There were some small typos, but you'll catch them when you re-edit this. That's what happens when you write late at night. I understand, unfortunately. =_='
Anyway, I noticed the formatting is somewhat off. It's hard to read the story with everything in one block. I know paragraphing on a forum is awkward, so try it like this, maybe:
“Silence, boy!” cried the Stouland, not releasing how loud he spoke at first, then turned his volume down somewhat. “The party must have gotten lost somewhere in the forest; you know how they are sometimes.”
“But Sir, there has been word of Drapion bandits on this side of the river.”
“Now listen to me. I will hear no more of this nonsense or I’ll have you demoted a rank.”
The Mightyena soon kept his words to himself and lay his head against his chest in disappointment.
I also changed the font to make it easier to read, and edited out the typos. The font is Times New Roman size three.