Story of a Girl

Started by Blizzara June 7th, 2006 4:30 PM
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What do you think of my Sprite Comic?

Seen August 11th, 2006
Posted July 24th, 2006
97 posts
17 Years
Welcome to my first comic. I hope this is good, but if y'all don't like it - tell me. Constructive Critisicm is the best, so if you could supply me with some of that, you will be forever loved.
Okay, anywho ... to the comic:

Chapter 1 - Old World, New Beginnings
Part 1;; Just Forget It
Part 2;; Throw me a Bone


Which do you prefer?
Colored speech bubbles to determine who is speaking
Lines from the speech bubbles to determine who is speaking


Character Profiles/Trainer Cards
Arlynn Barron(First Appearance in Chapter 1, Part 1)
Arlynn is a fourteen year old soon-to-be trainer in the region of Meimu. She was born in the small town Yabun and was soon moved to Kousetsu by her older sister Anna. At the age of five, before her and her sister moved to Kousetsu, her mother and father disappeared, leaving only a note behind that read 'Off training, be back soon'. Three months passed, and still no sign of their parents. Poverty struck, and so they fled.
As she turned 14 on June Second, she was able to get her first Pokemon, and start lessons at the Kendall Academy.

Trainer Card To Be Added


Alec Taylor(First Appearance in Chapter 1, Part 2)
Alec Taylor is a fifteen year old Kousetsu Native. Last year on February fifteenth, he could have began his first year at Kendall Academy, but wanted to wait. His infatuation with Arlynn kept him away from it, he wanted to be in the same class as her. Now that she is starting her first year, he is as well.
Alec tries at every turn to get Arlynn to go on a date with him, but sadly - she won't even give him the time of day! The question is - why does he keep going after somone like Arlynn, when there are females much prettier and ... bustier ... than her, just throwing themselves at him?

Trainer Card to be Added


Anna Barron(First Appearance in Chapter 1, Part 1)
Anna Barron is Arlynn's older sister. Anna always dreamed of becoming a Pokemon trainer, but her dreams were smashed when their parents never returned. Anna spent her hard-earned money on two train tickets to Kousetsu, then quickly found two part-time jobs, and an old apartment building that was renting for little money. Anna is now like a mother to Arlynn, who still treats her with little respect.


Suggestions for characters welcome.


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Happily Paired With Houndoom1

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My gameboy tastes like pickles

Age 27
Why do you want to know...perv
Seen July 31st, 2006
Posted July 8th, 2006
574 posts
18.4 Years
first comment yay!any way,i like it

i think the speech bubbles are to small,and a little hard to read,i think its kinda funny,cant really rate till i see bout 2 more comics tho,cant wait!^_^

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Seen August 11th, 2006
Posted July 24th, 2006
97 posts
17 Years
first comment yay!any way,i like it

i think the speech bubbles are to small,and a little hard to read,i think its kinda funny,cant really rate till i see bout 2 more comics tho,cant wait!^_^
Thank you! I guess that means I should start scripting the second part.






Happily Paired With Houndoom1

Sweet Smoochum

Banned

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NEW JERSEY, Sayreville. 08872.
Seen April 13th, 2013
Posted March 9th, 2013
1,402 posts
17.4 Years
I like your comic especially the song in the beginning. xD The text is a little hard to read though. Needs a little more characters, but then again, only the first 2 comics up so far...Overall it's a really nice comic. Keep posting....
Seen August 11th, 2006
Posted July 24th, 2006
97 posts
17 Years
Thanks y'all.
I've been really busy with Exams, Projects, and my story that's due at the end of the year, and I;m only done one chapter. (oops)
I'll try to get on more often near the end of the month. I started the third but never finished, you will get another new character!






Happily Paired With Houndoom1
Age 30
Someplace on Earth
Seen June 3rd, 2016
Posted February 23rd, 2007
770 posts
17.3 Years
Thanks y'all.
I've been really busy with Exams, Projects, and my story that's due at the end of the year, and I;m only done one chapter. (oops)
I'll try to get on more often near the end of the month. I started the third but never finished, you will get another new character!
You don't have to rush on a comic, school comes first. (Unfortunately)

But can't wait for the next episode is sound interesting.

Banner Made By Me

Seen August 11th, 2007
Posted August 10th, 2007
147 posts
17.6 Years
I liked it speech bubbles need to be a bit bigger once thats doine you could revamp the first part so it easier for people to re3ad I like where this is going illl see ift theres any more comics later


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Age 30
Ontario, Canada
Seen November 19th, 2012
Posted November 30th, 2011
4,612 posts
17.4 Years
Not bad. It's better than others I've seen, but that doesn't mean I'm paying you a compliment. It still needs improvements, but I know you'll be working on that later on. The speech bubbles are a little unclear, on my point of view. Not much to talk about, just how the story goes and I can't judge that right now. You still need time to go on further and it's too early to rate. I'm looking forward to more, don't quit on it.
Seen August 29th, 2006
Posted August 21st, 2006
15 posts
16.8 Years
Hello everyone, this is Blizzara. I had to create a new account, since I was hacked into ... I'm never comfortable on an account when that happens. ^^;
Anyways, I still havn't gotten my computer fixed, but our computer guy is working on it. So hopefully soon I can get the next one up! Of course, that's not the only thing that's been holding me back; I was hospitlized early this month for a head concussion, I was released yesterday, so it's not just the crapiness of my laptop, it's the being it a creepy hospital.
Anyways, my apologies for anyone really looking forward to a comic - I just can't make one without my sprites.