A Trainer's Master Quest

Started by PKMN Trainer Max June 21st, 2007 7:08 PM
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Age 29
Seen July 23rd, 2007
Posted July 18th, 2007
52 posts
15.9 Years
Prologue

I was a finalist in the world tournement.I had beaten many trainers to get here.
The anouncer anounced my name as i yelled,
"Max,from Pewter City!"He said.

"Go, Charizard!"and threw a pokeball into the air.

The anouncer then announced my opponents name as as realeased his pokemon.

"And here's Chris from Sinnoh!"The anouncer said.

"Ok then, come on out Luxray!"my opponent yelled.He was from the Sinnoh region.I have never heard of that place.All i know is that his pokemon looked really strong.
The crowd cheered for the both of us.

The anouncer started the match, and as soon as he said go..."Luxray,charge beam go!"My opponent yelled.
"Fly now Charizard!"I yelled.My Charizard had dodged the electrical attack."Now use fire blast!"i said.
A blast of fire came down on top of my foe's pokemom.The pokemon was sevearly burned. He still had some fight in him though.
"Luxray, jump and use thunder fang!"Chris screamed.The pokemon jumped up and bit my charizard on the leg just barely reaching him,sending electricity surgeing through my charizard.Yet, the fall back to earth was enough to defeat the Luxray.
"Yes!"i yelled."Great job buddy!"i said as I sent my Charizard back into its pokeball.

"Err..let's go you can win it Roselia!"Chris said.

"Ok you can beat him Lapras!"i yelled as i sent out my second pokemon."Ice beam,go!" i said.And my Lapras froze the roselia solid.

"What?!"Chris screamed."NOO!"
"Now Lapras this is it we are going to win with this,BODY SLAM!"As i yelled my lapras crushed the ice on Roselia and when the roselia apeared it had fainted!

"NOOO!"Chris YELLED.

"Max,you are the Kanto Pkemon Mster!"The Anouncer yelled.
Age 29
Seen July 23rd, 2007
Posted July 18th, 2007
52 posts
15.9 Years
Chapter 1
Yes,I am the Kanto Pokemon Master.My name is Max, and I come from Pewter City.My pokemon?They are Charizard,Lapras,Gengar,Nidoking,Pidgeot,and Victorybell.
I have compleated my pokedex for the Kanto Region.I am now thinking about traveling to the Johto region.I do have some friends there, so i will have some place to stay,and i will know people with knowledge of the land,But i digress.I am going to help Prof.Oak,and Tracy with some work around the Lab.Maybe Prof. Oak can tell me some things about the Johto Region.
Age 29
Seen July 23rd, 2007
Posted July 18th, 2007
52 posts
15.9 Years
I went to Oaks lab and walked in.
"Hey Prof. Oak."i said.
"Hello max,"he said"How are you doing.
"Good, i hope the same for you too."i replied.So i helped Tracy feed,and groom the pokemon at the lab, and i helped Oak with some pokedex info.
"So Prof. i've been thinking about going to the Johto Region."i said casually.
"Really?"he said interested."That would be great for my research,and besides i would like you to meet my friend Prof. Elm."
"Really?" i said."I would love to meet him!""Prof.Do you know when the next boat to johto leaves?"
"Why actually,yes."he said.
"Wow!,When?"i asked.
"TOMAROW!"he said.
"what?!"i yelled"I better get going then!" "Thanks Prof. I will talk to when i get to Johto!"i yelled is i ran to my house.I am only bringing Charizard, and Lapras to Johoto so i can get more pokemon to train with.I can't wait untill i find out what johto has in store for me!
Age 37
Server Nehra
Seen May 18th, 2009
Posted November 3rd, 2007
468 posts
17.7 Years
Hmmm... I have read everything you wrote, but i can´t find something like a... greater storyline or something else what could be a plot. Perhaps you have a good idea or something like that, but i think you should put in more details. The fight between your all pokemon wasn´t that great, and perhaps you should give more details about the scene and the pokemon.
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In a House
Seen March 20th, 2016
Posted January 22nd, 2010
1,823 posts
16.6 Years
No really, you could.

I've had enough of these one-paragraph chapters with little or no description of trainers, scenery, etc. This story is going to kill me before I'm old if it keeps up, because every time someone posts a one-paragraph chapter here, some of my brain cells die. Do me a favor and improve your grammar, definitely follow Nigma's advice and add description, give us a better idea of the personality of your character and his Pokemon, and do not post another chapter unless it is about four pages in length, OR LONGER, on a word processing program. Don't have one? Get one.

My work here is done. (For now).

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