I'm Sorry

Started by diamondpearl876 July 3rd, 2007 8:51 PM
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Age 30
Seen January 25th, 2022
Posted January 6th, 2021
1,584 posts
15.9 Years
Rated: PG
I'm Sorry

"Luxio, use Thunderbolt! Golbat, use Wing Attack!"

The command sounded familiar. The name and the attack may always be different, but the order was all the same. The trainer sounded so confident in his Pokémon, and so set on us being destroyed. I saw the Luxio and Golbat attack you, and I could tell you just wanted to scream in agony. Two high-leveled Pokémon had just used some powerful moves, so I couldn't blame you. Oh, how I longed to feel the pain you did, just to see what it felt like. Why not attack me, huh? I seemed to only be there for looks, or was my defense just too strong for them? My trainer ordered me to use Ice Beam, and so I did, and missed. My master said that it was okay, but in reality, it wasn't.

I looked at you, and you looked at me with the saddest face I've ever seen. I could read you like a book right then and there. You just wanted one of them to kill you, so you didn't have to do this any longer.

"Weavile, snap out of it! We can't lose! Not again . . . Use Brick Break on Luxio!"

You got back to the job on hand due to the harshness of our master’s voice, and attacked Luxio with all you had. It still was not enough, however, as it looked like it was never touched in the first place. Finally, with an aggravated sigh, my trainer called me to help you. It's what I do best, and it never fails. Before the opponents got to attack, I rushed to you as fast as I can on my small little feet, and offered to help. I held out my egg to you, and I could have easily got another later on if you needed it. I waited for you to take it, but you didn't. The Golbat swooped down and slammed its body into you, which caused you to fly back in surprise.

Everyone stopped moving, waiting to see if you would get up again and continue fighting. You did, and I wondered why you wouldn't just give up, when it was very clear you did not want to battle anymore. Once again, I held out my egg, and you turned your head in resentment and told me to back away, to go focus on myself and use the egg for my own needs. You see, I just couldn't do that. I could not stand by and watch my trainer's Pokémon fall victim to the cruelties of battling, the cruelties of being enslaved by creatures we call humans. I could not just watch you take each hit, one after the other, and experience the pain which you do not deserve. And, so, I tried to help you, even if my treatment worked for a mere five seconds. However, you didn't take this generous offer, and simply shoved me away.

Why did you do that? I was only trying to help. Of course, the answer was clear, and right there before my very eyes. You just wanted to win by yourself. You wanted to prove to our trainer that you are worthy of being kept, of being used and not stuck in your Pokéball all day. You were afraid of being abandoned and left heartbroken, only to be found by another trainer looking for a Pokémon to simply fill the sixth slot on his or her team.

The other trainer smiled in amusement, and ordered the Luxio to use one last Thunderbolt attack. I saw you get shocked with unwanted electricity, and you slowly slumped to the ground in defeat. I looked at our trainer, who did not speak. He looked pretty ticked off, and did not recall you to your Pokéball. Why didn't he? No Pokémon can get hurt any more in there. He could have stopped further pain, but he didn't.

"I give up. You can leave now," my trainer said to the other. His voice showed no emotions, and he didn't take his eyes off of you.

"Whatever you say, weakling." He chuckled for a moment, and walked off.

I saw you slowly snap back to reality, and get back up, your body shivering with fear. For a moment, I thought you were going to faint again, which probably would have been a relief for you. Instead, you peered over at our trainer, waiting for his reaction.

"You see what you did? You lost again. Again! Can you not do anything?"

I saw you make a defensive position, as if our trainer was going to hurt you. I thought he was, too, for a moment.

"Come on, Chansey. We're leaving." Then, he pointed at you and said, "Don't you dare follow, either."

I didn't want to leave you. I really didn't. I could only hope the best for you in the future. As a desperate attempt to try and help you once more, I dropped my egg on the ground, turned my back, and walked away. To this day, I don't know where you are. I don't know if you have found another trainer, and if you did, I don't know how he treats you. I don't know what has happened to my egg, whether you consumed it and healed yourself, or if it was found by another wild Sneasel and taken for an early dinner.

All I know is that maybe, if I hadn't distracted you, you wouldn't have been hit by that Golbat. Then, you could have attacked those two, and I could have used my Ice Beam to help that way. No . . . Instead, I got you thrown out of the team and left with nowhere to go. I left you with feelings of loneliness and betrayal, and with a memory that will forever be with you, whether you want it or not. And for that, I'm sorry.
Age 36
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Posted 2 Days Ago
Powerful writing right there. I love this piece of fanfiction.

