Night

Started by Yesterday April 2nd, 2007 8:56 AM
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Age 31
Seen January 13th, 2008
Posted August 30th, 2007
27 posts
16.3 Years
At Night
when crickets chirp,

the moon hangs
(against the midnight blue
with little holes
that angels peep through)
tucked with gray clouds
cradled by darkness,

lulled to sleep,
with gentle whispers of the wind,
singing a lullaby through leaves
of trees

whose gentle sighs
wash away the dreams
of the slumbering moon

at Night
when crickets chirp.
Bittertown
Seen September 2nd, 2009
Posted December 28th, 2008
7,901 posts
19.7 Years
Eh... not a fan of your unorthodox structures, like I mentioned beforem, but the poem is pretty good. Nice use of personification and some little dash of metaphors here and there. Overall sounds nice, and I like poems like these... mostly... and like mentioned above, it's not too cliche. It's not some boring poem going "ah the moon is shining silver blah blah" like what most people would do...

Pocket Monsters Special!
Age 30
Louisiana, USA
Seen July 24th, 2007
Posted June 4th, 2007
39 posts
16.1 Years
It's pretty good. The imagery and use of other literary devices really gives it some personality. The absence of a set rhythm is also an added plus.

Something offtopic: How can you really critic someone's poetry? Couldn't almost anything fall under "artistic liberty"?