Pokemon (working title)

Started by fallinroxas May 17th, 2006 12:53 PM
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Seen September 2nd, 2009
Posted February 23rd, 2008
40 posts
17 Years
ok this is a comic that i cant think up a name for so tell me what you think i should name it


Eppy1:http://www.maj.com/gallery/kh2forlife/pokestuff/working_title.png



Rukario color is the bluish color Deon's color is grey and his mom's color is purple




Credit:
Me and pokespriter
Serebii



Bios: Coming soon

Signomi

Age 32
Female
Britland (United Kingdom)
Seen 1 Week Ago
Posted October 10th, 2022
7,480 posts
17.8 Years
Serebii and Celibi: I'll merge your two posts together. Please do not double post. There is an edit button there for a reason.

Also, remember to keep all posts in this thread related to the comic. Don't go offtopic.

Dance, Carmen! ☆★

Paired with Aizuke » @instagram

Age 30
Someplace on Earth
Seen June 3rd, 2016
Posted February 23rd, 2007
770 posts
17.3 Years
Oh and the name could be deon,s amazing adventure with lucario.

Hey Houndoom1.are you new here?
What kind of question is that? Why would you ask me that in this thread ask me that in a PM. No I'm not new here I've been here for months. (read the information in the top right corner where it says Join fdate, Nature, Location etc.

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The Dash

Hurr.

Age 31
Lurking in the shadows of the Games Development fourms.
Seen June 12th, 2021
Posted July 29th, 2018
1,858 posts
17.7 Years
Ok there are alot of things wrong with this comic. First off its nice that you have used speach bubbles as they are underated these days, However.
Your Text is going over the speach bubbles. Please try not to do that as it makes the comic more scruffy. Try to use a non-bold font style and a Pokémon font would look nicer. Those trees are from Viridian forest and therefor are dark and dont fit in with the light enviroment. Your sprite is disgustingly recolored and edited. You really need to try harder. Also give credit to who you nicked that Rukario sprite from, sprite theft is not taken lightly.

2/10

Age 33
Lucy's Lap
Seen October 20th, 2009
Posted September 27th, 2009
2,489 posts
17.3 Years
I'm sorry, but this comic, has no plot, poorly edited sprites, and the starting comic is just weird, nobody would get a legendary, and defiently not lucario.
**Formely Known As Kakashi Hatake**

**Flannery is my Goddess, I'm her #1 Obsessor**
Bishies: Matsumoto Rangiku, Shiba Kuukaku, Soi Fong, Hikari(Pearl), Raven
Pairings: Ichigo x Shihouin Yoruichi, Genis X Presea, Aang X Katara, Toph X Sokka, Kratos X Raine
My Trainer Card

[NovaPirate]

And the rest went riding on.

In that cardboard box down the street.
Seen February 13th, 2011
Posted December 28th, 2009
802 posts
17.5 Years
Painful recolors. If I'm correct, those are paint greys, and the other colors are default, when I get back on my Mac I'll check, I can't see it on my Windows.

Gaah.
This signature is under construction.
But dun worry.
It will most likely stay like this FOREVAH.
Because I'm nowhere near as active as I used to be.
-[NP]

Chizzy

Comic coming soon...

Age 31
UK
Seen October 27th, 2010
Posted June 22nd, 2010
1,475 posts
17.6 Years
I think everyone has said everything bad about this Comic...and We are only trying to help you improve. My First Comic (and most likely everyone else's) was complete rubbish. I was told what was good, bad and ugly. In this Case its...

1. Poor Recoloured Trainer OW's...(with Paint Defaults)...
2. Over-Lapping Text...(It doesn't look Good)...
3.That Rucario is not the OW...It is a Party Icon. If you want an OW...PM Me...
4. Complete Randomness...(Rucario...His First Pokemon? His Mum Just saying 'Ladida have Rucario...Its your Dads...' Isn't Good...First of All Ledgendary...Second...Randomnes...
5. Its a Generic (Im a sucker for these)...Journey Comics are good as long as you keep them Interesting and Fun. Take Pokemon X, by Recon Dye for Example.
6. Everyone Starts Somewhere. This is your First Comic. Appreciate Constructive Critisism and Turn it into Better Comics.

Maneachicken
Now you could remember me...

Then Again...

...its been a while
Age 30
Ontario, Canada
Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
4,612 posts
17.4 Years
Am I the only who can't even see the first episode? =/ I clicked on the link and the site said the page cannot be found.

Fallinroxas- You really need to improve, take everyone's advice unless you want your comic to look bad. Maneachicken looks like he pointed out what parts of the comic you need to work on.