Waiting

Started by Amy-chan March 6th, 2006 10:11 PM
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Amy-chan

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Before, I was afraid of posting poetry here, for fear of not only not meeting the standards of this forum but perhaps getting my poems stolen. But now I don't care anymore....

*POEM DELETED BY CREATOR: Please close this pointless thread.*
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Amy-chan

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Thanks LT. *hugs* Your comments are greatly appreciated. I thought it was rather suckish...but, well, that's just me. *laughs slightly* And when you're as confused as I was while writing this, you kind of don't have much sense in you to go proofread, etc....
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Though some rhymes were kind of forced (a few) And the rhythm was sometimes a bit sloppy, I think this a great poem. It clearly transmits the feeling of reliance I think it's supposed to. Just a little thing to point out though;

"You will return, unless you don't"
Okay, this loses me just a little bit. Leave those logic and ovbiousness twists to people like Bono. XD

9/10
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Amy-chan

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It did seem forced at parts, I quite agree, and my rhythm was absolutely terrible. I'm often that way in writing poetry, I need to break away from it. Anyway, thank you for your comments; they're greatly appreciated. I'll be sure to keep that in mind the next time I write a poem.

I will be deleting the poem now, just in case poem thieves are lurking around(though I doubt anyone would want to steal this stupid poem anyway, there are much better ones on this forum). I'm sorry that this renders creating this thread virtually pointless, but meh. After this, could a mod please close this thread? I apologize for such a rash change of plans, and thank you.
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