Vision of Darkness: The Sinnoh League

Started by pidgebot July 14th, 2007 4:52 PM
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Hey all! I'm Pidge, and this fanfic is just meant to be a fun little thing, based on the Diamond/Pearl games (not the anime), and uses the main characters from the games, Dawn, Lucas, and... rival (who I named Taylor [Taze] since he didn't have a name in the game). O.o

Ewww, based on the game, you may ask? But don't worry, I've expanded Team Galactic's 'making a new world' idea and made it non-stupid, but the plot of course still involves Team Galactic. xD

Please note that the Dawn in this is NOT from the anime. Yesh. Just a little sidenote...

And ohYA. The story can get a bit insane at times, and beware of certain rabid Clefairy-loving Professors... XD

I'll rate it PG-13 to be safe... there is swearing, so... yeeeah.




Chapter 1: Crazy Clefairy!


"Oy... I can't believe you're dragging me into this..."

Taze Kidane groaned as a determined black-haired girl dragged him toward a beaten-up suitcase lying in the middle of a field. She released her deathly grip on his wrist and cast him a glare.

The girl was Dawn Akine, thirteen-and-two-month-old rebel of Twinleaf town. She was, incidentally, also Taze's best friend, and even he didn't know how she put up with him.

"Will ya shut up for two seconds? It's no big deal." Dawn swung her head around, flipping off her messy black hair that was sticking to her sweaty face.

She stomped further into the grassy field, after resuming her grip on Taze's wrist, dragging him with her.

"But Dawn, we're not supposed to go into tall grass. We'd be able to if we had Fin here, but--"

"Yeah, yeah. I know, I'm not a Magikarp! Look, ya big baby, we're just going to be out here for like, two seconds. I want to see what's inside of that briefcase!" She paused for a second, licking her lips in thought. "And maybe return it of course," she added quickly, in her cute girly voice, smiling innocently.

The black-haired girl led Taze closer to the briefcase, her heart hammering like she was about to open a gigantic treasure chest. "Maybe there are Pokeballs inside! Wee-he-HEEE! You saw that old guy, he looked pretty important. Like he was on a mission!"

Taze pondered, looking up into the cloudless blue sky.

The summer heat was blazing, the air was thick, and he was feeling quite sweaty underneath his orange and white striped polo shirt. "Ehh... I guess you're right."

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TEN MINUTES AGO...

“La, la, la… OOOOH! I got another bite!”

Dawn squealed, standing up on the edge of the dock, as she started to reel in her fishing line.

Taze glared at her as she landed the Pokemon with ease. Dawn held up a giant Magikarp, about three feet long, and waved it around triumphantly.

“Whoa! It’s huge!” Dawn giggled happily as she set it free back into the lake.

Taze grunted angrily. He hadn’t caught a single fish in two weeks straight, and they’d been coming to the lake to fish every day since school got out.

Fishing might have sounded boring, but it’s not like they had much to do. Most of their friends from school had gone out to become trainers already. Taze and Dawn? Well, they were just taking their time.

“Hee-hee! Looks like I’ve got another one!” Dawn bounced up and down, unable to wipe the grin off her face. “This is great, isn’t it Taze? I’m having so much fun! The fish just LOVE me! Whee-he-HEEE!”

This time it was a Goldeen, fair in size.

“Hmm. Not bad, not great either.” She threw it back into the lake.

Taze groaned. Dawn was catching Pokemon left and right, and there he was, sitting hunched over in a corner of the dock like a loser. Even when he DID catch something, it was an old boot with fungus growing from it, or a branch, or rotting fish bones.

He sighed. He was hopeless.

Dawn sighed, looking over at Taze. Well, it wasn’t HER fault the fish liked her so much.

They went fishing nearly every day, except when Taze had to clean his room or something like that. Dawn couldn't believe his mom made him do... WORK... around the house. That was unheard of! What were they called again, chores or something like that?

Ah well... anyway. Dawn and Taze usually came down to the lake with Taze's mom's Finneon, but Fin was at the PokeDoctors that day and they'd snuck off anyway.

"Hmm! Well, Lucas, there doesn't seem to be anything out of the ordinary around here..."

Dawn and Taze turned, wondering where the loud voice had come from. About twenty meters away stood a tall man with white hair. A younger boy was next to him, and he looked to be around Dawn and Taze's age.

Dawn looked over at her friend. "Wonder what they're doing...?”

Taze shrugged, wringing out his shirt, and water plopped to the ground. "I don't know, but what I do know is that I'm dying for a turkey sub sandwich--"

"Your turkey sub sandwich can wait!" Dawn snapped, taking a pair of binoculars out of her shoulder bag and putting her eyes up to them. She looked over to where the boy and the old man were standing. They were looking across the lake.

Dawn always carried a pair of binoculars with her, for reasons unknown...

Not that Taze wanted to know.

He and Dawn had been best friends since Taze could remember. Their parents had been friends for years, so naturally, he and Dawn were too. Dawn was a tough, fiery girl who never said no to a challenge. When she was eight, in third grade, she started beating boys up. Nobody ever knew why, but Dawn said she hated all boys with a burning passion in her heart that would never die.

However, the only boy she never beat up was Taze...

Anyway, Dawn wasn't always the cold girl she now was. Ever since...

Taze shivered. He shouldn't let his thoughts wander too far. He wiped his forehead with his arm. The sweltering August heat was too much for him to take.

Dawn raised an eyebrow, still looking through the binoculars. "Hey, that boy went to our school! What’s his name…? Lucas something. What's he doing with that old geezer? He's a cute one," she added, and then turned around to face Taze. "Take a look."

The blond boy looked into the binoculars. "Yee-up, I think that's Lucas. But I don’t know about the cute part… He was in our Pokemon 101 class. He lives in Sandgem."

"Eww, what are you, a stalker?" Dawn snatched back the binoculars.

While Taze and Dawn lived in Twinleaf, their school was halfway between Twinleaf and the neighboring town, Sandgem. Because both of the towns were so small, there was one school for both of the towns.

Dawn sighed, zooming in a bit more. "Ooh, they're leaving... and... oh man! THEY LEFT A BRIEFCASE ON THE GROUND! Holy Miltank, I wonder what's inside..." Dawn's mouth tugged into a smile, and she put her binoculars back into her bag.

"Dawn, you're not thinking of... stealing it, are you?"

Dawn chose to ignore this comment, and when the old geezer and Lucas had left the lake, she grabbed Taze's arm and sprinted over to the briefcase with him.



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"Important people always have Pokemon with them," Dawn told Taze, turning the briefcase over.

The blond boy sighed, frowning, as he slumped onto the ground. "Why me? Why me? I know something bad is gunna happen! I know it!"

"GRR! Shut your big ugly pie-hole!" Dawn growled, hitting him over the head with her bag. She unlocked the suitcase and opened it to find two Pokeballs.

The blond boy poked his head over her shoulder, looking into the briefcase. "Pokeballs! Is there anything inside of them?"

"SQUAAAAAAACK!!!! REREEEEEEE!!!!!! PRRIRIRIIRPIRPRI!!!!!!"

"GWA! What in hell is THAT?!" Dawn screamed.

The blond boy dove for cover in the grass, which was just about as tall as he was. He looked up into the sky, and caught sight of two small black birds soaring toward them.

"Pokemon! They're coming! It's a couple of Starly... I told you, Dawn, something bad was going to happen! Now look what you've got us into! Waaaaah!"

"TAZE! Shut up! How much of a wimp can you BE?! Just look inside this ball, will ya?" She threw one of them to him and picked the other one up herself. They both pushed the buttons and the balls opened...

Out of Dawn's came a red monkey-looking Pokemon with a flame for a tail. Taze's Pokeball contained a green turtle of a Pokemon with a tiny plant sprouting from the top of its head. Two leaves were protruding from the twiggy sprout.

"Cool! I think these are really rare Pokemon..." Taze murmured, looking down at his thoughtfully.

"Enough just standing there! ATTACK!" She shouted to her Pokemon, defiantly pointing a finger at the Starly. The fire monkey leaped up at the nearing Starly, who were squawking annoyingly.

"Yeah. Go, do... something!" Taze ordered, quite clueless, and his turtle Pokemon tackled one of the Starly, who had landed on the ground seconds before.

"What kind of attacks do you think these guys have?" Dawn asked, as their Pokemon battled the birdbrains.

Yeah, she had taken an advanced placement class of Pokemon Battling at school, but it's not like she remembered anything from it.

Taze shrugged. "Yours looks like a fire Pokemon... so... something like Ember. And I don't know about mine!"

"Try Ember!" Dawn shouted. Her monkey Pokemon jumped into the air and did a three sixty, shooting fireballs around at not just one, but both of the Starlys.

"Chim! Chim CHAR!" It shouted, landing on the ground and puffing its chest out proudly. The Starly were fainted, twitching on the ground now.

"Ha! That was AWESOME!" Dawn shouted. 'Her' Pokemon leapt into her arms and she gave it a hug. "You melted those twerps like butter on hot breakfast toast. Which is delicious by the way. So your name's Chimchar? Right?"

"Chim." Chimchar nodded, then jumped up and down on the ground, doing flips and such.

"What about yours?" She looked over at Taze.

"I think this is a Turtwig." He bent over and patted the turtle Pokemon on the head. "Is that right, little guy?"

"Turt!" Turtwig nodded happily, rubbing its head against Taze's leg.

Dawn rubbed her chin as she thought. "Taze... we just used someone’s Pokemon. After a while, don't you think they'll come looking for them? We need to run away! FLEE! Before they see us with them!"

Dawn was about to take off, but Taze thought otherwise.

"Eh? Run? Are you crazy? We're not criminals. We need to return the Pokemon and the briefcase... come on, if we hurry we might catch up to them."

Dawn and Taze ran down the path leading to Route 201, Chimchar and Turtwig following closely behind. Dawn made Taze carry the briefcase, of course.

They were almost to the path leading back to Twinleaf when two figures came into view on the horizon. Dawn skidded to a stop.

It was the old man and Lucas.

"Eep! That old geezer's looking at us! He looks like he just got blasted by a Flamethrower and pooped on my a billion Starlys. What'll we do?"

Taze kept walking toward the old man and Lucas. "We'll return the Pokemon! We'll just tell them the truth. They'll understand!"

Dawn sighed, running up to catch up with Taze. "Fine... but if we get in trouble I'll have Chimchar set you on fire."

They sprinted toward the old man and Lucas. Lucas was the first to speak.

"Thieves! You took the Professor's Pokemon!" He shot a finger at Dawn and Taze.

"THIEVES?!" Dawn shouted, her cheeks flushing a bright shade of pink. She stomped over to Lucas, face-to-face with him. "How dare you make such a rude accusation!"

