My Book of Poetry

Started by Persona May 22nd, 2006 7:47 AM
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Age 30
Ontario, Canada
Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
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Alright, I decided to make a thread of where I can just post my poems in one place rather than make countless threads for them. Please comment, and I hope that Ozy posts here. He's really good at pointing out of what I need to work on.

Star Light, Star Bright:
Heart,
won't you lasso the moon,
kiss the prayer infested sky,
and forgive the stars
for shining so bright,
it's not their fault
you keep asking for foolish pride...

Wish a new wish for life
and grant your dreams
a reason to believe in reverie,
furnish your soul with hope
and faith shall bestow
your shark bitten heart...

Might it be a lover
echoing sweet balladry
with a beat that compliments
your own unique melody;
or a ratty old coffee cup
to console your icy cold fingers
into a poem of majestic quality,
whispering humanity rests
behind the pathetic words
of this so called prose...

Desires can be found
in four leaf clovers,
friends and sometimes even mothers,
behind the arms of time,
and dusty old bibles
sworn on by sinners crimes,
so latch on to your preference
and do your heartstrings right
wish a crucial wish, tonight...
_____________________________

My Mother:
I look back on these years
To see how far I've come and grown,
I take a trip down memory lane,
And what I see has shown ...

That every step I've taken,
You have been there by my side ...
From infancy to being a teen,
We've stood the test of time.

You cradled me and nurtured me,
Through all these many years;
You held me and did comfort me,
Through happiness and tears.

You'd pick me up when I would fall,
You'd dust me off and then,
Encourage me to get back on
That horse and ride again.

Your constant care and loving,
And your warm inviting heart,
Has always been a treasure that
I knew would n'er depart.

If I could be "just half" the person
You have been to me ...
Then you have taught me well dear mom,
For in my heart I see ...

A woman whose most gentle soul,
Embraces me each day ...
A woman whom I dearly love,
Much more than words can say.

^ I made that one for Mothers day if you wondered why I posted it. I'll post a few more when I think of ideas. Thanks for reading ^^
Age 30
Ontario, Canada
Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
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Those are nice poems, I wonder where you get your ideas form? I like the mother one the most
Thanks bro. It depends, when you want to make a poem about nature, think of the earth and its living things. I guess I just try to dig deeper on my topic to get ideas.
Seen November 20th, 2011
Posted May 23rd, 2011
217 posts
17.1 Years
Ah, so Mr. Roy Mustang does pick up the pen to write as well. Unfortunately, poetry is perhaps one of Naminé's many great weak points, so therefore she will have to refrain from commenting as she is certainly, inferior to the other poets who can give any true advice here. However, if Mr. Roy Mustang have wrote any stories, she'll love to glance over them at the very least. If it is a fanfic and it includes canons that she is familiar with, why she'll love to spend the time to slowly read over them as well~
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Age 30
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Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
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Ah, so Mr. Roy Mustang does pick up the pen to write as well. Unfortunately, poetry is perhaps one of Naminé's many great weak points, so therefore she will have to refrain from commenting as she is certainly, inferior to the other poets who can give any true advice here. However, if Mr. Roy Mustang have wrote any stories, she'll love to glance over them at the very least. If it is a fanfic and it includes canons that she is familiar with, why she'll love to spend the time to slowly read over them as well~
I'm sorry Naminé, I don't really write stories. But, I could try. Thanks for commenting. Even though it wasn't entirely about my poems, it still means that you did take the time to read them.
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Posted July 24th, 2011
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Hehe they are really good poems. Maybe I should make a poetry thread for myself too...

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Age 30
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Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
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Thanks for the comments. I have a new one, hopefully I'll get as much comments as before ^^

As Long As Your're Gone:

You're still sleeping,
I'm waiting for it to end,
But for as long as you're gone,
My heart will never mend.

You're resting your head,
But no dreams haunt you,
I'm counting the years,
Pushing on through.

You're holding your hands,
So still together,
Six years you have been gone,
And it feels like it's been forever.

No tears will fall from your eyes,
I'm still trying to understand,
But my tears are falling,
And I still find it hard sometimes to stand.

I'm finding it unfair,
Still after all these years,
My heart is still bleeding,
I'm still wishing away my fears.

I still need you here,
I'm holding a picture of you,
You're my beautiful angel,
Moving on is all I can do.

It still hurts deeply,
It still feels so wrong,
This is tearing me apart,
Like it has been since you have been gone.

I'm singing a song about you,
Wishing I could hold you so tight,
I'm wishing you were here,
So everything could be all right.

But you're still sleeping,
I'm still waiting for it to end,
But for as long as you're gone,
My heart will never mend.

