*Points at Breezy's post* I'll ditto that, and besdies, I've seen mega harsh reviewing over the years and you haven't gotten any. We're just trying to give you some helpful pointers ;) Cause see, fics should be like actual stories, with the paragraphing explaining what happened. Like for instance, you could start out the very beginning with describing the resort and then have dialogue go something like:
"Here we are, Quilava!" Marina said, motioning to the fire Pokmon at her side. "Isn't it beautiful?"
"Oh my God!" Quilava said, staring in awe.
"This is the Pokmon Vacation Resort!" Marina said excitedly.
See? That's not that hard ^^ Try out the paragraphing, I guarantee you'll improve.
~Chibi~;249;