Lucas shrugged, looking at her pathetically. He smirked, satisfied with her displeased state. "You could have left it there. Didn't your mother ever tell you not to mess with anything that's not yours?!"

"Okay, now you're going WAY too far, buddy, bringing my MOM into this!"

"THAT IS ENOUGH!"

Dawn, Lucas and Taze all froze, and Dawn was still blushing, looking over at Lucas, and shooting daggers at him.

Oh why did he have to be so cute, yet so rude to her?! Hmph!

The three teens looked over at the old man, the ‘Professor’ as Lucas had called him.

"Stop fighting this instant or I will... I will... do something mean. Horribly mean."

Dawn looked at Taze and Lucas, raising an eyebrow. "O-keey?"

The Professor then cleared his throat. "My name is Rowan. I'm a Pokemon Professor. Clefairy is my favorite Pokemon. Oh, Clefairy was a gift to the earth from the heavens... I can't get over how wonderful they are. Cute little marshmallow-y puffballs, that's what they are. They're just a bundle of happiness, star-shaped and cotton candy pink. So delightful they are..."

"He has a bit of a Clefairy fetish," Lucas said to Dawn and Taze after they gave him scared looks.

Rowan paused, looking at the three teens, and stood up straight. "A-hem. 'Scuse me for rambling. Now, I won't get into all the boring stuff, but I would like an explanation about all this."

Dawn looked over at Taze.

He took a deep breath. "I'm -- I mean, we're -- really sorry about using your Pokemon, but we went up to the briefcase because we wanted to return it, but then these wild Starly charged at us, and we had no other choice, so we had to use your Pokemon to protect ourselves--"

"That's good, that's good, enough! I will warn you now... never speak too quickly in front of me." The old man said, interrupting Taze, and holding a hand in front of the boy's face. Taze's green eyes scanned the large hand and then he looked around it to the professor's face. Taze was panting, after saying that last sentence in one breath.

"Emm... sorry." Taze murmured.

"So... are we in trouble?" Dawn asked, peeking out from behind Taze.

Rowan shook his head. "No. In fact, Chimchar and Turtwig look so extremely happy with you two! Oh my oh my, it just brightens my heart to see such carefree young Pokemon, dancing their little hearts away, with no clue whatsoever as to what's going on around them. Look at them, aren't they so adorable? Just one look at them and I have a case of the jiggy-wiggies!" Rowan clapped his hands together, grinning madly, as he looked down at the young Pokemon.

Chimchar and Turtwig were running around Dawn and Taze's legs, playing tag and sniffing each other's butts with absolute bliss.

"So! I would like you two to come by my lab later. It's in Sandgem. Near the entrance of town. Oh, pish posh! Why later? Why not now?" Rowan asked himself, chuckling slightly, as he reached to his belt for a Pokeball. He clicked the button on the ball and a large, rather... unusually chubby yellow Pokemon came out.

"Kadabra..." it hissed, clutching a spoon in its hand. The Pokemon was twirling a long pointy finger around its yellow moustache.

"Whoa a Kadabra," Taze said. "This one's a big guy, isn't he?"

Kadabra glared at him, and proceeded to whack him in the face with its spoon, leaving a large oval-shaped red mark in the middle of Taze's face.

"Oww..." Taze grabbed his nose in pain as blood streamed down from it. "Why meee..."

"Kadabra is going to teleport us to my laboratory! So everyone, grab a hold of Kadabra!" Rowan instructed, holding onto one of Kadabra's brown shoulder plates.

"Ehh?" Dawn grabbed onto Kadabra's free arm, along with Lucas, Taze, Chimchar and Turtwig.

The next thing they knew, they were flying through a tornado of color, in some alternate reality. When they reached the end of the swirling vortex, they were in front of a building in Sandgem town.

Rowan led them inside the lab, after returning Kadabra to its Pokeball and bowing in front of a gigantic Clefairy statue outside the door.

Taze, who had somehow managed to land on his butt when they teleported, got up rubbing his almost non-existent bum in pain as he lagged behind, crying "Why meee?"

Rowan led them to the back of the lab, and Dawn and Taze looked around in awe.

It was like a Clefairy Shrine. There were Clefairy plushies, books, pillows, blankets, and other odd collectables on a huge shelf that took up the entire left wall of the lab. There was even a giant picture of Rowan posing with about seven Clefairy, who were rubbing his shoulders and feet.

...Other than that disturbing display, there were shelves and shelves of books everywhere. Pokeballs were lined up on tables around the room, and there were people in white lab coats jotting notes down on clipboards.

At the end of the lab was a table with two square red devices lying on it. Rowan went to his computer, telling them that He'd be there in just a minute; he had to answer a very important e-mail... about a Clefairy.

As Rowan was typing frantically, Lucas took the opportunity to shoot Dawn a dirty look.

"What's his problem?" she whispered to Taze, and then stuck her tongue out at Lucas. The dark haired boy adjusted his weird-shaped red hat he wore on his head and folded his arms across his chest, pretending not to care.

"So," Rowan started, spinning around. "You two. I have come to a decision."

"A... decision about what?" Dawn asked.

"I would like you to keep Chimchar and Turtwig."

Silence...

For about two seconds. Dawn had to let it sink in for a moment.

"AHHHHHHH! Oh my gooooood! Are you serious! HOOO HEEE HEEE!" Dawn jumped around, and did a little dance internally.

"Yes. But. On one condition."

"Oh, great," Taze sighed.

Rowan lifted up the two red square devices and handed one to Dawn and Taze each. "I want you to do a favor for me. That is of course, if your parents would permit it."

Dawn and Taze looked at each other, hardly able to contain their smiles. "And...?" they chimed together.

"Those are PokeDexes."

"AH! COOL! A POKEDEX! I KNEW IT!"

"Yes. Fascinating. You see, Lucas here is going out around Sinnoh, finding information on every type of Pokemon there is. It is my dream to complete the PokeDex, but since I'm an old weak man I can no longer do anything of importance other than worship the greatest Pokemon that ever lived, Clefairy. So I've left it up to him. Lucas, regrettably... can't do it alone, however."

Lucas grimaced.

"So that is where you two come in! He needs some company on his journey, and I think you two would be the perfect candidates." Rowan pinched Taze's cheek, grinning widely as he shook the boy's head back and forth. He patted the blond on the head, chuckling a bit. "You're cute kids, too!"

"..." Taze's eye twitched. First the disturbing Clefairy obsession, now... Rowan thinking he was ‘cute’?! What in hell?!

Dawn raised a brow. "So that means... we're going to become TRAINERS?!"

Rowan nodded.

Dawn did a dance. Even if she had to travel with... Lucas... being a trainer would STILL be awesome! She'd wanted to be a trainer ever since she was little... and now that she was pretty much the only one from her town out of her friends from school that hadn’t already gone out on an adventure, she was finally getting her chance!

"But you must speak to your mothers of course," Rowan put in. "Is this something you would want to do?"

"HELL- I mean, HECK YES!" Dawn shouted, punching her fists in the air. "Come on, Taze, let's go back to Twinleaf and ask our moms!" She grabbed his wrist and pulled him toward the door of the lab.

"Call me tonight!" Rowan called. "You can find it in the phone book. "I'll be waiting..." he winked, flashing them a smile, eyebrows going up and down. He waved as they exited. "I'll tell you the details then!"

"Right-O!" Dawn shouted. "Come on Taze!"

The two of them jetted out of the door, and Professor Rowan smiled, looking down at Lucas.

"Are you sure this is okay, Lucas?"

Lucas shrugged. "Yeah, I suppose. They went to my school. They're okay, I guess... I can't deny that I'll need some help.”

“It’s going to be tough…”

"Be sure to look out for those blue-haired thugs that have been running around Lake Verity. They're lucky we didn't see them today, otherwise they would have received a beating. They're bound to be in other places, too, stirring up trouble." Rowan sighed, looking out of the window of his lab.

"Professor, what do you think they've been doing at the lake?" Lucas asked.

"...I don't know. But they certainly don't seem like they're doing anything worth a pat on the back."





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Whee! There it is. I'm also posting it on FF.net and maybe some other forums. But ya. The next chapter will be out in a couple days probably! ^__^
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Utah
Seen July 26th, 2008
Posted July 16th, 2008
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15.8 Years
I liked it, but I hope you'll add some sort of twist to keep the plot away from just a Trainer Fic. IMO, because of your writing style, the story would benefit from being told in first person from either Dawn or Taze's Point of view. The flashback was pretty pointless, you could have just gone through the events as they happened instead of jumping back ten minuets.

So overall, it was not terrible but I think there is room for improvement.
Seen October 1st, 2007
Posted October 1st, 2007
5 posts
15.9 Years
Poke_Master1: Thank you! ^_^ Whee, glad you liked it.

Hanako Tabris: ZANKIES for the nice review!! Yes, Rowan is... a bit strange.. XD

Gooberdued: Thank you for the helpful and honest review! And don't worry, it won't just be the weird game plot. I've added some more stuff so it won't be... well... boring. I'll try my best to stray away from just being a game-clone! And about the flashback... I kind of like flashbacks a lot, see. I agree that it was a bit pointless, but there's nothing I can do about it now I suppose. D: But anyway. You said there was room for improvement, but you really didn't say anything specific... so any tips? Maybe? XD But anyway, I really appreciate your review. ^^

*cookies for all reviwers!*

ANYWAY. It's time for the next chapter. =O DUN-DUN-DUN.

KEY
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Chapter Two: PokeTalk! Finally Starting Out

The road to Twinleaf was a short one. Taze and Dawn jumped over the ledges to keep from having to go into the tall grass. The sun was setting by now, its majestic purple and orange colors swirling together in the sky.

The two friends reached Twinleaf, and were glad that they lived near the edge of town. Taze and Dawn were also next-door neighbors, and they found their moms outside in the front yard of Dawn's house playing croquet.

"MOM!" Dawn and Taze shouted together, running up to the women, their Pokemon in their arms.

"AHH! WHAT IS THAT WICKED BEAST? A CREATURE OF SATAN! FIRE! THE SYMBOL OF THE DEVIL! TAKE IT AWAY, TAKE IT AWAY!" Dawn's mom shouted, pointing to Chimchar. She nearly fainted.

Mrs. Akine was rather skittish, even when it came to Pokemon. She was even a little scared of her own pet Goldeen, which she kept in a huge fish tank in the front room…

"MOM!" Dawn screamed, as Chimchar jumped out of her arms and scuttled behind her legs, looking up at the crazy lady. “It’s my Pokemon!"

"YOUR Pokemon?" Taze's mom, Teresa, asked as she poked Taze's Turtwig in the cheek. "How'd you get them?"

