Beat this

Started by code zerro the deluge March 24th, 2006 3:02 PM
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Age 29
Maryland
Seen January 14th, 2009
Posted January 27th, 2008
459 posts
18.1 Years
Uhh ok well we really gonna take emm back wit fis one. hahahahahah

Get low 0
God of the black see dat I'm back
Make a extinct ***** come back
Me and my friends homies called Jack
I be beatin but your is wack

Turn it up

I be keepin beats that are just to strong
You bouciin around like you on cheech and chong
If it was someone else you thought rong
American Dragon I am Jake Long

Beat this
Kiss it
Beat this
Hit it
Make it
Copy digit

Beat this
Kiss it
Beat this
Hit it
Make it
Copy digit

Well umm now that I'm back
Back wit a rap
Something like a kk tap
I seen you befor shopping at gap
All around town looking on my map

Turn it up

These dudes be coming in rong times
Can't you see dis girl is mine
If not then you must be blind
No go OOOLLLAAALLLAAALLAAA
I love da

Beat this
Kiss it
Beat this
Hit it
Make it
Copy digit

Get low 0
God of the block this is my rap
Sippin sipping on tree sap
Change the g to c and you got cap
On my head and on my back
My plans for my plan I'm back

Turn it up

Homies I don't be wastin no time
Even though time is mine
Wastin the world can't you see
That this is makiking me freaky
I love da

Beat this
Kiss it
Beat this
Hit it
Make it
Copy digit
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Age 34
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Fargo, ND
Seen October 18th, 2013
Posted March 9th, 2010
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17.8 Years
Uuum... Okay....

My suggestion to you is to attempt to use proper grammar and structure. Make your poems flow. For me, it was really hard to understand because I was too focused on English errors. Usuing good grammar makes poetry more enjoyable and easier to read.

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Age 29
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it was kinda supposed to be like that.
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Age 29
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Seen January 14th, 2009
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But it was meant to be like that.
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( quote great just great)unquote

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and join http://s7.invisionfree.com/Nintendo_Online

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Age 30
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Seen August 20th, 2007
Posted September 29th, 2006
2,339 posts
19.5 Years
She realizes that, Code Zerro. Read her last reply again. And, as for the poem itself...

My suggestion to you is to attempt to use proper grammar and structure. Make your poems flow. For me, it was really hard to understand because I was too focused on English errors. Usuing good grammar makes poetry more enjoyable and easier to read.
Agreed, on everything. If that's your style, I suppose there's no reason for me to be too critical(must...resist...urge...to kill....) but, as was said, with so many errors it was hard to concentrate on anything else. Keep writing, though. I'm sure you'll improve if you just heed the comments of your readers.
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Age 29
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ohh I thought she meant it wasn't supposed to be like that.
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Age 29
Maryland
Seen January 14th, 2009
Posted January 27th, 2008
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i am not talking about that!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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video games are great until lights go out
( quote great just great)unquote

I was dr.jay

my two sites are http://www.freewebs.com/chimpythelonestar/
and join http://s7.invisionfree.com/Nintendo_Online

Me and Pink-Tiger together.


Phantom of Death is my Brother

Midori Chi my sis-in-law
So is fallen angel

join http://s7.invisionfree.com/Nintendo_Online