Oh, I lurve this poem! <3 I think it's pretty good, the meaning's kinda hard to decifer but I'll give it a try. ^.~
Well, to me this poem is kind of pointingout how people can really hurt you and put you down. When someone's heart falls into peril and sadness, then people aften turn to darkness rather than light and goodness.
All I have to suggest for you is punctuation. You need to have some form of punctuation at the end of each line in any poem to make sure the flow stays consistant. ^.~
~Kelsey