Taze then dove into the tale of how it all happened. He explained everything, from finding the briefcase to Rowan showing them the PokeDexes.

"... So he wants you two to go out and fill his PokeDex, huh?" Teresa asked. Taze and Dawn nodded.

"He even let us have these Pokemon. He really wants us to do it, mom!" Dawn said, bouncing up and down. "So can we please do it? Please? Please? She puffed out her lower lip, mustering the best puppy face she could manage.

Her mother pondered for a moment. "Well... Hmm... ...Of COURSE I'd let you become a coordinator! I know you've been wanting to do it for some time now, after your school friends went out with Pokemon. I knew you'd be asking this eventually, so... sure!"

Dawn's jaw dropped. A COORDINATOR? What the…?! She wanted to be a trainer! Coordinating was for prissy little girls who liked to wear sparkly dresses and act like idiotic morons. She wanted to be a tough, ass-whooping trainer. She wanted to rub dirt in people's faces.

Her mother thought Pokemon battling was the most disgusting thing on the face of the planet. She said it was for dirty little boys with bad manners.


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"Mama! I wanna become a Pokemon Trainer when I grow up!" A seven-year-old Dawn came running up into her mother's arms. She had just witnessed the coolest battle of her life on television. The Sinnoh League was being broadcasted on TV.
"What? Pokemon TRAINING? As in making them FIGHT? What satanic things are you speaking of? What kind of nonsense are they stuffing into your brain at the cheap... PUBLIC school I'm sending you to?! You will become a proper, elegant COORDINATOR! Pokemon battling is THE DEVIL!" Her mom shouted. "There will be no Pokemon TRAINERS in this family!"

"B-but... Mama... I wanted... to be... a... WAAAAAAAAAAHHHH!"


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Her mom had been a top-notch coordinator, back in the day. She lived, breathed for coordinating. In fact, that was how she met Dawn's father.
Naturally, Dawn's mom would never let her become a trainer.

Never.

Unless...

Hmm, Dawn thought. The only way my mom will ever let me go on this little journey thingamabob is if I... tell her I'm going to become a coordinator! Yeah, that's it Dawn, you sly little fox!

"Oh, yes, Mother. I am going to become the GREATEST coordinator that ever lived! I will go out and do great... coordinator... things!"

She wasn't even exactly sure what coordinators even did. Didn't they do little dance routines?

Ugh…

Ah well. That wasn't the point.

"Oooh, my little Dawnie-Wonny has finally grown up! I knew you'd eventually come to your beautiful senses and realize how great coordinating is! OH! I'm so proud! This calls for a celebration! I'll get the party favors! The beer kegs! The video camera!" Dawn's mom cheered, running into the house like a madwoman.

"So what about me, Mom?" Taze asked hopefully.

Teresa looked over at Dawn's mom, who was now entering Dawn's large house. "Well... okay. As long as you two stick together."

"YEEEAH!" Taze and Dawn both cheered, jumping up and down excitedly. Chimchar and Turtwig seemed excited too.

“Hey, you’re not actually becoming a coordinator, are you?” Taze asked Dawn, cocking an eyebrow.

Dawn snorted. “Hell no!”

"So when are you two going to leave?" Taze’s mom asked, grinning widely as she patted Turtwig on the head.

"I don't know," Dawn said quickly. "Rowan wanted me to call him when we got an answer. So I'm off to do that now!"

Dawn sped into her house to the videophone, followed by Taze, his mom and the Pokemon.


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"HELLO, PROFESSOR!" Dawn shouted into the videophone. Rowan was seen clutching his ears in pain.

"Erm... hello, Dawn." He put his finger in his ear and twisted it around. "Oh, and Taze. And ladies." He smiled at the mothers, who snorted. Dawn's mom was wearing a party hat and blowing a kazoo.

"Anyway, they said yes! We can go!" Dawn said excitedly. Rowan clapped his hands.

"Excellent. Well, you two keep Chimchar and Turtwig for tonight. In the morning, Lucas and I will be waiting for you at the lab. We'll be expecting you at seven o'clock, SHARP! Good evening!"

Click!

The screen went black.

"SEVEN IN THE MORNING?" Dawn wailed, starting to pout. "That's psychotic."

Taze shrugged. "We'll have to get used to it if we're going to be trainers--"

"YEAH, yeah, I know." Dawn grumbled, heading upstairs to her room. Chimchar followed her.

Taze sweatdropped. "Well, I guess we should be going, Mom. Need to get packed and such." He dragged his mom out of the house with Turtwig, leaving Dawn's mom alone, chugging a pint.

Dawn's mother smiled, and danced lopsidedly over to the closet, remembering something she had gotten at the store for Dawn a while ago.


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"Honey Bumpkin! Open up!"

Dawn huffed, aggressively pulling open her bedroom door. Her mother was standing in the doorway, holding the most hideous outfit Dawn had ever seen.

"Euuugh! What – IS that?!" She demanded, stepping back as her mother intruded her extremely well kept room. The maids kept it tidy, of course.

Dawn's mom danced around the room, holding the outfit in front of her. "Isn't it precious?"

Dawn looked it up and down. It was a one-piece outfit, the top being black and the bottom half, which was an extremely short skirt, was pink. There was a built-in white shirt to cover up cleavage and sorts (not that Dawn HAD any cleavage), and... In her mother's other hand was a pair of...

Pink boots?

WHAT?!

"DISGUSTING! PINK!" Dawn moaned, falling back onto her large puffy bed dramatically. "Pink is ug-lee."

Her mother shook her head. "Tsk, tsk. Nonsense! If you're going to become a coordinator, you need to wear something cute. You need to make a good impression. First impressions are always the most important, didn't you know that? Now hurry up and change out of those dirty rags you call clothes."

"Cute? Mother, there is a difference between 'cute' and SCANDALOUS!"

"Jabberwocky! Now put this on! I will not let you leave this house tomorrow unless you are wearing this outfit! It cost me one thousand PokeDollars at Wiggle's and Milo's in Veilstone and I'M NOT GOING TO RETURN IT!"

Dawn winced. "What? I'm NOT wearing THAT!"


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"I can't believe I'm wearing this..." Dawn sighed, looking at herself in her full-length mirror.
"I look like a clown..."

Dawn ran over to her bedpost and snatched her white beanie from it, placing it over her tangled black hair. It had a pink Pokeball symbol on the front. She'd gotten it about a year ago at a raffle at school and she'd never really worn it before, even though it was pretty cute.

"Hm. That's a bit better, I guess. The stupid outfit thing is still damn ugly. Especially the boots." She looked over at Chimchar. "What do you think?"

"Chim..." Chimchar laughed.

"DON'T YOU DARE LAUGH AT ME, YOU BUTT-NUGGET! I know I look like a freak, but you're just going to have to deal with it, okay?"

Chimchar smiled, and curled up on Dawn’s bed once more. Dawn sighed. Tomorrow was going to be a long day.

She'd already packed her yellow bag with all of her necessities. Her binoculars, change of clothes, toothbrush, deck of playing cards, and more. She still couldn't really believe she was going to be a trainer...

She curled up into her bed after changing into her pajamas and turning off the lights, and patted Chimchar on the head.

"Hey Chimchar?" Dawn whispered. "You know that when I call you a butt-nugget, I mean it in a completely non-callous, and extremely loving way, right...?"

"Chim!"

"Heh. Good. By the way, since you’re my Pokemon, I think you need a name. I mean, other than Chimchar. Maybe?"

She looked around her dark room, thinking. She never thought she would be good at this nicknaming stuff, but for some reason a name for Chimchar came to her instantly.

"How 'bout Ashes? Is that okay?"

"Chim! Char!"

"Heh. I guess that means yes. Okay, then. Ashes."

It was silent for a bit longer.

"Hey, are you a boy or a girl?"

"Chimmmmmm..." Chimchar growled.

"Ahh, okay, okay, I'm sorry. You're a boy, I take it. Right?"

"Chim!"

"All right. Cool."

Dawn lay there, thinking about tomorrow. And about Taze. She was a little worried about him. She didn't know why, but she always felt like she needed to watch out for him. His dad had always been a bit of a psycho, and Taze had had a horrible childhood...

Since then, he'd always been jumpy, and a bit of a pansy.

...Well, a huge pansy.

But he was Taze. Dawn loved him...

... As a friend, of course.

And then there was Lucas. The whole thing about traveling with him was just a blur.

She'd… actually had a crush on him about two years ago in school, even though she never really knew him.

At all.

Creepy...?

Yeah, maybe.

But still, he was cute, even though he was pretty cocky. A lot of the girls in their class had liked him. He was kind of a know-it-all too, but Dawn couldn't help noticing that he could also be extremely kind-hearted...

Eeep!

Why was she thinking such thoughts?

Boys were icky.

And it was time for her to go to bed.


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Taze set off down the dirt path of Twinleaf toward Route 201. His Turtwig was sitting on top of his messy blond hair, flattening it out so it stuck in funny directions.
"Hmm..." Taze had been trying to think of a nickname for his Turtwig all morning. He sucked at this sort of thing. He needed someone like Dawn to come and give him suggestions.

But...

Dawn wasn't here yet.

They had agreed to meet at the edge of town that morning, at six forty, which gave them just enough time to get to Rowan's lab.

Of course, Dawn was running late. As usual.

Taze sighed, sitting down on the ground and taking off his heavy brown shoulder bag.

"Hmm.. a nickname. Well, you're a Turtwig. So, should I try and make something out of that? Well, let's see... Turt... Turd? Err, just kidding. Twig... Twiggy? Twigger? Uh... Wigger?"

Turtwig was heard growling from on top of his head.

"Heh, heh. I was totally just kidding. Eh-hem. Oh, who cares? I'll think of one eventually. Hey, do you even WANT a nickname?"

"::Hmm.. a nickname... that sounds funny. What is a nickname?::"

Taze winced. Turtwig had just... spoken? What the--?

"Hey, what's all this about? I can understand you?" Taze asked, looking up at Turtwig. The turtle Pokemon smiled.

"::Hmm, looks like you can! I was wondering when you finally would. Silly little human! Tee-hee!::"

"Ehh? Silly? Hey, how am I all of the sudden… understanding you?”

"::You just have to have a strong connection with your Pokemon in order to understand what they’re saying. Cool, huh? Didn’t you know that?::" Turtwig explained this as if Taze were a kindergartener, speaking slowly and very clearly.

“Wha-? Oh… actually, I didn’t know…”

Turtwig sighed. "::Well, that’s because people tend to keep it between themselves and their Pokemon. They don’t tell people, usually. It’s a secret bond between trainer and Pokemon!::"

“Oh. I see. Well, now that I can understand you, what's your gender?" Taze asked.

