I can never ~short poem~

Started by fallen_angel March 2nd, 2006 5:44 AM
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Age 30
Female
With phantom_zangetsu ^.~
Seen March 7th, 2014
Posted July 24th, 2011
238 posts
18.2 Years
HEy everybody here was a poem I made a long time ago, but forgot to post it.

I can never get you out of my mind,
I can never stop worrying about you,
Everywhere I go its you I try to find,
Blame me you can even sue.

But I can never look away.
I can never do just that,
since you own my only friendship,
since you own my whole heart.

Did you like it?

Spoiler:
~*~My PC Family~*~
~My pair: phantom_zangetsu , My Big Sisters .: Dreamer :., Midori Chi, My father Cybex Mewtwo, my brother karasuma My brother-in-law code zero the deluge~


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Age 33
With Lacus at ORB
Seen July 27th, 2006
Posted July 27th, 2006
228 posts
17.9 Years
angel, I love this poem, please continue to make more for pc to read...it reminds me of my girlfriend ^^ 10/10

As the memories of old days disappear,
As should all your losses and fears.
I shall always be there for you,
Even though you start anew.
The days we spent so lost and worried,
Will always be there never buried.
You were always the bravest of us both,
And we had both taken the oath.
So as you stand there so brave,
While you weep upon my grave.
And while the days pass you by,
Just remember…I did not die.

family: My PC son is redpikachu2 YAY!!
paired with Reyna_Fire, YAY!!!
If you wish to be part of my family please pm me.
Age 30
Female
With phantom_zangetsu ^.~
Seen March 7th, 2014
Posted July 24th, 2011
238 posts
18.2 Years
hmmm...Yeah that's true. I couldn't think of what else to put. So I just put the first thing that popped in my mind. Thanks. :)

Spoiler:
~*~My PC Family~*~
~My pair: phantom_zangetsu , My Big Sisters .: Dreamer :., Midori Chi, My father Cybex Mewtwo, my brother karasuma My brother-in-law code zero the deluge~


Female
Texas
Seen October 27th, 2019
Posted September 8th, 2016
5,522 posts
18.8 Years
Yay! ^^ It's nice. Keep up the good work. But I found a few...I guess you could say punctuation errors. Instead of all the commas, you could use periods:



I can never get you out of my mind.
I can never stop worrying about you.
Everywhere I go it's you I try to find.
Blame me, you can even sue.

But I can never look away.
I can never do just that,
since you own my only friendship.
Since you own my whole heart.