Moment of Clarity

Started by code zerro the deluge August 6th, 2006 5:00 AM
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Age 29
Maryland
Seen January 14th, 2009
Posted January 27th, 2008
459 posts
18.1 Years
I take one last bow
Bow my head down towards the ground
Then I take one last look at the croud

I never would be where I am with out you
Facts and fiction its true
Make rhymes thats in your head that are stuck like glue
I was the Ringleader now I choos too

Some times I think I'm crazy
Sometimes you think I'm crazy
But I dont care
Think I'm a baby
But I'm still there
I am still here

This is my last single
I feel I cant keep up
Ver bit of me
Must leave this game
Time to come up with another change

Cause I broke down
And now I am out of control
I admit the was my goal
Now I'm out

Stanmd up while I stand down
Life is rough I pass down the crown
This is my moment of clarity
I have fallen down

Some times I think I'm crazy
Sometimes you think I'm crazy
But I dont care
Think I'm a baby
But I'm still there
I am still here


I quiet because I feel I cant make any thing good any more. I cant compete any more. I have lost my talent and I QUEIT!
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Age 29
Maryland
Seen January 14th, 2009
Posted January 27th, 2008
459 posts
18.1 Years
no one likes me any more. i am not good.
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video games are great until lights go out
( quote great just great)unquote

I was dr.jay

my two sites are http://www.freewebs.com/chimpythelonestar/
and join http://s7.invisionfree.com/Nintendo_Online

Me and Pink-Tiger together.


Phantom of Death is my Brother

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Age 32
Universe A
Seen May 12th, 2012
Posted June 14th, 2011
1,165 posts
19.1 Years
Dude, if poetry is what you like to do, I say you continue on doing it. No one likes you? Pfft. Big deal. If I stopped writing poetry when my thread stopped getting views, I'd never have started. You're just getting started, dude. Don't throw out something you like to do just because it doesn't make you popular.

And besides, there will always be some people that will read and love your work. Keep at it for them. They're the ones you ought to love and respect. Ya know what I mean?

Poetry's no contest, in the first place. It's just a way of expressing yourself. And in this case, showing it off to people. You write mainly in a rap style, from what I've seen, and I'm not much a fan of that kinda work. That doesn't mean I don't see hope for you, though. You've written a lot. I remember looking through archives and seeing a whole page with your name on it. If you've had that much creativity before, then...man. Keep going.

You don't have to take my advice, but...I still don't think it's a good idea if you quit.

Either way, I still wish you luck.

EDIT: Btw, I liked the poem above. I didn't think to say it.
"The surface of the earth is the shore of the cosmic ocean. ... Recently, we've managed to wade a little way out, maybe ankle-deep, and the water seems inviting."
Age 29
Maryland
Seen January 14th, 2009
Posted January 27th, 2008
459 posts
18.1 Years
I'll try but if it doesn't cut out then i'm out.
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video games are great until lights go out
( quote great just great)unquote

I was dr.jay

my two sites are http://www.freewebs.com/chimpythelonestar/
and join http://s7.invisionfree.com/Nintendo_Online

Me and Pink-Tiger together.


Phantom of Death is my Brother

Midori Chi my sis-in-law
So is fallen angel

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New Joisey
Seen February 26th, 2017
Posted June 26th, 2011
3,329 posts
18.7 Years
Sigh.

Sure. You can quit. You can quit what could've been a decent start of your writing career, let alone a favorite hobby, and not even bother to try again due to some silly self gratifying reason. "No one likes me anymore." <- Yuki/blackhaert JUST said they liked it and even supported you!...quitting simply because you claim no one likes you is a pathetic reason. You're twelve. Grow up, learn, and realize you are not the only writer in this world who struggles; we all do.

I admit that it's entirely in your favor whether or not to quit, but honestly, think about it. I don't wish to discourage, but I feel that quitting isn't exactly a way out in this case. =/


Best of luck in the future, Zerro, for whichever path you choose to take.

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Age 29
Maryland
Seen January 14th, 2009
Posted January 27th, 2008
459 posts
18.1 Years
i said I am not going to quit
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video games are great until lights go out
( quote great just great)unquote

I was dr.jay

my two sites are http://www.freewebs.com/chimpythelonestar/
and join http://s7.invisionfree.com/Nintendo_Online

Me and Pink-Tiger together.


Phantom of Death is my Brother

Midori Chi my sis-in-law
So is fallen angel

join http://s7.invisionfree.com/Nintendo_Online
Age 29
Maryland
Seen January 14th, 2009
Posted January 27th, 2008
459 posts
18.1 Years
i'll try thats what it means. if i dont like it I am leaving
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http://soara.fc2web.com/img_icon/i_guraadon.gif
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video games are great until lights go out
( quote great just great)unquote

I was dr.jay

my two sites are http://www.freewebs.com/chimpythelonestar/
and join http://s7.invisionfree.com/Nintendo_Online

Me and Pink-Tiger together.


Phantom of Death is my Brother

Midori Chi my sis-in-law
So is fallen angel

join http://s7.invisionfree.com/Nintendo_Online
Age 32
Illinois..pfft. Boring.
Seen August 9th, 2006
Posted August 8th, 2006
66 posts
18.2 Years
Ooooh......very nice poem. Good job. ^-^
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