"::Gender? What's that? Do you mean Gengar?::"

"No! I mean, your sex."

"::Sex? ...Is that good?::"

"W-WHAAAH! No, I-I mean, are you a boy or a girl?!" Taze explained frantically, screwing his eyes shut with terror. Turtwig sweatdropped.

"::Oh... well, you should have just said so! I'm a boy. I have a pen--::"

"Okay, that's enough!" Taze shouted, waving his hands back in forth hastily. "No further information is required, really--"

"::What?::" Turtwig asked. "::I was just going to say, I have a penny! See?::" He pulled a shiny copper coin out of nowhere, flashing it around proudly.

Taze heaved a sigh.

"Gwahhh..."

"::Say, do you want me to call you Master? Or something else?::" Turtwig asked, looking up into the sky.

"What? Master? Where'd you learn that? Anyway, my name is Taze. My real name is actually Taylor, but I'd rather you not call me that. Speaking of which, what do you want ME to call YOU?"

"::Hmm... You say your real name is Taylor? We Pokemon always address each other with proper real names. I shall call you Taylor. And I do not know what I want you to call me. Something good, though.::"

"Weh? Bleh. I should have never brought it up," Taze said regrettably. "I'd really like it if you called me Taze... that's MY nickname."

He had never liked the name Taylor. In fact, the person who had given him the nickname Taze in the first place was Dawn...


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"TAY--LORRRRRRRRRRR!!!!" A four-year-old Dawn jumped on Taze's shoulders. "Gimme a Spoinky-back ride! Puh-leaaaaaase?"
Taze groaned. "Only if you stop calling me Taylor!"

Dawn frowned, jumping back onto the ground, her bottom lip trembling. "But... why?"

Taze looked down at his feet.

"There's a girl... that I met."

"So...?"

"Her name is Taylor."

"What?! NO WAY! There's a girl named Taylor? That's funny!"

"No... I'M the funny one! People will laugh at me! My mom named me a GIRL'S name! What am I to do?"

"But isn't Taylor a boy's AND girl's name?"

"LOOK, I JUST DON'T WANT TO BE A REJECT! Or some sort of... HeShe!"

"Hm... Maybe I'll make up a name for you..."

"Like what?" Taze looked up at her hopefully.

"Tay... No, that's another girl name. Hmm, Lor? Tale... Or... TAZEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!"

"...T-Taze...?"

"YES! TAZE! It's the best, right?" Dawn hugged him again, shoving a Pikachu plushie into his face.

Taze smiled. "Of course. It's great! I'm... Taze!"



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"::Nickname...?::" Turtwig repeated in awe.

"Yeah, that's what I was talking about earlier. A nickname. It's what trainers give their Pokemon, so they don't have to call them by their species name."

"::What's a species? Is that like feces?::"

"Ugghhh..."

"TAZE!"

Taze spun around, seeing a jubilant Dawn running down the dirt path toward he and Turtwig. Her Chimchar was running on the ground next to her.

The blonde-haired boy was speechless when he saw what she was wearing. He just stared at her, unmoving. Dawn stopped in front of him, confused.

"What's wrong? Uh... Taze? Hell-o-o-o!!!"

She waved her hand in front of his face, and a few moments later he shook his head, blinking rapidly.

"Ah, uh, oh, yeah sorry, I was just--"

He looked at her legs. What was she wearing?

Boots... and no, not JUST boots. PINK boots that went halfway up her shins.

And black knee socks.

And then, there was... there was her skirt. Jeez, that thing was short! It looked like a swimsuit!

"TAZE!"

"AHH!" Taze fell over again, trying to hide his face, which he knew was flushing horribly.

Okay... just pull yourself together. You can do it... she's just a girl. Just a girl, wearing an incredibly... uh... cute... outfit! Taze screwed his eyes shut and turned around to face Dawn. "Hey! We should get a move on! Right? Huh? Yeah?"

Dawn glared. "Taze, why are your eyes closed? Am I really THAT ugly?" She frowned dramatically, pretending to be on the verge of tears.

"::What's wrong, Taylor? Why are you closing your eyes? Are you scared of Miss Dawn? Or of that wicked Chimchar? Do not worry, I will defeat him in battle!::" Turtwig said, looking at Taze as if he were to ask 'can-I-go-headbutt-him-now-already?'

Reluctantly, Taze opened his eyes, but was sure to steer his vision away from Dawn.

FAR away from Dawn.

"Oh, I just got a fleck of dust in my eye. It's nothing too bad..." He stood up, making his way down the road. "Better hurry! We're gonna be late! Last one there's a Magikarp!"

And he tore down the dirt road toward Sandgem, without looking back once. Turtwig, Dawn and Ashes all sighed in unison, jogging after him.

It was going to be a long journey.

But Dawn smiled, thinking of what lay ahead of her.

Friendship… victory…

Romance?

Umm… maybe.

But whatever life would decide to throw at her…

She was ready for it.

2/End


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So yaa... Pokemon can talk to their trainers! You might think it's a bit cheesy, but I think it's cute, and I can use it for comical effect, too. XD And besides, it gives the Pokemon more personality, rather than just being... fighting... machines. XD

So tell me what you think. The next chapter will be here in a few days, and that's when the 'journey' begins. *phew*
Age 30
Seen January 25th, 2022
Posted January 6th, 2021
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15.9 Years
This is pretty funny, and a lot better than some stories you see on here. ^^ Good job.

The only thing that annoys me is the caps when people are shouting. You don't need them, in my opinion . . . If you say they're shouting, then people don't need caps to know that tthat.
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*eats cookie* I want another! :3

You do well with comedy. You know to keep things short and quick instead of slowing down for anything. You also know what sounds and words to use for comedic purposes. XD

Taze and Turtwig ('Wigger'...) are my favorite pair. But Dawn is great too, with her wild side and "boys are icky" thoughts. I haven't seen much of Ashes to say something good about him. (Other than: Fire monkeys are the tools of Satan!) I'm hoping that you'll have more from him soon.

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Utah
Seen July 26th, 2008
Posted July 16th, 2008
159 posts
15.8 Years
Well, I do think you are better than some other writers here. But as I mentioned before, your writing style IMO is better suited to first person, rather than third. For example:

Her mom had been a top-notch coordinator, back in the day. She lived, breathed for coordinating. In fact, that was how she met Dawn's father.
Naturally, Dawn's mom would never let her become a trainer.

Never.

Unless...
and

She wasn't even exactly sure what coordinators even did. Didn't they do little dance routines?

Ugh…

Ah well. That wasn't the point.
'Ugh' and 'Unless...' Are words that the character, Dawn, is thinking. And if Dawn was the person telling the story, these would make a little more sense. Of course, thats just my opinion.

It's okay if you use flashbacks, just don't get to trigger happy with your flashback gun.

Anyway. Some tips...

You should add some more detail. Without detail the story moves to fast, and unless its a thriller, that aint good. Remember to ask your self: Who, What, Where, When, Why, and How. Describe the environment. When Dawn and Taze were traveling back to Twinleaf Town, don't just have them travel from point A to point B in three seconds. IMO, that short walk back would be a great place to build your characters; Dawn could be talking to Taze about how her mother wants her to be a coordinator, is she worried that her mom would not let her?

Also, whenever you introduce a character, like Dawn and Taze's mothers, give a little info on what they look like. But keep in mind that you aren't dumping information on the reader that they don't need to know.

"Taze's mom was wearing her brand new croquet dress, and she had tied her brown hair up so it would not get into her eyes,"

is better than,

"Taze's mom was wearing her brand new Kalvin Cline croquet dress she had bought a few days before. Her brown hair was tied up behind her head to keep it out of her blue eyes. Actually, only one eye was blue, the other was a nasty yellow-black color. At the age of three she had a huge rash on her back,"

But I don't think you would make that mistake. ;)

So yeah, just remember to put a little more description into your story, but not too much.

There's my review, hope it helps. Just remember your better than most people I've read

*rolls eyes at the memories of past horrors*
Seen October 1st, 2007
Posted October 1st, 2007
5 posts
15.9 Years
Diamondpearl876: Thanks! *cookies* Err, yeah, about the caps... XD I'll try to tone it down, hahaha.

Hanako Tabris: *bows* Thank ye... and yeah, you'll see a bit of Ashes in this chapter... he's sort of... weird. XD

Gooberdued: Thank you again for your tips. I kept it in mind while writing this chapter. Description has never been one of my strong points, but I'll try to do more! ^_^ Oh, and... *lowers flashback gun* =P

Poke_Master1: Thanks again! Glad I could make you laugh... XD

*more cookies for everyone. And extra for Hanako, since she craves them* XD



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Chapter Three: Bidoof Boy!


The sun shone down, weaving through trees and sparkling on the deep sapphire ponds hidden through mazes of thick, lofty grass. Starly chirped, soaring from tree to tree, and the Bidoof nibbled on berries scattered through the fields.

Two trainers and their Pokemon zoomed through Route Two Hundred and One, determined not to be late for their little... 'talk' with Rowan before they left on their PokeDex journey.

Ashes shot Ember at any rampant Starly who decided they wanted to be annoyingly inconvenient to Taze and Dawn, and Turtwig took on the Bidoof that leapt onto the dirt road, trying to slow them down.

"We can't be late, we can't be late, we can't be late," Dawn frowned, wondering what time it was as she looked up at the sun, which was steadily rising into the sky.

Taze was still a ways ahead of her, and hadn't spoken a word to her since they'd started to run. She was getting tired of chasing him... didn't he ever feel like stopping? The boy was like a Pikachu who had eaten one too many chocolate bars... he needed some Ritalin, quick.

They saw the welcome sign of Sandgem loom into view, and they sped up the pace. Only a bit longer, and they would be on the road, for real.

Rowan's lab, being on the very edge of town, quickly came into view, and Dawn squinted to see two figures standing outside, looking rather impatient.

As she and Taze got closer, she made the figures out to be Lucas and Rowan, arms crossed and feet tapping on the ground.

"I’m sorry we’re late!" Dawn shouted as she skidded to a stop behind Taze, who had arrived just seconds before she. Rowan raised a brow.

"Oh, it's quite okay. You’re actually one minute early!" He grinned and looked at the black watch he wore on his wrist.

Dawn sweatdropped.

"Anyway, enough dilly-dallying. You three need to get a move on. The day is ticking by!" He reached into his white lab coat and pulled out two PokeDexes, handing one to Taze and Dawn each. "Here you go. Lucas has already had his for a while..."

Lucas nodded, silent. Dawn's eyes fell upon him, she quickly averted them when she saw that he was looking at her.

“Oh, yes. Take these Pokeballs, too.” Rowan handed them each five balls, which they stashed in the pockets of their bags, in easily accessible places.