The Chansey's emotions come across well in this. I can feel the pain that it goes through as it watches its teammate be beaten and then abandon. This shows the extent of how much the Pokemon cares for others if it is still thinking of the Weavile to this day.

I can find nothing wrong with this.

Thank you for a fanfiction that makes me smile again because it is that darn good! ^^

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Age 28
Un-here land.
Seen August 6th, 2008
Posted August 6th, 2008
659 posts
15.9 Years
Wow, it's awesome. I can't find anything wrong with it either.
For those of you who aren't total idiots, You'll probably know me from Netbattle. Yes it is the one and only Vash the Stampede, I was going to post to some pathetic whiner complaining about how much life sucks. Reality check... LIFE ALWAYS SUCKS! For those who don't know me, well I don't care about you. But i won't mind crushing children's ideals on pokemon with my totally sarcastic views on life. Some of you may be wondering "Why does he call himself 'God the stampede?'", simple I AM GOD!
On a side note I realize some of you may grow to hate me, or even hate me now. Please continue for your opinions of me matter as much as a hill of **** to anyone who matters and since no one but ME matters thats no one.
Hmmm alittle bit about myself.. Well.... I'm one of a dying breed. That is the Netbattle Troller. Most of you inbred losers'll come to realize this if my post of truth doesn't get me expelled from this place. I also hate morons. Oh and Brazillians for various reasons to numerous to mention in one post. Well I'm not going to continue to rant and rave about how much I'm better than 95% of you drones. We'll see what happens in the next few days.
Hello, welcome to the community, by the way my name is Alex.
Lol yes, I've still left.
Age 28
Un-here land.
Seen August 6th, 2008
Posted August 6th, 2008
659 posts
15.9 Years
Really I never noticed. I was so busy thinking how good it is! XD
For those of you who aren't total idiots, You'll probably know me from Netbattle. Yes it is the one and only Vash the Stampede, I was going to post to some pathetic whiner complaining about how much life sucks. Reality check... LIFE ALWAYS SUCKS! For those who don't know me, well I don't care about you. But i won't mind crushing children's ideals on pokemon with my totally sarcastic views on life. Some of you may be wondering "Why does he call himself 'God the stampede?'", simple I AM GOD!
On a side note I realize some of you may grow to hate me, or even hate me now. Please continue for your opinions of me matter as much as a hill of **** to anyone who matters and since no one but ME matters thats no one.
Hmmm alittle bit about myself.. Well.... I'm one of a dying breed. That is the Netbattle Troller. Most of you inbred losers'll come to realize this if my post of truth doesn't get me expelled from this place. I also hate morons. Oh and Brazillians for various reasons to numerous to mention in one post. Well I'm not going to continue to rant and rave about how much I'm better than 95% of you drones. We'll see what happens in the next few days.
Hello, welcome to the community, by the way my name is Alex.
Lol yes, I've still left.
Age 36
Seen 15 Hours Ago
Posted 2 Days Ago
Um...I'll just answer your question here, diamondpearl876.

The archive section is for the fanfics that the moderator of the fanfiction forum sees as the best of the best. You can't post your own stories in there. You have to wait for the moderator to see your fic and move it in there so that it becomes a "fanfiction of the month".

Obviously, that all stopped because this section is mod-less. And until we get a mod, all "fanfiction of the month" archives have stopped.

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And yes, I didn't notice your tense change. x.x I was too busy enjoying this.

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Age 30
Seen January 25th, 2022
Posted January 6th, 2021
1,584 posts
15.9 Years
I see.. I still don't think there's enough fanfiction going around on here to get a mod then still. >_>; Ah well.

I'll be writing another oneshot soon.. I have all the ideas in my head atm so I better not forget them. . . :nervous:

Thank you to those who left comments, once again. (:
Age 30
Seen January 25th, 2022
Posted January 6th, 2021
1,584 posts
15.9 Years
That was really good!!! It's amazing how well you show the emotions! Really touching! *claps* (I guess that's how Paul's Pokemon feel ... Horrible O.o)
Who knew I'd still get reviews for this.

Anyway, it is kinda like Paul. Paul just releases them right after capture if they're not strong enough, though.