Rescue Me

Started by code zerro the deluge October 20th, 2006 7:54 PM
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Age 29
Maryland
Seen January 14th, 2009
Posted January 27th, 2008
459 posts
18.1 Years
Rescue from this man made hell
I hate leving here I want to leave now
Rescue me ring the bell
Cause my life sucks and I'm ready to go


I cant stay here any longer
I have been shot down
Muderd spirte and soul
But you you still say why?

But I say over and over again
Save me before I am slain
Cause I dont want to leave you
I cant do with out you
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video games are great until lights go out
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I was dr.jay

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Me and Pink-Tiger together.


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Age 33
Lucy's Lap
Seen October 20th, 2009
Posted September 27th, 2009
2,489 posts
17.3 Years
Well I guess its okay...you have quite alot spelling mistakes as well, also is this ment to rhyme?
**Formely Known As Kakashi Hatake**

**Flannery is my Goddess, I'm her #1 Obsessor**
Bishies: Matsumoto Rangiku, Shiba Kuukaku, Soi Fong, Hikari(Pearl), Raven
Pairings: Ichigo x Shihouin Yoruichi, Genis X Presea, Aang X Katara, Toph X Sokka, Kratos X Raine
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Age 32
Universe A
Seen May 12th, 2012
Posted June 14th, 2011
1,165 posts
19.1 Years
At first glance, it seems a bit cliché, but who am I to judge that?

I'd have to take off for the spelling mistakes and lax English, but otherwise...

I've read your older stuff. All 6,000,000 or so of them. ...Lol

You've written a .ton. of material in this section. But most of them didn't have any real change in style or anything. Mostly rap, and most of which I didn't like very much.

Though it may be a little cliché in my opinion, it's a step in a different direction for you. If your future work is more like this, but on different topics, I think you may get some more views.

Review: Favorable.

- John
"The surface of the earth is the shore of the cosmic ocean. ... Recently, we've managed to wade a little way out, maybe ankle-deep, and the water seems inviting."
Age 29
Maryland
Seen January 14th, 2009
Posted January 27th, 2008
459 posts
18.1 Years
thanx Blackheart. you are my favorite poet on here so thanx for saying that.
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http://www.serebiiforums.com/images...ario-sprite.png
http://soara.fc2web.com/img_icon/i_rathiasu.gif
http://soara.fc2web.com/img_icon/i_kaiooga.gif
http://soara.fc2web.com/img_icon/i_guraadon.gif
http://soara.fc2web.com/img_icon/i_rekkuuza.gif thanks Hristo Karamanov[/IMG][IMG]http://soara.fc2web.com/img_icon/i_myuu.gif[
video games are great until lights go out
( quote great just great)unquote

I was dr.jay

my two sites are http://www.freewebs.com/chimpythelonestar/
and join http://s7.invisionfree.com/Nintendo_Online

Me and Pink-Tiger together.


Phantom of Death is my Brother

Midori Chi my sis-in-law
So is fallen angel

join http://s7.invisionfree.com/Nintendo_Online