"WELL THEN!" Rowan said happily, shoving the three trainers along down the dirt road. "Off you go! Go find all sorts of Pokemon! Don't be afraid to scan with that PokeDex!"

Dawn, Taze and Lucas waved at the Professor as they continued on their way, all feeling a bit uncomfortable and shy.

"And if you ever see any Clefairy," Rowan called, cupping his hands around his mouth, "BE SURE TO CATCH IT! And then send it to me through the PC. So I can do... research... yes, research..." Rowan snickered maniacally, and then scurried back into his lab.


Dawn looked at Lucas and Taze.

"So!"

"So."

"So?"

"Here we are."

"Yes. Here we are."

"I guess I should show you two how to catch wild Pokemon, as soon as we get out of town--"

"Hey, buddy boy, we're not stupid. We know how to catch Pokemon!" Dawn shouted, quickly growing angry with Lucas. "In case you forgot, we attended the same school AND were in the same advanced-placement classes!"

Lucas smiled. "Good! Less work for me."

"Oh yeah? Well, Mister I'm-So-Better-Than-Everyone-Else, how many Pokemon have you caught?!" Dawn poked the ball belt that hung around his hips. There were two Pokeballs attached to it. "ONE, I see, not counting the one you started out with."

"Hey, I never said I was better than everyone else! And so what if I've only caught one? That's still one more than you've caught."

Lucas flashed Dawn a toothy grin, which furthered her frustration.

"True..." Dawn frowned.

Taze sighed. He could tell this was going to be a long journey already.

A really, really long journey.

He didn't mind that they had to go with Lucas, he was just glad that they were going on this adventure at all.

He looked down at Turtwig, who looked a little tired, from having run all that way to the lab. He scooped up the leaf Pokemon and looked down at him.

"::So, Taylor, have you thought of a nickname for me yet?::" Turtwig asked, stabbing Taze in the chest with the sharp twig that poked out of his head.

"Ahh! Um, no..." Taze then looked over at Dawn and Lucas. "Hey, what should I nickname Turtwig?"

Lucas sighed. "Nickname? Why do you have to nickname him?"

"Why NOT? It's fun, and cute, and creative! And you get to be different than everyone else!" Dawn glared at him.

"Well, you're different from everybody else as it is. I mean, just look at your face--"

Lucas then received a sturdy whooping in the face from Dawn's clenched fist.

She grinned, batting her eyelashes. "You were saying?"

Lucas rubbed his cheek in pain, pretending to cry.

"::You should name him... Turtlepoop!::" Ashes suggested, rolling on the ground, laughing his devil-monkey butt off.

"What? Thanks a lot for that STUPID suggestion..." Dawn shook her head, looking over at Turtwig. "What about... Hmm..."

"...Yes?"

"::NOOB!::"

"ASHES!"

"::Sorry...::"

Dawn then grinned, raising a finger into the air. "I've got it!"

Everyone looked at her eagerly. Everything fell silent.

"POKEY!"

"...Pokey?" Taze looked down at the Turtwig, who smiled.

"Yeah, I mean, he pokes things a lot. So I say Pokey!" Dawn grinned as the three of them exited the small town, headed for Route Two Hundred and Two.

Taze shrugged. "Okay, then. How does that sound, uh... Pokey?"

Pokey giggled. "::YAY! I like it! What does it mean?::"

"::It means you like to stab people.::" Ashes rolled his eyes. "::Now can we go kill stuff already? This is so boring, just walking around! I need to start owning people!::"

Dawn shot him an evil glare. "Do you want to go back inside the ball? And cut it out with all that stupid Internet talk!"

Ashes scampered off to the side of the road, whimpering.

"Didn't think so." Dawn's lips curled into a smirk.

"Okay," Lucas started, pulling his PokeDex out, "time to hunt. If you see ANY sign of movement, then yell. Loudly."

Dawn nodded, and she and Taze looked to the side of the road into the tall grass. The dark-haired girl pulled her binoculars out, scanning all surroundings.

"I call dibs on the first one we see," she said, her hand moving toward her bag where she'd stashed a few of the Pokeballs Rowan had given them before they left.

"Whoever sees it first gets dibs," Lucas told her. "If they don't want to capture it, then you can."

"Who said you get to make all the rules?!" Dawn huffed, zooming into a tree with her binoculars. "You stupid cocky butt-face..."

"What was that?"

"Oh... nothing."

"Well, you two ARE my helpers, after all..." Lucas smiled, running his hand over his red hat.

Dawn snorted. "Your 'helpers'?! Well if you're going to want any help at ALL, you better start being NICE to your 'HELPERS'!"

"Hey, I think I see one!" Taze suddenly stopped, looking to the left side of the road into the thick emerald grass.

Something stirred, and a rustling sound could be heard. He let Pokey jump down onto the ground, and the Turtwig bounded over to the grass, looking around for any sign of wild Pokemon.

"BIDOOOOOOOF!"

"AHHHHHHHHH!" Dawn screamed, even though she was nowhere near the wild Pokemon, which had just jumped out of the grass, right on top of Pokey.

It was just a Bidoof, and the fat beaver-like Pokemon started to gnaw on Pokey's head.

Dawn and Taze scanned it with her PokeDex, but Lucas had no need for doing so, as he had already gathered information on it.

Lucas noticed something strange about the Bidoof, then. Its eyes were cold and dark, unlike a normal Bidoof's, which were usually beady and vivacious.

"::Ahhh! It's slobbering on me! Help! Ashes! Help!::" Pokey cried, dancing around, trying to shake the rabid thing off. Taze gasped in terror.

"Get off, you stupid... BIDOOFUS!" The boy chucked a rock at the Pokemon, and the Bidoof hastily jumped onto the ground and scampered away.

Dawn sighed. "I was hoping for a cool Pokemon. Something we haven't seen yet."

"Hmm..." Lucas started, looking around the eerily empty fields in thought. "Did you guys notice anything... different about that Bidoof?"

"No..." Taze picked up Pokey and gave Lucas a quizzical look.

"Me neither."

Lucas shivered as a sudden wind rustled the tall grass around them, and he started back down the road.

"Come on, let's keep going."

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The trio continued on down the road, on their way to the nearest city, Jubilife. Lucas had brought out his starter, a Piplup, to get some fresh air.

She was not one to be taken lightly.

"::It's so hot! I want to sit down and rest for a while. What are these two gross, smelly BOYS doing here? Ew, gitaway, GITAWAY, you devil monkey! AHH!"

The Piplup cried, frantically waving her wings up and down as Ashes picked her up and ran around with her, just to make her mad.

"::YOU WILL PAY FOR THIS!::" Piplup shouted, pounding on the Chimchar's head with clenched fists. "::LET ME DOWN THIS INSTANT, OR YOU SHALL PAY THE PRICE!!!::"

Ashes smirked, twirling her around in the air as she continued to screech.

"::WHAT price?::" He stressed the first word in a way that was perfect for ticking Piplup's angry switch.

Pokey sighed, looking down at the scene from Taze's head.

This was just great. Ashes and Piplup were already fighting like an old couple.

And they had known each other for two minutes.

"::THE PRICE OF MY BUBBLES!::" Piplup screamed, flailing around in Ashes's arms.

Ashes laughed out loud.

"::Sorry, babe, but your Bubble threat reeks with FAIL.::" He set her down gently, and then scampered back behind Dawn's legs. "::But just because I'm a NICE little devil monkey, I'll leave you alone. For now.::"

Piplup huffed, her face rosy. "::Fine, underling. I will spare you for now. But if you EVER touch me AGAIN--::"

“Ahh. Don’t our Pokemon get along just great?” Lucas asked sarcastically, grinning. He folded his arms on top of his head as he walked.

Dawn shot him a ‘look.’

“Are you joking or just stupid?”

Lucas sighed. “It’s called sarcasm, a thing you clearly don’t understand…”

“Heh. Whatever. I just don’t understand YOUR sarcasm, because it sucks.”

“Shut up, Dawn.” Taze’s eyelids lowered and he smirked at her.

Lucas laughed. Loudly. It was nice to see that Taze was on his side.

Which, of course, infuriated Dawn.

Which was hilarious.

“SHUT UP?!? WHAAAAAT?!”

And so, the humans were now behaving just like Ashes and Piplup, Pokey observed. Bickering to no end, shooting random, spiteful words at one another, all three of them.

And they had only been on this little adventure for an hour.

How similar they were, human and Pokemon, Pokey thought.

How similar.

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“And so… the Legend of the Bidoof Boy came to be.”

“…Whoa. That’s AWESOME! Tell the story again!”

Kimmy sighed, shaking her wavy red hair out of her face. “I’ve already told it three times today. Maybe tonight, when we set up camp.”

“Awww…” a crowd of kids whined as they followed Kimmy through route two hundred and two. Kimmy’s Luxio was a few feet ahead of them, leading the way as he sniffed the ground.

“Hey, look!” One of the kids shouted, pointing down the dirt path to a few figures, which were walking toward them. Everyone looked, and once they had identified the people, they all grinned with uncontainable excitement.

“POKEMON TRAINERS!!!!!”

The kids stampeded down the road, kicking up a cloud of dust as they ran. Kimmy was left alone with Luxio, and two of her friends, blond twins named Haley and Lisa.

“Stupid kids,” she sighed, and ran after them.

“Hey! Hey! Your Pokemon are so cool! Show us some tricks! What can they do?! WHAT CAN THEY DO?!” A young boy demanded, stomping his feet on the ground in front of Lucas, Dawn and Taze. All of the kids were trying to pick up, or at least get to touch, Ashes and Piplup, who were now running around screaming like headless chickens.

“::SAVE ME!::” Ashes screamed as he bounded around Dawn’s legs, frantically trying to escape the grasp of ten insane children.

Piplup was being patted on the head, and other various places as she wore a very, very deadly look of discontent.

“Uhhh… What do we do?” Taze asked, backing way from the kids who were making a small circle around him, trying to jump up and reach Pokey. The Turtwig had firmly planted himself on Taze’s blond head and wasn’t planning on moving any time soon.

“Um… I have no idea,” Lucas said, starting to freak out a bit. Where did all of these kids come from? They had just popped out of nowhere and started to scream and fuss over their Pokemon.

“STAY BACK!” Dawn ordered, holding out her palm to the children, who were trying to reach Ashes. The fire monkey was cowering behind her legs. “I’m warning you, ya little pipsqueaks!”

Suddenly the toot of a whistle could be heard, and all of the kids froze immediately, just like robots that had been commanded at the blink of an eye.

“I’m SO, so sorry!” A redhead girl, the one who had blown the whistle, ran up to Dawn, Lucas and Taze, a look of genuine regret on her face.

