Okay. I'll be blunt here:
This story is fairly ameteur. First, if you want to say "Tim lives in China" you might like to put in more detail, for heaven's sake!
Example: "He brushed by his window, which was well decorated by red paper lanterns, a sign to him every morning that he was in China."
Second, there is a misspelling in there which fairly agitates me. You must reverse the 'i' and the 'e' in 'theif'. And 'lighning' is spelled 'LIGHTNING'. Chances say the 'lighning' mistake was a typographical error but the 'theif' mistake is a pure innocent mistake made by many people.
Third, put in a new paragraph every time there is another person speaking.
Fourth, 99.99999999% of the babies on Earth can't speak, let alone have such a mature attitude. But I believe what you said about "this story not making any sence." However, 'sence' is actually spelled 'sense'.
Fifth, I don't see a tint about where the heck your story is going.
Don't worry about my harsh comments too much, though. I've seen worse :p. And please realize that I'm not meaning to be mean.
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