Misconception Page 2

Started by Act February 21st, 2005 12:39 PM
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Lily

◕ ‿‿ ◕ double rainbow.

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New Joisey
Seen February 26th, 2017
Posted June 26th, 2011
3,329 posts
18.7 Years
After several minutes, Cancer spoke, ((I dont remember what happened to the boy.))
What do you mean by that?! ;o;



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Good chapter...I really envy word choices. I really do. It just seems to fit together (like a puzzle, almost). Yet I'm still having a hard time conjuring up a sufficient imagery of the scenes. Your details are splendid - marvelous - whatever *adjectives* I can think of, but it might just be me, or I just can't picture anything. O-O; Well, some of them I can, but I'd really love to see more descriptions.

For 'Carsu' and Cancer's dialogue, it basically showed what they did and all, although the dialogue itself was nicely written. The only shred I could find was 'forest,' 'rock wall,' and things of that sort.

Plot is moving along smoothly. Gina was portrayed well. =D I laughed a bit at the hair part. XP The first part had more descriptions in it than the second one; both were easy to understand, however. At least, I thought so. >> <<

lol either way I enjoyed reading this. :D



Oh, and if you'd like, I'll try changing the title of the thread. If I can't, then I'll consider myself a failure as a worthless mod and ask someone else to, probably the highly skilled Niko he comes back.

o.o;...I think.

I'll just shut up now. ;;


EDIT: OMG yay I did it!11 :D

( ‿‿ ) PM me for a contract.

Act

Let's Go Rangers!

Madison Square Garden
Seen March 16th, 2009
Posted December 15th, 2007
528 posts
18.5 Years
Haha, thank you very much ^^;

****, I really need to work on my imagery, huh? ::kicks something:: Not sure why I can't get that down. Practice makes perfect, I s'pose.

Carsu... it took me forever to come up with a name I didn't hate... o.o;; But it seems pokemon should have names to, ne? Thank you babynames.com, I guess xD

Lily, the Uber-mod who can change titles!!!1one :D:D:D

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