Two identical looking blondes ran up behind her, and eyed Lucas sheepishly. The boy grinned, and the two girls sighed dreamily.

The redhead stuck out a hand for Lucas to shake. “I’m Kimmy. I’m really sorry about all this, they just get really excited about seeing trainers. I hope there wasn’t too much damaged caused…”

“Damage? Oh, there was no damage, no sir-ee,” Lucas said reassuringly.

Dawn growled at him. “What—do—you—MEAN?! They practically strangled Piplup, and tore Ashes’s arm off—“

Lucas stomped firmly on Dawn’s foot to shut her up. “Don’t listen to her. It’s fine, really.” Lucas nodded, looking over at Taze, who did the same.

Kimmy sighed in relief. “Thank goodness.”

“Say, what are you all doing, anyway?” Taze asked.

“Oh, we’re just looking for a boy from our neighborhood who went missing a couple of weeks ago.” She pulled a picture of a young boy wearing a blue hat out of her pocket, as if she’d done this a million times. “It’s rumored that he’s been seen around here, so we’ve been coming out every day, looking for him…”

Dawn raised an eyebrow.

“If you’ve happened to notice, the Bidoof in the area have all been acting a little strange,” Kimmy continued. “Their eyes are… different, somehow. And they are behaving in a very strange manner. Anyway, the reports of sightings on the boy, Matt, have all said he was seen with an army of Bidoof at his side…”

“That’s…. weird,” was all Lucas could say.

“Yes. Extremely. So we’ve been out here for the past week or so, searching for him. We haven’t found any sign of him yet.”

“We’ll help look for him!” Taze told her, smiling. Kimmy looked up at him, almost shocked.

“You will?” she asked.

“What? We WILL?” Dawn gagged.

Taze looked at Lucas, who shrugged.

“Sure!”

The kids all cheered, and Kimmy hugged Taze, who froze embarrassedly.

“Thank you!”

Dawn rolled her eyes. “This sucks.”

So, the large group headed down the road toward Jubilife, and at the same time, on the search for the mysterious missing boy.

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In far off fields, hidden beneath the leaves of trees, a dark figure roamed, draining everything in its path of life and happiness.

Black clouds gathered in the sky, and the dark figure rose above the trees.

“Your journey begins here, then.”

And its foreboding presence disappeared, searching for another area to corrupt.

3/End
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XD The Bidoof army has arrived! Anything involving the Bidoof army is automatically super special awesome!

Lucas strikes me as "the pretty boy", who only has to smile and all the fangirls swoon at his feet. His dynamic with Dawn is sure to get interesting in further chapters. And I'm beginning to enjoy Ashes character as "the devil monkey".

*munches on her cookies* I'm not really good at reviewing comedies, due to the rarity of me actually reading one. So just kind of get used to my ramblings.

I'm enjoying this a lot. I just like the fact that it's funny and random.

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Upside the universe's head
Seen October 9th, 2007
Posted October 9th, 2007
75 posts
15.9 Years
The mind boggles at what 'research' Professor Rowan will do with the Clefairys.

Well written, coherent, funny, and original as far as I can tell. I like how the Pokemon's personalities reflect their trainer's. Ashes ; the leet devil monkey. Instant classic
"I saw death rising from the earth, from the ground itself, in one blue field, in stubbled colour."

-Philip K. Dick
Seen October 1st, 2007
Posted October 1st, 2007
5 posts
15.9 Years
New chapter time! THANKS EVERYONE for reviewing! And welcome to Chomp, the new reviewer... >D

*cookies for everyone!*

This is the longest chapter yet! Whooo! Enjoy!



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Chapter 4: Bidoof Boy! Part Two



I had no idea what Taze was thinking when he told that stupid redhead, her two blond bimbo followers, and their army of brats that we’d help them find their precious Bidoof Boy.

What was he thinking? We’d only been gone for a few hours, and already his mind was being corrupted.

I had quickly come to the conclusion that Lucas was at the bottom of all of this. That surely had to be it. There was no other explanation.

That evil, conniving know-it-all was turning Taze against me. Normally, Taze wouldn’t even speak a word to an older, big-boobied chick like that redhead, let alone help her. Lucas was slowly yet surely corrupting Taze’s pure, innocent mind.

And it was up to me to protect Taze, to destroy anything that tried to get in the way of our friendship.

So, the only option left was to annihilate Lucas. Yes. He had to go down. He had already turned Taze against me, and I could tell things were only going to get worse as time went on.

Ashes and I lagged behind the giant group as we continued down the dirt road. I glared at the back of Taze’s head. He was surrounded by about four little kids, who were standing on their tiptoes, patting Pokey on the head as they walked.

Lucas had a blonde twin on either side of him, laughing very obnoxiously at every little thing he said, even if it wasn’t even funny.

And the redhead was leading the group with her Luxio. All of the little kids were chasing Piplup around, acting like savage sugar-high monkeys.

“Okay, we have to take Lucas down,” I told Ashes in a hushed voice, even though there wasn’t a chance anybody would be able to hear me, since the kids were screaming their fat heads off.

“::What do you mean by ‘take him down?’::”

“I mean, teach him a lesson. He doesn’t have the right to take over Taze’s mind and turn him against me…” I snagged a knot out of my black hair, and folded my arms across my chest.

“::So, does that mean kill him?::” Ashes grinned widely, rubbing his hands together wickedly.

“No. Ashes, as much as I’d like to, ya can’t just run around killing people!”

“::Hey, don’t have a Miltank! I was just kidding! So what do we do, then?::”

“Well…”

Ashes blinked. “::Yeah? Yeah? It better be something REALLY GOOD!::”

“We can’t just be mean to him, ‘cause he’s pretty good at dishing out annoying insults. I think we should just make them feel guilty about doing what they’ve done. Let’s ignore them, and maybe even run off. They’ll wonder where we are and then they’ll feel really bad, and when they find us we’ll pretend we’re sad!”

Ashes gave me a weird look. “::If you say so…::”

“HEY! Don’t question my plan. It’ll work, trust me.” I nodded, and then picked up the pace a little. The huge group was getting further and further away, and to be honest, I was surprised nobody had noticed I was so far behind.

We walked for what seemed like hours, keeping a lookout in the tall grass on the side of the road, though nobody went into it in fear of getting attacked by the Bidoof Boy.

What, were they crazy? There was no such thing as a kid with an army of Bidoof. Maybe he was missing, but he certainly wasn’t living in the wild with them like some sort of Tarzan.

Soon enough, the sun was beginning to set, and the group set up camp beneath a large oak tree in a clearing on the side of the road.

Ashes and I followed reluctantly and sat down on a log near a fire pit. Lucas and the two blonde twins were heaving in branches and any sort of wood they could find.

All of the kids were playing tag in an open area under the trees, and Kimmy and her Luxio were supervising the game, making sure none of them did anything stupid.

Taze was nowhere to be found. I was going to ask where he was, but then remembered that I wasn’t supposed to care.

I glared at the fire pit as Lucas was rearranging the wood in preparation to start the fire.

I returned Ashes to his Pokeball before Lucas could ask me to use him to start the fire and went off into the woods behind where the kids were playing.

I scratched my head underneath my white beanie. I really needed a shower. How long were we going to be wasting time out here? We were supposed to be in Jubilife City by now…

True, there was nothing there worth seeing, but it was one step closer to Oreburgh City, where I knew for sure there was a Gym. I didn’t know about Lucas or Taze, but I wanted to take the Gym challenge… and maybe compete in the Sinnoh League.

I didn’t know where I was going, but I found a giant rock in between a couple of trees. I sat down on top of it, looking down at my dangling feet.

A Starly flew by and landed on the ground a few yards away, pecking at the base of a tree for any sign of food.

I sighed. Nobody had taken notice of me. Nobody had said a word to me since the brat pack showed up.

Well, a little girl did ask me if I would go with her to find a port-o-potty (the answer was no), but that didn’t count.

Maybe I was doing something wrong? They were supposed to NOTICE when I was pissed off, not ignore me even more!

I took off my beanie and stuffed it into by yellow bag, then scratched my head furiously. I was sweaty, and my hair felt nasty, and I wanted to sleep in a nice warm bed, not in a sleeping bag on the lumpy dirt some Pokemon had probably pooped in before.

Just when I was about to get up and walk around some more, a Pokemon I hadn’t seen yet scampered out in front of me, sniffing the ground.

Its body was half-blue, half black, and it had a pair of huge ears, which were, if it was even possible, bigger than Ashes’s.

“Whee!” I squealed, bringing out my Pokedex, and scanned it at once. The machine said it was a Shinx.

I smiled wickedly and released Ashes. The Chimchar rubbed his eyes, looking around.

“::Wah? I was just sleeping! What’re we doing, what’re we doing?!::”

“We’re going to capture that Shinx, that’s what,” I told him, pointing a finger at the Shinx, which had just bounded behind a tree. “GO GET IT! Ember!”

“::Mmm… noob meat…::” Ashes scampered off behind the tree to find the Shinx, which, moments later, came running out followed by a stream of fireballs.

“Ember again!”

Ashes inhaled, firing off another Ember, which hit the Shinx square in the face. Its fur started to spark, and for the first time in the battle, it got into a fighting position, and then shot a jolt of electricity at Ashes, who had been bounding toward it. Ashes fell to the ground, stopped dead in his tracks.

“One more Ember, and then we’ll try to catch it,” I told him, and he nodded, sending off several more fireballs, which streaked through the air like bullets, pelting Shinx in the side.

“Shiii,” it panted, glaring at Ashes, who was dancing around.

I took out a Pokeball, enlarged it, and threw it at the Shinx. The ball opened and sucked it up in a flash of red light, then dropped to the ground and started to shake.

It shook three times, and I was about to jump up and celebrate when it burst open and the Shinx jumped out, running away as fast as it could.

“GRAAAAAH!” I wailed, sprinting after it. “Ashes, make sure it doesn’t get away!”

“::Right, sorry, I’m GOING!::” Ashes took off, shooting Ember at the Shinx, who was starting to slow down, panting even more.

It turned around to face us, and I grabbed another Pokeball and threw it.

“We’ll capture it this time,” I told Ashes, grinning as Shinx was engulfed in red light and sucked into the ball.

It shook one, two times, and then it burst open again and Shinx ran off once more.

“YOU’VE GOT TO BE JOKING ME!” I screamed, dashing after it with Ashes. “That’s impossible! Come back here you little devil!”

Ashes and I ran through the woods, looking everywhere, but there was no sign of the Shinx.

“Crap,” I swore, hitting my hand against my forehead and letting it slide down. “It got away…”

“::Hey, LOOK!::” Ashes shouted, pointing to the right, and he ran off in that direction.

