Seaforma Adventure!

Started by ~Vannah~ May 13th, 2006 5:34 PM
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Age 33
Lucy's Lap
Seen October 20th, 2009
Posted September 27th, 2009
2,489 posts
17.3 Years
Its a little....simple to be honest, everything is rushed, and their isn't much plot to it either, try to come up with something more original than simple adventures that are rushed.
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Age 30
Ontario, Canada
Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
4,612 posts
17.4 Years
This comic really needs work. On the first episode, it was rushed. Like on the 9th section, the girl wanted to join her and now they're both together? That was fast, no?

Also, try to make the sections bigger, they're too small. And the bubble speech's need work.

Remember, I'm not saying that your comic is bad. I'm just pointing things out to help you make your comic better.

Signomi

Age 32
Female
Britland (United Kingdom)
Seen 1 Week Ago
Posted October 10th, 2022
7,480 posts
17.8 Years
Considering the links are no longer there, then this thread shall be temporarily closed until the thread creator PMs me anytime concerning the comics of this thread, otherwise it shall stay closed.

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