MegaFuz

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Bubbletown
Seen February 11th, 2011
Posted December 11th, 2009
4,565 posts
17.9 Years
Dang. Never knew you wrote poetry, my man. That is most definately some awesome work though. The one about your mom sent shivers down my spine. o.O Star light, star bright is really good. It filled my mind with some wild, vivid images. The last one is really good as well. Great love poetry. XD Don't know what to criticise, really. Phenomenal work. Keep it up, bro. The Poetry section needs more of this.
MegaDex: Returning soon?

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Age 30
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Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
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Dang. Never knew you wrote poetry, my man. That is most definately some awesome work though. The one about your mom sent shivers down my spine. o.O Star light, star bright is really good. It filled my mind with some wild, vivid images. The last one is really good as well. Great love poetry. XD Don't know what to criticise, really. Phenomenal work. Keep it up, bro. The Poetry section needs more of this.
Thanks megafuz, I'm really honored of what you said in the end of your post.
Age 30
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Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
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OMG! They're great! ^_^
I seriously don't see anything wrong with them.
(even though I read them super fast XD)
Keep up the good work!
Thanks Midori. Though, there has to be some things wrong. Not anything is perfect. ^^

A Sign:
Something clear to see
But invisible to you and me
Something strong to grab hold of
But the eye can not see

It stands in front of them
But they are to blind to see
Open your eyes
Don't be a fool
Why can't you see
It's standing right in front of you

The truth is being shown to you
Grab hold of it take it by the hand
It might not come again
Show it to the ones that care
There is where its dreams come true

But only if you see
The truth within me
So open your eyes
Look inside
See the truth
See whats meant to be

People all around
Unable to see
People all around
Blind to what they see

People are hurting inside
People are invisible
People are forgotten
People are alone

Never noticed
Never seen
Never heard
Never spoken
Never whispered
Never wished

Always forgotten
Their lonely life
Nobody can see
Waiting for a sign from above
To set them free
Age 34
Female
Fargo, ND
Seen October 18th, 2013
Posted March 9th, 2010
893 posts
17.8 Years
That was indeed a rather sad poem, but lacking in your previous vocabulary. And that was one of the things I deeply admired about your first few poems. I admit that my vocabulary gets repetative when I don't consiously think about finding synonyms to substitute for things like "blade", "love", and "hurt".

Your weak work in the above poem was "eyes". You used it a lot and it started to lose it's initial impact. I realize that most people don't notice things like that when they read a poem, but I pride myself on decent poetry and being able to recognize the good.

I greatly appreciate the fact that you have a grasp on grammar. And spelling. And punctuation. Those are wonderful things that make my life much more enjoyable!!

My suggestions are thus -- keep working to make your poetry taste wonderfully by using words sparingly and mixing it up frequently. Keep up the nice flows and rhythms. I look forward to seein more!

*inserts catch-phrase* Keep up the good work!

Who's that returning from the depths of forum ghosts past? Oh! It's me!
Age 30
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Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
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Sorry that I haven't posted any poems in a while, I couldn't think of any. Though, thanks for the comments and leaving my thread alive. ^^

Walk With Me:
Walk with me, the path of life,
to explore every bend of the road
Enjoy with me the beauty of life,
along its wonderful way

Find comfort with me, in each other's arms,
when grief crosses our path
Find strength with me, in each other's strength,
when despair lies in wait

Laugh with me, a single true laugh,
to enlighten another's distress
Cry with me, a single true tear,
to understand true happiness

Cherish with me, the wonders of life,
as they need to be preserved
Rejoice with me, in the mysteries,
of what is yet to be

Find peace with me, in each other's souls,
when the world has gone insane
Find love with me, in each other's hearts,
until this life has been fulfilled

And when the path comes to an end
I hope we can say from within
We've known the beauty of true love,
our love came from within
Age 30
Ontario, Canada
Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
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So cute <3 Ryan you're really good at poetry (I know my coment is sooo original)

even without a rhyme scheme it was a great poem, keep it up^^
Thanks Seraphia. I just wanted to try something different. ^^;

One of my friends (Whose a girl) won't be coming back, she's leaving for New York. So, I decided to make a poem for her before she goes. Tell me what you think about it.

Goodbye:
Come lay down your sweet and weary head,
My mind fears we've come to our journey's end.
But sleep now and dream of everything before.
The memories you remember are always yours.

Why do these tears spoil your face,
When I promise to see all your fears pass away.
Soon you'll open your eyes and watch them sail,
And what do you see on that horizon instead?

You might hear a familiar laugh,
Or glimpse a smile in the twilight.
Those are my ships crossing the sea,
And they're full of happy memories.

Memories carried on great ships,
With sails powered only by the love of friendship,
Cutting through the waves of time
With promises to carry you home.

Don't turn away and don't struggle,
Unbar your mind and let them surge in.
Remember feeling safe beside me,-
Remember all the good things, and try to smile again.

Let them carry you back over the deep ocean.
Underneath you can see shadows lurking,
Of ships who have fallen in time's storms.
But mine will go on because I made a promise:
To carry you between the smiles and the tears...
Whenever you wanted to come home.