“Wha?” I followed, wondering if it could be the Shinx…

But, much to my dismay, it wasn’t. Standing there, inspecting a Pokeball, stood Taze and Pokey. Taze was cleaning the Pokeball with his shirt, and Pokey was doing a little victory dance.

I froze, my jaw dropped. Had they caught the Shinx…?

Taze looked up, smiling. “Oh, hey Dawn… Pokey and I just caught a Shinx!” He held out the Pokeball, beaming.

“WHAT. IN. Hell?!” My jaw dropped as I stared at the Pokeball he was holding. “You CAUGHT IT?!”

Ashes sighed. “::Here we go…::”

“Err… yeah, we were just walking and then we saw a tired-looking Shinx run right in front of us, and so I captured it—“

“YOU WHAT?!”

“::Taylor, I think we should… er, run.::”

Taze sweatdropped, backing way from me, and finally he broke out into a run as I chased him.

“I weakened that Shinx! It should be MINE! You moron, I can’t believe you CAUGHT IT!”

Pokey screamed, jumping on top of his trainer’s head as I stormed after them, holding my yellow bag in case I got near enough to use it to hit them.

“::She has a weapon! I repeat, she has a weapon!::” Ashes called, trailing after me, Taze, and Pokey.


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“Kumbaya, my Lord, kumbaya…”

The large group was circled around the giant campfire, which Lucas had been forced to start by hand, since Dawn and Ashes had been nowhere to be found…

The kids were roasting marshmallows and telling ghost stories. Kimmy was playing her ukulele and leading the song, Lucas was talking to the twins, and Taze and Pokey were stuffing themselves with smores.

Dawn, on the other hand, was grumbling to herself as she sat alone on a log behind a group of screaming kids.

“Ooh, your Piplup is SO cute! Do you have any other Pokemon?” Lisa, one of the blonde-haired twins asked, winking at Lucas, who chuckled.

“Oh, I’ve got a Starly… that’s all though. I kind of just started out, y’know…”

Haley gasped in awe. “You just started out? Well that doesn’t matter, you’re still a tough, brave trainer, aren’t you?”

“Yeah,” Lisa said, “I’d never even dream of going out and being a Pokemon trainer… isn’t it scary?”

“Err, well, I don’t exactly know…” Lucas shrugged, then stood up to go roast a marshmallow.

Lisa and Haley watched him go over to Kimmy, pluck a marshmallow out, and stab it onto a long tree branch.

“Great job, you just freaked him out! Now he’s run away!” Haley smacked her sister over the head.

“ME?! You were the one who was stroking his arm!”

“WHY I OUGHTA!!”

“EEP! LET—GO—OFMYHAIR!”

A little blonde girl, the same one who had asked Dawn if she would go find a port-o-potty with her, was waving a flaming marshmallow around on the end of a stick, and it flew off and landed right in Dawn’s lap.

“AHHHHH!” Dawn screamed, standing up, batting the flaming marshmallow off of her skirt, and shot a glare at the little girl. If Dawn’s looks could kill, the little girl would be dead twice over.

“I’m sorry, scary lady, I’m really sorry!” The girl shouted, and her friends all ran away, afraid that Dawn would attack them all.

“I’ve had enough,” Dawn growled as she stomped off into the dark woods. “These stupid kids have gone too far!”

She brought her bag and Ashes’s pokeball with her, and once she felt she was far enough away from the camp, she sat down in the dirt and looked up into the few patches of the dark blue sky that were still visible through the treetops.

It had only been the first day, and already her journey was a disaster. Lucas and Taze were paying her no attention, the stupid little kids were trying to set her clothes on fire, and Taze stole the Shinx she was going to catch…

Dawn sat up and rummaged around in her yellow bag, bringing out a deck of old cards. She started to shuffle them, over and over again, until her thumbs became sore.

Frrrrrrip. Frrrrrip.

Shuffle, shuffle, shuffle.

Again, again, again.

It was something she did whenever she needed to cool off. Like whenever her mom grounded her, or she got a bad mark on a test, or her dad came home…

“Hey!”

Dawn looked behind her shoulder. It was Lucas. She turned back around, pretending she hadn’t seen him.

He sat down beside her, flicking a drop of melted marshmallow off of his jeans. “What are you doing out here by yourself?”

Dawn grunted. “Why do you care?”

She shuffled the cards a few more times before Lucas spoke again.

“Err… Just wondering. I saw you come out here after those kids threw the flaming marshmallow on you, and I could tell you were pretty pissed—“

“No, really? You’re so smart,” Dawn rolled her eyes, shuffling her cards violently.

Lucas raised an eyebrow. “What’s gotten into YOU? Oh, wait, you’ve been like this from the start. Crazy, mean, and selfish.”

Dawn clenched her fist. “Why do you have to be such a jerk?”

With a smirk, Lucas said, “Don’t take it personally. It’s just how I am.”

Dawn shot him an angry look.

“Alright, sorry, sorry. But really, why are you so ticked?”

The girl snorted. “Like I’d tell you… You probably don’t even care. You’re just trying to be the good guy, the guy who everyone is friends with, the one who always does everything right. But you’re not, so stop trying.”

Anger coated every word she spoke, sparking off of every spiteful syllable that she spat from her mouth.

Lucas, taken aback, turned away from her, looking into the dark woods.

“So that’s what you think it is…”

Dawn flinched, looking over at him. She hadn’t expected him to say anything after that. He was supposed to go away!

“What…?”

“Never mind… why do you keep shuffling those cards?”

“Hey. You’re changing the subject.”

“You wouldn’t want to know, anyway. It’s nothing. Why do you keep shuffling the cards?” he asked again, pointing at the old deck she held.

Dawn, completely forgetting that she was supposed to be ignoring Lucas, merely shrugged.

“It helps me forget…” she whispered, shuffling the cards slowly.

“Forget what?”

Dawn snapped back to reality, clutching the deck tightly. “None of your business. What, do you expect me to just spill out my whole life story?”

Lucas grinned. “Well, sort of. We’re traveling together now, so it wouldn’t hurt to know something about the crazy girl who I’m going to be spending a lot of time with.”

“Don’t take it personally…” she started mockingly, “but I hardly know you. So it wouldn’t make much sense to tell you, would it?”

“Um… I guess not.” Lucas fell onto his back, looking up at the sky. “Well, anyway… We haven’t found any sign of that missing boy, so in the morning I think we should get going into Jubilife City… I mean, I’m kind of guilty for not being able to help them more, but there’s not much we can do, is there?”

“Good, you’re starting to come to your senses. All we’ve done is waste time looking for that ‘Bidoof Boy.’ We could have been in Jubilife by now…” Dawn tied a rubber band around her cards, then stuffed them into her bag.

“Why do you detest helping people? You’ve been a stick in the mud the whole day, you haven’t talked to anyone, or even made an attempt to be a nice person. Sorry, it just confuses me.” Lucas frowned slightly.

Dawn stood up abruptly. “I think you will be the cause of my death someday, Lucas, so I’m just going to get away now before you kill me early. I’m going to set up a sleeping bag away from all the idiocy and go to sleep right now. Even though I know you don’t care, just thought I’d let you know. Since you’re the supposed ‘leader’ of the three of us, of this journey.”

She slumped off into a dark part of the woods, leaving Lucas alone.

He was a stupid jerk; trying to be nice… he wasn’t though. Why couldn’t he leave her alone?

Dawn was just about to pull out her flashlight when she heard a scream.

“AHHHHHH! IT’S THE BIDOOF BOY! RUN!!!!!!”

She looked up to see all of the people around the campfire scatter at once, diving behind trees and shrieking with terror.

Several Bidoof were entering the camp, scaring off the kids and gnawing on the smores they had left behind.

A violent wind blew past, ruffling the trees, sending leaves and broken branches through the air. Dawn shielded her face with her arms and cautiously crept closer to the camp, where tons of Bidoof were scattered, looking through bags and eating their food.

A Youngster emerged from the Bidoof army, entering the camp. He stopped in front of the fire and looked down into it, his arms crossed over his chest. His blue hat was dirty and had holes in it, and his clothes looked like rags.

“The Bidoof Boy…” Dawn suddenly recalled the picture Kimmy had shown them earlier. It was the same kid.

Suddenly, Lucas run past with his Piplup, looking like they were about to run into the midst of battle, which was an incredibly stupid thing to do.

“Lucas!” Dawn called, waving him over to hide behind a large rock with her. He saw her and jogged over, crouching next to her.

“What’s going on? Where did all this wind come from?”

“Bidoof Boy’s going on. And I don’t know. But what’re we going to do?”

Lucas bit his lip. “I don’t know… The Bidoof look… possessed. If we go near the kid, they’ll be sure to attack. There are at least thirty of them. To fight would be suicide…”

“D’you know where Taze is?”

“Taze? I haven’t seen him…”

“Well, maybe we could distract the Bidoof with our Pokemon. It’d be risky, but we could lure them out of the way and then rescue the kid…”

“That’s ridiculous—“

“HEY! How dare you!!” Dawn was about to smack him over the head when they heard a shout.

“MATT!!!!!!!!”

Suddenly, Kimmy jumped out of a nearby bush, throwing her arms out, running toward the boy. Tears were steaming down her face as she neared him.

“Is she CRAZY?!” Dawn gawked at her.

“Matt, please come home! We’ve been worried sick! Why are you out here, what are you thinking?! Stop all this nonsense and—“

Kimmy stopped, noticing all of the Bidoof circling around her, barring their teeth. The redhead looked back at Matt, tears welling up in her eyes.

The boy just stared at her, his face expressionless.

“Don’t you know who I am? It’s me, Kimmy! Your sister…”

Dawn looked at Lucas. “She’s his sister?!”

“Hm. I didn’t know that either…”

“Well what are we going to do? We can’t let the Bidoof EAT her! We need to stand up! Do something about this!” Dawn rose, grabbing Ashes’s Pokeball from her belt and enlarging it. “Let’s kick some Bidoof butt.”

“You do know that we’ll probably get killed, right?” Lucas sweatdropped, releasing his Starly from her ball.

“Yes, I know.” Dawn looked down at Piplup, Ashes and Starly. “Okay, guys. Just run around like headless chickens and maybe it will confuse the Bidoof. Whatever you do, don’t fight! And don’t let them attack you! Now go!”

“::RAHHH! PHEAR ME!::” Ashes screamed, running out into the middle of the camp, thumping on his chest with his fists. “::ME ASHES. ME ANGRY!::”

“::Ahhhh! Don’t you DARE touch me, you dirty, mangy, ugly, buck-toothed freaks!::” Piplup ran like no tomorrow, flailing her wings around as a group of Bidoof started to chase her.

