Wow...
Um, first, your grammar is pretty weak. Unfortunately, reading a Pokemon fic where the name of the franchise is spelled wrong in the second sentence puts off readers. You also want to hit the Enter bar twice to make a new paragraph whenever someone speaks. Your first paragraph is exceptionally squashed together. Readers don't want to read a blob of text. It hurts the eyes.
Now, I don't know how long you have been in the Pokemon fandom. I don't mean being a fan of Pokemon; I mean on forums or other sites reading various fictions. I'm going to assume that you really haven't been around here much. I can tell, because your fic holds a lot of cliches that I've seen in Pokemon fiction.
When I first signed up to forums, like this one, I test the waters by reading other fictions. This way, I can see what the standard is for fanfiction, and learn as I go. (I also break into the community by spreading my name around, reviewing other people's works and responding to topics.) Because I do this, I know how my story will hold up to others, and know what has been done before.
And your story, unfortunately, holds a lot of the cliched ideas of Pokemon Original Trainer fiction. You have Professor Pine, which is the name everyone uses for their new professor of their region. You have the trainer that doesn't start at the same time as everyone else - they are always older than the normal age of starting trainers. And you have the mysterious connections to Ho-Oh.
This doesn't mean that you have to abort the mission of writing this. It just means that you have to work on making this grab readers that won't be turned away by the cliches.
The first thing that you should do is write your story in a word processor program. This will catch spelling mistakes, and will allow you to take your time writing your chapter. Then you can make it the best that you can.
But, good luck to you in your writing!
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