A Day In The Life Of Pikachu

Started by Flame Demon July 10th, 2006 7:57 AM
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Mt. Ember
Seen July 31st, 2006
Posted July 31st, 2006
167 posts
16.9 Years
"Wake up Pikachu!" said Pikachu's mom.

"WTF? I don't want to go to school." growled Pikachu.

"GO TO SCHOOL NOW!" demanded Pikachu's mom.

"I don't give a crap mom!" hollered Pikachu as he walked down the stairs.

There stood Pikachu's mother, a beautiful Raichu.

"How are you going to get into Harvard?" asked Pikachu's mom.

"What? HARVARD? I don't give a crap about stupid Harvard. I want to work at Wendy's!" yelled the little Pikachu.

"SHUT UP! GO TO SCHOOL NOW!" Pikachu's mom bellowed.

".......................................I'm sorry? What? I HAVE TO HAVE BREAKFEAST!" screamed Pikachu.

"I DON'T CARE IF YOU DIE OF HUNGER GO TO SCHOOL!" Pikachu's mom shrieked.

"Whatever dude!" said Pikachu.

Pikachu went to school.

"TIME TO DIE PIKACHU!" bellowed a familiar voice.

"OH NO!" screamed the lady Hoppips. "PIKACHU!"

There he was. The 1014 pound Snorlax, ready to pound Pikachu to the death.

"YOU STOLE MY PILLOW SO I COULDN'T SLEEP! YOU KNOW HOW I FEEL WITHOUT SLEEP?" yelled Snorlax.

"Dude, I don't give a crap if I stole your Slaking pillow or Slakoth dool or what have you. Just beat me up. I'm bored and sleepy and it'll give me an excuse to go home." said Pikachu dully.

"Waaaaaaaaaaa! You're scary! You're weird!" Snorlax ran away.

"Wazzup Pika man?" Meowth happened to come around the corner. At least I have someone to spend the boring day with, Pikachu thought.

"Sup dude!" said Pikachu flawlessly.

"You like my bling-bling? I shined it up last night." said Meowth in his "cool" voice.

"Man, I wish I had some bling-bling!" Pkachu winned.

"This going to be a boring day man. Ready?" asked Meowth.

"Well, let me think...................hmmm......................Nope, I got nothing." said Pikachu.

The bell rang and they went to homeroom.

The teacher took attendance while the rest of the class was socializing.

"Man, you should try and go out with Chansey. You missed your chance last year and you should try again. Think about it. It won't be such a boring day." said one "in" Pokemon, Zangoose.

"Hi boys!" Flying there was Bullerfree and Beautifly.

"Whoa man! You two are looking good!" said Zangoose.

"Hehehehe! Thanks!" they said.

Time to get ready for another day of school. 180 more days until summer. Pikachu thought.

To be continued...
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Margot

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Seen April 16th, 2022
Posted February 25th, 2019
3,662 posts
17.3 Years
Hmmmm...well there didn't seem like much going on and aside from pikachu being mean there wasn't any description. You also know barely anything about the setting as well, again description might help you out there!

You also need to add paragraphs so your story is not all one big paragraph. Your story was more on the short side as well.
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clouds
Seen April 17th, 2011
Posted December 18th, 2006
58 posts
16.9 Years
Ummmm, it wasn't the best..

You had tons of simple grammar/spelling errors. The dialogues were all misplaced and you lacked depth. Plot was generic and pretty much irrelevant throughout the story. Your attempts on comedy were pretty much too blatant, thus making them trite and a tad too 'loud.' It didn't seem natural enough for me to laugh, which I didn't. If there are any advice threads of stuff like that on PC, you should go check it out. You could've done a *lot* better. Better luck next time, then! ^_^


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