My Anime:Sukura the princess of light

Started by Black_kitsune_rioku June 21st, 2006 9:45 AM
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Seen July 1st, 2006
Posted July 1st, 2006
27 posts
16.9 Years
Sukura The Princess of Light
By Black_kitsune_rioku
CHAPTER 1 THE FIGHT
It was a normal morning for Sukura by normal I mean she woke up to her demon brothers swordfighting and casting of demonic spells,and as usal they wanted her to join. "Come on sis!" shouts Koro the oldest brother as he fights off Tarkama the second oldest brother. "Yeah join us!" Tarkama shouts as he was pushed away. Sukura sat up in her bed and glared at them then said "no! Now leave me alone so I can go back to bed!" she then covers herself up and tries to sleep. Koro and Tarkama smirk. Tarkama then turns to Koro and says "don't worry I'll get her to fight!" he then charges at her sword drawn. Sukura hearing him coming got a light explosion ready and threw it at Tarkama.Blasting him into a wall and momentarily stunning him she then curled up and went back to bed. Koro goes over to Tarkama and says "I'll get her to fight huh?" Tarkama glares at him and says "shutup!" then gets back up and continues to fight Koro.
While they were fighting Pazari the youngest brother teleported downstairs and told their mother Kohaki what Sukura had done. Once she heard what happend Kohaki teleported upstairs went over to Sukura,picked her up by the collar of her shirt and screamed "GET OUT!!" from her scream came a sonicboom blasting Sukura out of the house and out of the dark kingdom (of course Sukura passed out from the blast).When Sukura woke up she saw that she was in a forest somewhere outside the dark kingdom. "Well this is just great! I've got no family,no shelter,and worst of all no FOOD!" she sobbed. She laid there crying for sometime then she heard hoofbeats and thought "someone's coming! I'd better hide!" she then jumped inside a nearby ditch. A guy riding a horse comes into the clearing he has short black hair and blue eyes he was wearing black suit of armor with silver frost dragons on the shoulders "hmm..thats wierd I thought I heard someone crying over here". He then looks around and spies a silvery bit of hair coming out of a ditch and shouts "Hey you! Come outfrom hiding! For I'm guessing you are a demon!"

This made Sukura furious and she jumped up from the ditch and shouted "I am not a demon!" The guy finally got a good look at her and saw a beutiful girl with long silver hair and shimmering golden eyes she was wearing a cut up shirt and a raggady pair of shorts he then said "oh sorry miss". Sukura looked down at the ground and said "it's okay" then broke down in tears. Surprized he said "whoa! What's wrong?" Sukura looked up at him and said "I just got kicked out of my kingdom because I have light powers oh...and I hurt my brother Tarkama." He gives her a sympathic smile and says "well having light powers makes you royalty!" Sukura stopps cryng and says "really?" He smiles and says "yeah! Hey how 'bout I take you to the kingdom of Hikari?" "okay...by the way my name's Sukura." she then holds out her hand for him to shake. He takes her hand and says "my names Cronos,nice to meet'cha!"
there is no one who does not carry scars on the heart for if there were someone like that they would be but a shallow soul.:snea:
Seen September 27th, 2006
Posted June 23rd, 2006
20 posts
16.9 Years
Uh. I don't know where to start @[email protected]

The story is... confusing. It moves too fast, and you didn't break it apart at all. When people talk, break it apart. And slow it down a touch. The spelling and grammar is pretty bad.


Oh, and IT ISN'T ANIME UNLESS IT'S FROM JAPAN, AND A CARTOON. Even if you give them pseudo-Japanese names and use fangirl Japanese, it isn't anime.