Unchained Melody

Started by oni flygon March 16th, 2005 8:20 PM
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Well, here I am again with my poems! Hope you guys will enjoy it! ^__^ The reason I named it "Unchained Melody" is that I got the melody from the song "Unchained Melody." So if you sing that song with this... it will kinda fit... O_o;; Enjoy the poem anyways! Comments and criticisms are always accepted! ^_^

Unchained Melody

Oh love my love
I need you here.
I need you near,
To take away my fear.

Oh love my love
Youve been always there.
You always care.
You clothe me when Im bare.

Oh love my love
Please here my plea.
Throw your arms around me,
And give me glee.

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Dude, I tried to do it to the song, maybe I have the wrong version.

I have the Righteous Brothers one (The original).

Where it says "Oh, my love, my darling, I've hungered for your touch.." it doesn't go with your one of "Oh, love, my love, I need you here..".

Like, it doesn't fit like, perfectly.

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Well, here I am again with my poems! Hope you guys will enjoy it! ^__^ The reason I named it "Unchained Melody" is that I got the melody from the song "Unchained Melody." So if you sing that song with this... it will kinda fit... O_o;; Enjoy the poem anyways! Comments and criticisms are always accepted! ^_^

Unchained Melody

Oh love my love
I need you here.
I need you near,
To take away my fear.

Oh love my love
Youve been always there.
You always care.
You clothe me when Im bare.

Oh love my love
Please here my plea.
Throw your arms around me,
And give me glee.
Fweee! ^o^ Another poem by Niko. <3 This one is really cute. 8D It makes you think of someone who is so in love with another that he'd do anything for the one he loves. <3 It's short and sweet, one of my favorite kinds! ^o^

Nice work Niko, I lurved it! XD *stamps the "Kelsey Seal of Approval" on Niko's poem* :3

~Kelsey

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I love it! <3

But I feel like the song doesn't have an ending point, it makes me want to hear more. *_*

Was that intended? xD; But I still <3 it. n___n


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Miyu, you were the first one to find out the syntax of my poem...
It's true that the rythm in the last stanza is uneven... and it leaves you hanging...well...I intended that... XD
You see, when you long for someone and when you just wish that you could love that person more, you get this sudden stop when you go back to reality. The fact that the poem ended, you go back to reality and you realize that love itself can be pretty much the echoes or the ringings of the last words of everything... like.. when I hug my friend goodbye, and I tell her to have a good day, I always have a sense of hanging...something that is unfinished... and I wanted to portray that in the last stanza... =D

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