The Adventure Begins

Started by The Terror of Death November 9th, 2006 3:06 PM
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Seen November 13th, 2006
Posted November 11th, 2006
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This is my first fan fic ever, so its probably not that good..., but please tell me if you think i should continue it.

Chapter 1. The adventure begins

Around 2A.M., a boy who had long brown hair, and wore a black shirt and a green vest over his shirt, blue pants, and a tan pouch around his waist was at his white computer desk, sketching pictures of Pokemon, creatures that inhabit the world in different areas. Each Pokemon have different characteristics and abilities, which makes each Pokemon unique.

“Anthony, go to bed now!” yelled a voice from downstairs in the dark.

“Ok, just give me a couple more minutes!” Anthony responded.

In just one more day, Anthony is about to start out on an adventure that his brother set on 3 years ago. To become a Pokemon trainer and to be as great as his brother was. Anthony finished his sketch, which had his brother and his most trustworthy Pokemon, Donphan in it. Donphan looks very much like an elephant. Its armored hide has an unscratchable structure similar to a tire. His brother made it to the Indigo Plateau and made it to the top 8 out of all the trainers in Kanto.

Anthony went into his queen size bed and fell asleep in no time, anxiously awaiting the next day. The next day Anthony made sure not to oversleep. Today he would start his own adventure as a Pokemon trainer.

“Anthony, here’s a letter from Robert” Anthony's mom said.

“Huh, a letter a Rob?” Anthony said befuddled taking the letter from his mom, and began to read it to himself.

‘Dear Anthony,
So the day finally come when you can become a Pokemon trainer and set sail on your very own adventures. I made sure to give mom 5 pokeball’s and one pokeball that has a starter Pokemon I caught for you for this specific day for you. Hopefully we’ll come across each other in our travels someday and be able to battle each other. A good start for your adventure is to go to Viridian City. Which is past Route 1. You’ll see lots of Pokemon on the way there; hopefully you’ll catch some good Pokemon and raise them to become strong.
Be safe,
Your brother, Rob’

Mom hands Anthony the pokeball, and says “hmm…I wonder what kind of Pokemon Rob caught for you?”

“Hmm… well time to find out, Anthony said”
“Pokeball…go!” Anthony howled.

An intense light shined as the pokeball opened. When the intense light ceased to shine, all you could see was a baby blue elephant. Anthony checked the data on the Pokemon and came to the conclusion it was a Phanpy! Phanpy bears some resemblance to a baby elephant. It has a blue body, four stubby legs, and a largish trunk with a red patch on it and two large ears, each with two red clip-like markings.

Anthony was excited that he got a Phanpy, since Phanpy is the pre-evolve form of Donphan, his brothers most trustworthy Pokemon. Anthony got all of his belongings together, like his clothes, pokeball’s, potions, etc.

Anthony walked up to his mom and said, “ok mom, I’m going to start my adventure right away, Rob told me to start my adventure at Viridian City, I’ll call you once I make it there.”

Mom smiled happily, gave Anthony a hug, and said, “ok honey, make sure your safe, that’s all I’m worrying about.”

“Don’t worry mom, I'm going to be fine, so see you later.”

Anthony walked out of his house, and started to walk towards Route 1.

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Anthony is now at Route 1 and is lying down, enjoying the gigantic spacious sky and the Pokemon flying in the feathery clouds. He saw bird Pokemon like Pidgey. Pidgey are tiny bird Pokemon who has brown feathers and black stripes behind its eyes. Pidgey are one of the easiest Pokemon to capture and tame due to their docile nature. He also saw some Pidgeotto flying with the Pidgey. Pidgeotto are the evolved form of Pidgey. Pidgeotto are large birds that have large sharp talons, a red and yellow-feathered tail, and a red crest on its head.

Out of nowhere a bird type Pokemon that looked like a Pidgey attacked Anthony! Anthony was staggered that a Pidgey would attack him, since they are docile Pokemon. But Anthony looked at it closely and it wasn’t a Pidgey at all. It was a Pokemon called Spearow. Spearow is a small bird Pokemon. It eats insects in grassy areas, has brown feathers, and has short reddish colored wings, which means Spearow has to fly fast to stay airborne, and can't fly very far or high.

Anthony thought it he would try his luck in his first wild Pokemon battle. The terrain around him was very grassy with little bumps of dirt. So Anthony screamed, “Go Phanpy!”

“Alright Phanpy, ready for our first wild Pokemon battle?” Anthony said with confidence trying to boast Phanpy’s. ”Phann!” Phanpy said with exhilaration. “Phanpy start out with your tackle attack!” Anthony yelled.

Phanpy started to run towards the wild Spearow, but the Spearow flew out of the way, and was scanning the area in the air. Spearow all of a sudden swooped down swiftly towards Phanpy.

Anthony started to wonder to himself, “what’s the best way to dodge so Phanpy will take minimum damage?”

“Wait I got it!” Anthony thought.

“Phanpy, quick, use defense curl!” Phanpy quickly curled itself into a tight ball and reinforced its defense. Spearow made contact with Phanpy and was send back due to the recoil.

“Phanpy, use tackle while Spearow’s guard is down!” Anthony commanded.

Phanpy quickly charged Spearow with massive force behind him and made contact. Spearow was knocked out and Anthony didn’t bother to catch it because he didn’t want to battle it in the first place. Then all of a sudden…
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Hmmph. Grammar issues. You can get better though. Your fic is a whole lot like my first, in that a boy is starting his journey with help from his brother. I'll let a long-posting reviewer take over now.

