This is a song I wrote recently and I am fully open to any criticism (but no flaming!) on it. I especially need to know if the meaning is clear...
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Oh my flower, do not die
How you wilt, it tears my eye
What is wrong, what did I do
To make one as weak as you?
Was it no water or lack of air
Or sunlight or soil, it's not fair
I cannot live if your petals fall
Why do you no longer stand tall?
Let the healing rain come on you
You don't need to remain blue
In the past you always thrived
In acid rain, you still survived
What broke your immortality?
Please, my flower, answer me
Your beauty lit up my younger self
I thrived too, all thanks to your help
I am your butterfly, nectar's a trend
But not if you're gaunt and weakened
There was something that wished nothing
In your life which I need so
Don't die, flower
Need you now
Lift the dark spell
Pray hard, be well
If you leave me
I too'll die
Lily of my soul
Let's fight the evil
Let us say a prayer or two
Which will bring back life to you
You're my talents, hopes, and dreams
Lose the magic by no means
Could it be faith that needs to be here?
Are doubts your wekness and fear?
I planted you with belief and grace
Now I sense sadness on your face
I must rid it, it's a sin
Mystery poison kills within
Spirit, flower
Spare an hour
I'll find some way
Till then, stay here, don't go away
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Yes, this song has no chorus... Anyways when I wrote this song, I felt like I was not enjoying the things I like as much, not being good at the things I'm good at, that type of thing. I hope the metaphor gets across...

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