still knew it was wrong... but the poison... it was sweet...

Theres no escape
I cant wait
I need a hit
Baby, give me it
Youre dangerous
Im lovin it


White wasn't nearly as deep a color as red, and it didn't generate the same powerful feeling... the red overshadowed the white... it was wrong, but he didn't care...

Too high
Cant come down
Losing my head
Spinning round and round
Do you feel me now


The feeling he got while commiting the sin, entering his poisonous paradise, it was like nothing he had ever felt in his life before... it was just unbelievable. He couldn't help himself from continuing...

With a taste of your lips
Im on a ride
You're toxic I'm slipping under
With a taste of a poison paradise
Im addicted to you
Dont you know that youre toxic
And I love what you do
Dont you know that youre toxic


Oh how he wished that he could poison his soul continuously, feel that powerful feeling that nothing could ever beat... but he knew he couldn't, he had to continue... but when he was alone...

Its getting late
To give you up
I took a sip
From my devil's cup
Slowly
Its taking over me


He could poison himself as he pleased, spilling himself with the two colors he treasured the most... sending that pulsating feeling through his body... let the poisionous sin take over... lead him into the hell he was bound to go to...

Too high
Cant come down
Its in the air
And its all around
Can you feel me now


A tight yelp slipped from his mouth as a slight slip brought sharp pain... but it wasn't anything to his sweet poison... the red and white poisons he was forever lusting for... he needed those... he craved for those... they gave him meaning...

With a taste of your lips
Im on a ride
You're toxic I'm slipping under
With a taste of a poison paradise
Im addicted to you
Dont you know that youre toxic
And I love what you do
Dont you know that youre toxic


His additions, his sweet poisons, were all he wanted, but he needed more. He needed someone, someone to share his poisons with... someone who would crave and enjoy the sweet poisons of life as much as he did...

Intoxicate me now
With your lovin' now
I think I'm ready now
I think I'm ready now
Intoxicate me now
With your lovin' now
I think I'm ready now


But there was no such person... no one would enjoy the sweet taste of poison... the sharp feeling of the metal pressing against skin... the sweet emotions flowing into his mind as he reached his peak... he was alone in his obsessions... alone in his poisonous paridise...
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Oh.... dear. Well, as writing it's excellent, but the theme is... I just hope that you're serious about it not being about anyone in particular. But the feeling of the writing is good, mysterious... *will think of more to say later*


"One reason why mathematics enjoys special esteem, above all other sciences, is that its laws are absolutely certain and indisputable, while those of other sciences are to some extent debatable and in constant danger of being overthrown by newly discovered facts."
Albert Einstein

"What science can there be more noble, more excellent, more useful for men, more admirably high and demonstrative than mathematics."
Benjamin Franklin

"Mathematics, rightly viewed, possesses not only truth, but supreme beauty – a beauty cold and austere, like that of sculpture, without appeal to any part of our weaker nature, without the gorgeous trappings of paintings or music, yet sublimely pure and capable of a stern perfection such as only the greatest art can show."
Bertrand Russell

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Maybe I should start a ratings system like Frosty's for OW. :P


"One reason why mathematics enjoys special esteem, above all other sciences, is that its laws are absolutely certain and indisputable, while those of other sciences are to some extent debatable and in constant danger of being overthrown by newly discovered facts."
Albert Einstein

"What science can there be more noble, more excellent, more useful for men, more admirably high and demonstrative than mathematics."
Benjamin Franklin

"Mathematics, rightly viewed, possesses not only truth, but supreme beauty – a beauty cold and austere, like that of sculpture, without appeal to any part of our weaker nature, without the gorgeous trappings of paintings or music, yet sublimely pure and capable of a stern perfection such as only the greatest art can show."
Bertrand Russell

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aRedMoon

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Thanks guys... *hmm*

Might not post anything more for awhile...
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Come on Greggy... we'll rate it :P


"One reason why mathematics enjoys special esteem, above all other sciences, is that its laws are absolutely certain and indisputable, while those of other sciences are to some extent debatable and in constant danger of being overthrown by newly discovered facts."
Albert Einstein

"What science can there be more noble, more excellent, more useful for men, more admirably high and demonstrative than mathematics."
Benjamin Franklin

"Mathematics, rightly viewed, possesses not only truth, but supreme beauty – a beauty cold and austere, like that of sculpture, without appeal to any part of our weaker nature, without the gorgeous trappings of paintings or music, yet sublimely pure and capable of a stern perfection such as only the greatest art can show."
Bertrand Russell

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aRedMoon

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Don't have anything else I really wanna post :P

Maybe after I finish the Speak piece I've been playing with.
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I'm working on one but it's at home... it's based on the teapot song. But it's a fanfic not OW.


"One reason why mathematics enjoys special esteem, above all other sciences, is that its laws are absolutely certain and indisputable, while those of other sciences are to some extent debatable and in constant danger of being overthrown by newly discovered facts."
Albert Einstein

"What science can there be more noble, more excellent, more useful for men, more admirably high and demonstrative than mathematics."
Benjamin Franklin

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Bertrand Russell

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Well, the theme is interesting. ^^ Since this is like a poem/song/fanfic, I feel that the overall plot of it is pretty good. I sure got the message anyways. XD I like how after part of the song is done, then it's like the song stops and a narrator takes over for a bit to kind of explain that stanza. I think it was a pretty good fic IMO. ^__^

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aRedMoon

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Thanks guys. ^_^

I actually normally listen to the song as I re-read it, if it's timed right you can finish all the naratives in about the same amount of time as the verse. So, essentially, you can read the story along to the song. ^_^;;

*feels kinda giddy*
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o_O

*looks @ CaRtOON*

I know the *dies* thing is your trademark, but couldn't you have left it out considering the theme of Greggy's writing? XD


"One reason why mathematics enjoys special esteem, above all other sciences, is that its laws are absolutely certain and indisputable, while those of other sciences are to some extent debatable and in constant danger of being overthrown by newly discovered facts."
Albert Einstein

"What science can there be more noble, more excellent, more useful for men, more admirably high and demonstrative than mathematics."
Benjamin Franklin

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Bertrand Russell

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...o.o

Erm... don't die because of t3h suicidal writing...
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Don't worry Greggy, I'm pretty sure she won't die...

... at least I hope so...


"One reason why mathematics enjoys special esteem, above all other sciences, is that its laws are absolutely certain and indisputable, while those of other sciences are to some extent debatable and in constant danger of being overthrown by newly discovered facts."
Albert Einstein

"What science can there be more noble, more excellent, more useful for men, more admirably high and demonstrative than mathematics."
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aRedMoon

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She better not. <_<

That'd really, really suck. >>
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