After several minutes, Cancer spoke, ((I dont remember what happened to the boy.))
What do you mean by that?! ;o;
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Good chapter...I really envy word choices. I really do. It just seems to fit together (like a puzzle, almost). Yet I'm still having a hard time conjuring up a sufficient imagery of the scenes. Your details are splendid - marvelous - whatever *adjectives* I can think of, but it might just be me, or I just can't picture anything. O-O; Well, some of them I can, but I'd really love to see more descriptions.
For 'Carsu' and Cancer's dialogue, it basically showed what they did and all, although the dialogue itself was nicely written. The only shred I could find was 'forest,' 'rock wall,' and things of that sort.
Plot is moving along smoothly. Gina was portrayed well. =D I laughed a bit at the hair part. XP The first part had more descriptions in it than the second one; both were easy to understand, however. At least, I thought so. >> <<
lol either way I enjoyed reading this. :D
Oh, and if you'd like, I'll try changing the title of the thread. If I can't, then I'll consider myself a failure as a worthless mod and ask someone else to, probably the highly skilled Niko he comes back.
****, I really need to work on my imagery, huh? ::kicks something:: Not sure why I can't get that down. Practice makes perfect, I s'pose.
Carsu... it took me forever to come up with a name I didn't hate... o.o;; But it seems pokemon should have names to, ne? Thank you babynames.com, I guess xD
Lily, the Uber-mod who can change titles!!!1one :D:D:D