In The Darkness

Started by Khaos Angel March 13th, 2005 6:36 PM
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Khaos Angel

Bunny Apprentice To Blue

Age 32
Seen April 6th, 2005
Posted March 19th, 2005
232 posts
18.2 Years
Ok. I just did this about 10 minutes ago. It's kind a short song like thing, I like it even if no one else does and that's why I'm posting it here.


In the darkness
You cannot see
The tears I bleed
After you hurt me.

In the darkness
Is where I lie
As I try
To dry my eyes.

In the darkness
I'm at home
And I feel safe
Because I'm alone.

In the darkness
I feel no fear
Because I can escape
In the darkness.

Natsuki

.bluefang.

Age 33
Female
Minnesota
Seen July 16th, 2015
Posted March 22nd, 2012
5,046 posts
18.2 Years
Oh, I lurve this poem! <3 I think it's pretty good, the meaning's kinda hard to decifer but I'll give it a try. ^.~

Well, to me this poem is kind of pointingout how people can really hurt you and put you down. When someone's heart falls into peril and sadness, then people aften turn to darkness rather than light and goodness.

All I have to suggest for you is punctuation. You need to have some form of punctuation at the end of each line in any poem to make sure the flow stays consistant. ^.~

~Kelsey