Please Forgive me

Started by [Technya] March 20th, 2005 1:23 AM
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Age 37
Female
South of Heaven, East of Hell, just past Gone Mad Boulevard
Seen July 5th, 2015
Posted August 18th, 2010
2,465 posts
18.5 Years
Please, forgive my ignorance,
But I just have to ask.
Was I ever in your grace?
Did you ever look upon my face and see the pain?

Did I ever betray you?
Was it something I forgot to do?
Feels like you forgot me and left me alone
Am I so insignificant that you left me to fend on my own?

Please, I know its ignorant to ask,
But, why did you give me life when I was meant to only suffer?
Why did you plan for me such fate?
A fate with sadness, distress and hate.

I hope this doesnt make me any less loved by you.
I never knew what love was like nor did I know you.
They say you love us all,
If indeed you do, why have you let me fall?

Please, I know you havent forgotten me,
I know were all part of your plan, but what part am I to be?
If I leave will it destroy your plans?
Would you cry if I let go of your hands?

Have you ever met anyone as unfortunate?
I realize I sound ungrateful, believe me I am not.
Just knowing it was another day meant I was still around,
Even though I only frowned.

Perhaps someday youll turn my misery around.
Until then expect more sadness from my part,
Often did I think you abandoned me and broke my heart
I still wonder if all my suffering is my own fault.

Please, answer my prayer.
Why have you abandoned me? It feels as if you dont care.
Please, please forgive me Lord,
It just feels like Im lost in another world

I cant take much of this
I know the price for my own annihilation
But it seems much easier now that I know its just my execution
Lord, I know you were always there for me
Just make sure you look after others and prevent this fate that was bestowed upon me
.~Proud Ashaholic~.
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Age 35
Tough one... It's an island IIRC... Australia!
Seen May 18th, 2007
Posted April 8th, 2005
2,219 posts
18.5 Years
It's nice, could EASILY be turned into a song, I an see that with a piano and strings as a background, and I can see it actually getting to a part with some big notes an stuff, like a real big ballad.

The only thing is, I'm an Athiest, and the song is addressed to god, but that's easily changed around, by replacing lord with darling or something, since it's not like you were trying to throw it in my face :P

I am 100% serious about that being turned into a song aswell, I could try to get something going to it.....

Natsuki

.bluefang.

Age 33
Female
Minnesota
Seen July 16th, 2015
Posted March 22nd, 2012
5,046 posts
18.2 Years
Please, forgive my ignorance,
But I just have to ask.
Was I ever in your grace?
Did you ever look upon my face and see the pain?

Did I ever betray you?
Was it something I forgot to do?
Feels like you forgot me and left me alone
Am I so insignificant that you left me to fend on my own?

Please, I know its ignorant to ask,
But, why did you give me life when I was meant to only suffer?
Why did you plan for me such fate?
A fate with sadness, distress and hate.

I hope this doesnt make me any less loved by you.
I never knew what love was like nor did I know you.
They say you love us all,
If indeed you do, why have you let me fall?

Please, I know you havent forgotten me,
I know were all part of your plan, but what part am I to be?
If I leave will it destroy your plans?
Would you cry if I let go of your hands?

Have you ever met anyone as unfortunate?
I realize I sound ungrateful, believe me I am not.
Just knowing it was another day meant I was still around,
Even though I only frowned.

Perhaps someday youll turn my misery around.
Until then expect more sadness from my part,
Often did I think you abandoned me and broke my heart
I still wonder if all my suffering is my own fault.

Please, answer my prayer.
Why have you abandoned me? It feels as if you dont care.
Please, please forgive me Lord,
It just feels like Im lost in another world

I cant take much of this
I know the price for my own annihilation
But it seems much easier now that I know its just my execution
Lord, I know you were always there for me
Just make sure you look after others and prevent this fate that was bestowed upon me
Awwwwwwwwwws! <3 This poem was soooo wonderful! =3 I really makes you wonder why God put us on earht. You wonder what his plans for each of us are. Some are to die young...while others grow to old ages and share their wisdom with the new generations.

God truly has a plan for every single person he places on this earth, it's just a matter of finding that place. ^___^

I only have one suggestions for ya. ^^ There's a few lines in this poem that don't have any punctuation at the end. ^^ Yesh I know, I'm picky. XD But if you could fix that then your poem's flow can increase dramatically. ^^

Awsome work yet again Shadow! ^___^ I have to say I'm a realy fan of your work. =D

~Kelsey
Age 37
Female
South of Heaven, East of Hell, just past Gone Mad Boulevard
Seen July 5th, 2015
Posted August 18th, 2010
2,465 posts
18.5 Years
It's nice, could EASILY be turned into a song, I an see that with a piano and strings as a background, and I can see it actually getting to a part with some big notes an stuff, like a real big ballad.

The only thing is, I'm an Athiest, and the song is addressed to god, but that's easily changed around, by replacing lord with darling or something, since it's not like you were trying to throw it in my face :P

I am 100% serious about that being turned into a song aswell, I could try to get something going to it.....
Thanks Lion Heart! ^_^
Yeah, believe it or not it was meant to at first be a song but >.< found it more as a poem. I, myself am not Christian but this poem is more of a question of faith. These were just questions I used to ask when I was Christian.


Awwwwwwwwwws! <3 This poem was soooo wonderful! =3 I really makes you wonder why God put us on earht. You wonder what his plans for each of us are. Some are to die young...while others grow to old ages and share their wisdom with the new generations.

God truly has a plan for every single person he places on this earth, it's just a matter of finding that place. ^___^

I only have one suggestions for ya. ^^ There's a few lines in this poem that don't have any punctuation at the end. ^^ Yesh I know, I'm picky. XD But if you could fix that then your poem's flow can increase dramatically. ^^

Awsome work yet again Shadow! ^___^ I have to say I'm a realy fan of your work. =D

~Kelsey
OMG! Thanks so much, I just adore your work as well.
LOL I went through it a couple of times, guess I missed a few. I'm not good with punctuation but I'm working on it lol.
.~Proud Ashaholic~.
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