See ya. :)
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Here is the 2nd chapter, tell me what you think

Chapter 2. Rival Battle! Anthony vs. Rena

All of a sudden, Anthony heard a mysterious voice he has never heard before. A girl with blonde hair with a green headband around her head, red shirt with a white open button down shirt with blue stripes on it, blue jeans, and a tan messager bag comes out of the bushes and says to him,

“Your pretty good for just a newbie trainer, though I think your strategies are a little sloppy.” The girl explained.

“Huh, what do u mean sloppy?” Anthony said confused

“I mean, instead of using that defense curl, you could’ve used an attack that would’ve not also countered Spearow’s, but also do damage in the process, instead of just telling your Pokemon to curl into a ball.” The girl said.

“I did just fine for my first battle, and I also won too, so I think I'm doing a good job so far.” Anthony explained.

“You may have won this time, but if you battle like you just did again against a stronger Pokemon, I guarantee you will lose” The girl said.

Anthony chuckled and said, “ I don’t believe you.”

The girl had a confident smirk on her face and grabbed a pokeball out of her bag, and said, “fine then I challenge you to a Pokemon battle!”

Anthony was surprised, yet excited that he would have his first official Pokemon battle on the first day of his adventure. Anthony turned to her and said, “I accept” with a self-assured tone in his voice.

Anthony took out his pokeball and yelled, “Go Phanpy!”

The girl with the headband screamed, “ Go Duskull!”

Duskull is a ghost type Pokemon, the first kind Anthony has ever seen or encountered. Duskull has a small hooded masked form in a black robe with a cross-bone drawing on its back. Its mask looks like the front of a skull. It has only one, red eye, which can float freely inside its head.

Anthony yelled the first attack, “Phanpy tackle!”

Phanpy ran towards Duskull and made contact with him, but it didn’t do anything. Anthony was surprised so he hastily told Phanpy to use tackle again, but it didn’t work.

“Haha!” the girl with the green headband said. “You can’t attack Duskull with normal type attacks like tackle, it doesn’t have any affect on him because he’s a ghost Pokemon.”

Anthony couldn’t believe what he heard, since tackle can’t do any damage to Duskull and defense curl isn’t an offensive move, then he couldn’t do damage to him.

Anthony thought to himself, “What should I do?” “I don’t know any other Attacks to tell Phanpy to use.” “Wait!” “I remember Rob using a certain attack that he told his Donphan to use, and also Phanpy can use.” “Crap, what was it…” He thought hard of recalling the attack that Rob used. “! That’s it!”

The girl said to Duskull, “ Use night shade!” a sinister shadowy beam came out of Duskull’s eye and went straight toward Phanpy.

“Phanpy quick use defense curl!” Phanpy promptly got into a tight ball to reduce damage done from the night shade.

“Heh, not bad, but not good enough!” “Duskull use disable!” The girl screamed. Phanpy got out of the ball right as the disable took effect.

“What’s going on?!” “How come Phanpy got out of the defense curl?” Anthony said, puzzled.

“I’ll tell you,” the girl said with a snarky laugh. “ When Duskull uses disable, the last move your Pokemon used, can’t be used for quite a while.”

“What?!” Anthony said, mystified by the fact that Phanpy’s defense curl was rendered useless.

“This is it!” the girl screamed. “Duskull use night shade to finish off Phanpy!”

Anthony suddenly said, “Phanpy use your rollout attack!”


“Rollout?!” the girl said baffled by the fact that she was going into a trap, since Duskull is using night shade.

Phanpy went into a firm ball, like it would in defense curl, but instead of staying in one place, Phanpy rolled while in a ball, and would tackle the opponent, and the more momentum it picked up from rolling, its power would amplify.

Phanpy dodged the night shade and tackled Duskull with the rollout attack, and was continuing to roll and tackle Duskull again.

The girl was astonished that Anthony had taken control of the battle, but she still had a plan. She yelled with a forceful tone of voice, “ Use confuse ray!”

The confused ray struck Phanpy and Phanpy went out of control rolling at higher speeds, until Phanpy hit a tree and knocked itself unconscious. Anthony was staggered that he lost, as he had almost won his first official Pokemon battle.

“I didn’t expect you to be that strong of a trainer when I saw you battle that Spearow.” The girl said. “You had some good strategies and the timing of the strategies was almost perfect.” “Oh I guess in all of the excitement I forgot to introduce myself.” “My name is Rena.” “What’s your name?”

“Uh, my name is Anthony.” Anthony said.

“Well Anthony I guess your going to be competing in the Pokemon League, right?” Rena said.

“Yeah, my brother told me to start out by going to Viridian City.” Anthony said.

“Well here’s what you should do, after u go to Viridian City, go to the Viridian Forest and once you get past the forest, go to Pewter City, and battle this Gym Leader named Brock. You need to win 8 different Gym Badges in order to compete in the Pokemon League. “So this will be your first step, as well as mine.” Rena explained to Anthony.

“Ok, thanks, then after I get to Viridian City, I'm going to go through Viridian Forest and then go to Pewter City to win my first gym badge.” Anthony said with a fiery confidence tone in his voice.”

“Alright then, I guess I’ll see you in the Pokemon League, and if not then, before that, until then, see you later.” Rena said with a smile.

“Bye Rena, remember next time we meet, I'm going to beat you!”

Rena waves and smiles, then walks away, as Anthony goes back to relaxing then moving toward Viridian City.
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Man, you toss the three verb tenses around like a juggler! And you don't need to quote each seperate sentence one person says.

“I didn’t expect you to be that strong of a trainer when I saw you battle that Spearow.” The girl said. “You had some good strategies and the timing of the strategies was almost perfect.” “Oh I guess in all of the excitement I forgot to introduce myself.” “My name is Rena.” “What’s your name?”
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