The Serith Region

Started by poke_spriter May 5th, 2006 10:48 PM
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Seen March 3rd, 2009
Posted July 25th, 2008
87 posts
17.2 Years
Ok this is my third try at a sprite comic so i hope this one will be good


Into:http://www.maj.com/gallery/kh2forlife/pokestuff/into.png

Bios: (i will be updating the bios as the comic goes on)

Name: Dart Kami
Bio:His dad died three years ago(2004 comic takes place in 2007)
Pokemon: None as of now
Age 31
Male
Where Giving Up Is Not An Option
Seen December 1st, 2014
Posted November 14th, 2010
947 posts
17.6 Years
Ok first up:
Quote- Well im not going to post bios because i want the people to read it-Quote
What the hell does that mean? Read the comic instead of the bios? Say what?
Personally and i'll say this as nice as possible- try again. The story seems cliched, the maps are a bit off and you put text on the outside of the bubble, don't do that... The sprite is a badly recloured version of Wes Sprite, with paint colours as hair, i think. Just inprove on those things and you might do good.

[NovaPirate]

And the rest went riding on.

In that cardboard box down the street.
Seen February 13th, 2011
Posted December 28th, 2009
802 posts
17.5 Years
You know, I never ex[ected another person to steal, unless you give credit to Desgardes, your stealing his Wes sprite.

Gaah.
This signature is under construction.
But dun worry.
It will most likely stay like this FOREVAH.
Because I'm nowhere near as active as I used to be.
-[NP]

Tbone2356

Time keeps on tickin' by

Age 29
Male
New York City
Seen June 4th, 2014
Posted September 13th, 2009
465 posts
17.3 Years
I Think That The Fact That You Have No Bios And Just A Link, Is Just Really Lazy Work.

People Want To View A Comic That Presents As Friendly And Cool, Not As Lame And Lazy.

Fix This Thread, And Fix That Text Coming Out Of The Speech Bubble.

Also That Wes Sprite Edit Is Bad And Not Giving Credit Is Espically Frowned Upon Here By Many People Including Me.

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Age 31
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Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted July 30th, 2008
570 posts
17.6 Years
People are giving you criticism. It's good, you should take it so you can try and make it better another time. Don't act like such a noob. All of you want it closed after people give you suggestions, don't take them like insults, they're trying to help you.
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Tbone2356

Time keeps on tickin' by

Age 29
Male
New York City
Seen June 4th, 2014
Posted September 13th, 2009
465 posts
17.3 Years
People are giving you criticism. It's good, you should take it so you can try and make it better another time. Don't act like such a noob. All of you want it closed after people give you suggestions, don't take them like insults, they're trying to help you.
Yes We Are Trying To Help You, Bios About People Would Be A Nice Touch Or Else Its Just Lazy Work. If You Expand The Speech Bubbles Why Not Expand Them More To Fit The Text.....If You Want A Good Comic You Have To Put Lots Of Effort Into It Not Just A Link And A Few Words Or People Wont Like It.

For Hints And Tips You Must Look At Other Peoples Comics And The Same Thing For You Main Charector Look At Other Peoples Shading And Get Ideas, But Dont Copy.

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The Dash

Hurr.

Age 31
Lurking in the shadows of the Games Development fourms.
Seen June 12th, 2021
Posted July 29th, 2018
1,858 posts
17.7 Years
Well, it was ok but...
Your mapping is very bland..Try adding more houses and such. Why did you use Italics in the speech bubbles? And..never...EVER save as bmp. EVER. Save as PNG is the best you can save in (in MS Paint)

Age 30
Ontario, Canada
Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
4,612 posts
17.4 Years
as others pointed out, you really need to work on it. it's not good and it's not bad. I'm glad that you are remaking a few things now and accepy what people said. They're not trying to attack you in anyway and saying that your comic sucks, they just want to help make your comic better. Remember that ^^
England
Seen October 22nd, 2006
Posted May 24th, 2006
42 posts
17.1 Years
Ummm.. First of all, It's a bit too short, second of all there is no Introduction.

Thridly, Your grammar is pretty atrocious. Unless there is only one member in "Team White Screen", then he should be shouting "I WILL KILL THEM!" Not 'him'.

You definitely need to try harder in those areas.