“::Hey, weirdoes! Come and get me! Bwee-hee-HEE!::” Starly landed on the ground, waited until the Bidoof started to run toward her, and then flew up into the air again, landing behind the confused Pokemon.

“Now where the heck is Taze…” Dawn ran across the camp, looking behind bushes. She saw groups of scared kids hiding, but no sign of Taze.

“::HIIIIE-YAH! I have no idea what that means, but oh well! Prepare to.. uh, meet your doom!::”

Dawn saw Pokey and Taze’s Shinx stream into the midst of craziness, dashing around with the others as the Bidoof chased them.

“::I hope I don’t have to fight…::” Shinx said, carefully jumping over a group of Bidoof, who were right on Ashes’s tail. “::Violence solves nothing…::”

“::Oh shut up, ya carebear! We’re not fighting anyway, just making them go crazy! Now c’mon!::” Ashes yelled, grabbing Shinx’s tail and pulling her along.

Lucas was with Kimmy, who was trying to get her brother Matt to cooperate, but the boy just stood there like a mindless robot. It was as if he couldn’t even see Kimmy.

Lucas noticed that Matt’s eyes were exactly like the Bidoof’s, dark and angry. No pupils could be seen, and though it was difficult to tell in the darkness, what should have been the whites of his eyes looked black.

The wind was still howling, and it was still freezing, and Dawn could still find no sign of Taze… he had sent his Pokemon out, but he wasn’t here…




A dark, flowing figure stood before Taze, who was sprawled on the ground, crawling backwards as fast as he could. He didn’t know where he was… everything was dark around him; it was like he wasn’t even on earth anymore. It was deathly silent, as if time had frozen and everything had gone black.

The ghost in front of him drew closer. Taze had no idea what it was, or where it had come from… its long, claw-like fingers reached out at the young boy, just inches from his face.

Taze looked into the piercing blue eyes of the ghost, or whatever it was…

Foolish humans… they’re all so weak." The ghost withdrew his hand and appeared to be retreating back into the darkness.

“W-what… what are you? And how are you talking to me? Are you a Pokemon?”

Indeed. Tell me, human, what is your most desperate desire?

Taze blinked his large green eyes. “My most… what? Why do you want to know?”

You are an interesting human. Interesting, but weak. By merely looking at you, I can tell that you are an insecure boy with a longing for a true, whole family… you have a protective side, though you do not often show it, and you try to mask your true self and strive to be brave and responsible…

Taze gulped, backing further away from the wispy shadow. A flowing white substance covered most of its face, and its expression was unreadable.

I shall keep an eye on you… the other boy is no longer needed.

The figure vanished, and the blackness faded. Taze was back on the ground of the forest, his heart hammering in his head. His face was in the dirt…

He sat up, wiping the mud off of his nose as he panted. What had just happened? What WAS that thing? A pokemon?

Whatever it was… it didn’t look nice.

He stood up, staggering back toward the camp, where kids were still screaming…

He didn’t even remember how he had gotten that deep in the forest. The last thing he remembered was seeing the Bidoof come into the camp… and releasing Pokey and Shinx…

“Taze?!”

He looked around and saw Dawn standing there, her hands on her hips.

“Where the heck have you been?!”

“I…” Taze trailed off, finding himself unable to speak… he was too shaken up from the unexplainable event that had just happened.

“Hurry up, the Bidoof Boy is here!” Dawn grabbed his arm and led him back toward the camp. “I’ve been looking all over for you… what have you been doing?”

“Oh… I had to pee,” he lied, still in a daze.

“Well come on, there’s tons of Bidoof, and all the kids are scared, and—“

Dawn halted as they reached the camp, scanning the scene with awe.

“What… happened?”

The Bidoof were all scampering off. The kids had come out from behind their bushes and were standing in a circle around Kimmy, who was hugging her brother.

Dawn and Taze stepped over empty marshmallow bags over to Lucas.

“Where have you two been?” Lucas asked. “Something weird happened… all of a sudden the wind stopped, and the Bidoof ran away, and Matt went back to normal.”

Matt blinked his eyes, looking up at his sister confusedly.

“Where am I?” he asked as he sat up. He looked down at his ragged, dirty clothes and gasped.

“You’ve been missing for two weeks… we’ve been looking for you. You had this huge army of Bidoof… it was like you could control them,” Kimmy said.

Matt furrowed his brow. “I don’t remember anything…”

“Come on, let’s get you home. Everyone will be so happy to know you’re back!” Kimmy helped him up, and all of the kids ran toward him, hugging him and squealing excitedly.

Kimmy turned to Lucas, Dawn, Taze, and the Pokemon. “Thanks so much for all your help.”

Lucas chuckled. “We didn’t really do anything…”

“::What?! We sure DID! Those Bidoof were CRAZY!::” Starly shouted angrily. “::I better get a big breakfast in the morning…”

“Anyway… it’s dark, but we’re only about fifteen minutes away from the city. We should get back as soon as possible!” Kimmy smiled, nodding at the twins, who rounded all the kids up and started to pick up their things.

Once everyone had gotten their things, it was time to part ways.

“Bye, Lucas,” Haley and Lisa said through sobs. “When you become a famous trainer, look back and remember the great times you spent with us… WE WILL NEVER FORGET!!!!”

“Err… yeah, okay…” Lucas sweatdropped.

“Bye, Taze, Lucas… and… er, Dawn. Right?” Kimmy held out her hand for the three of them to shake.

Dawn growled, shaking the redhead’s hand quickly.

“Thanks so much for deciding to help. We would have been Bidoof dinner if it weren’t for your Pokemon.” Kimmy patted Piplup on the head.

“No problem!” Lucas grinned.

“Yeah… glad you found Matt.”

“…Uh, bye.” Dawn glared as the group, guided by Kimmy’s Luxio and a couple of flashlights, went down the dark path toward Jubilife.

Dawn sighed. “I HATE kids…”

“Aww, you know you were warming up to them all at the end. You were really eager to help when the Bidoof army came.” Lucas smirked, and Dawn flushed.

“I WAS NOT!”

“Were too!”

“NOT!”

“Hey, guys?” Taze started.

“Hmm?”

“That boy… Matt. Something was controlling him.”

Lucas’s eyebrows went up. “What? Something was controlling him…?”

“Yeah. I ran into something in the forest. It was some sort of shadow. It was what caused the wind, I’m pretty sure. I wasn’t exactly certain what it was, but it said something like, ‘the other boy is no longer needed.’ And then when we went back to the camp, he was all right.”

“So you’re saying he was possessed?” Dawn asked.

“That would explain the weird eyes… d’you think the Bidoof were being controlled too?” Lucas pulled at his earlobe in thought.

“Maybe…”

“Okay, I’m officially getting creeped out by talking about this. Can we just go to bed?! I’ve had enough excitement for one day.” Dawn pulled the two boys toward the fire and forced them to set up their sleeping bags.

Taze was sure not to mention anything more about the mysterious figure that had confronted him that night…

Something told him it was better to keep it to himself.

The three new friends and their Pokemon sat around the fire in their sleeping bags, trying to sleep.

Emphasis on the trying.

“Ahh. Tomorrow, Jubilife City!”

“Okay, shut up, I’m trying to sleep.”

“Good night everyone…!”

“Sleep tight…”

“::How can you sleep tight?::”

“…Pokey, just go to bed.”

“::Oh. Sorry.::”

“…I’m kind of afraid what Dawn will do at night, while we’re asleep…”

“HEY!”

“Bwahaha. Just kidding.”

“::Okay, everyone just SHUT UP, or I will set you all on fire!::”

“::You’re the one who keeps on tooting! It’s disgusting! VILE!::”

“::It smells like flowers…::”

“::EWWWWWW!::”

“:: Piplup, you knoooow you like it…::”

“::I do NOT!::”

“::Aw, come on, don’t pretend like you’ve never farted.::”

“::That is PERSONAL information--!::”

“I’m serious, guys, shut your big ugly pieholes or I will come over there and do it in your faces—“

“::OKAY, OKAY! Zzzz…::”



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An igloo in Canada
Seen December 17th, 2014
Posted July 20th, 2011
1,770 posts
16 Years
Oh, yeah what you said on your first post "the rival doesn't have a name".
I wanted to tell you a secret... The rival in Pokemon Diamond and Pearl is named "Emerald", but is a more teenager version of him. If you want to see the original Emerald sprite, go to Serebii.net and go to Pokemon Manga Character Bios, you will see that the rival looks pretty close to Emerald.
The reason why they added Emerald as the rival in D/P is because they never added him in the R/S/E (Ruby, Sapphire and Emerald) Versions, so they are making up for that. Anyway, I hope this helps! I know this, also, because I look at Manga all the time, you can say that I study it.
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Seen October 1st, 2007
Posted October 1st, 2007
5 posts
15.9 Years
Ello everyone! I guess I kind of... er, forgot that I had posted my fic here. XD I've been continuing it over at FF.net, and it's currently on chapter 16 and it's doing well. Anyway, if you guys are still interested, here's the next chapter. It's short and le crap-ful, but oh well. =P

Hope ya enjoy. Comments appreciated! ^_^


Chapter Five: Jubilife City! The City of... Jubilant... Life


The clouds were slightly hovering over the steadily rising sun that morning, and the Starly were chirping as they flew through the sky, looking for any sign of food.

Dawn, Lucas and Taze had reached the tollbooth of Jubilife City. After scanning their ID's, which were conveniently built-in to their Pokedexes, they proceeded into the outskirts of the biggest city in Sinnoh.

"Ahhh... Jubilife City. The city of... jubilant... life." Dawn grinned as she surveyed her surroundings.

Kids were running around with their Pokemon, the road was crammed with bicyclists and bustling people doing their morning chores, and even though it was nine o'clock, the shops were already crowded with people.

"What is there to do here?" Taze asked, looking down at a giant map of the city he'd picked up at the tollbooth. "Hmm… There's a TV station, and the Global Trading Center... but it says you can't go there--"

"--unless you have a Gym Badge," Lucas finished, smirking.

"Pah. Know-it-all." Dawn snorted, marching in front of the boys.

Just then, a cyclist came zooming down the road, nearly crashing into Dawn, but swerved out of the way at the last second.

"HEY, BUDDY! WATCH WHERE YOU'RE GOING!!!" Dawn shouted, shaking a fist at the fleeing bicycler. "Idiot..."

"Hey, you're the one who's walking in the bike lane..." Taze pointed out.

Dawn glared.

"Sorry, just saying." Taze shrunk back, sticking his nose into the map once more.

Lucas sighed. "There's nothing really to do here, even though this city is huge. I heard the Poketch company is somewhere around here, though... maybe we could try and get a few--"

Lucas was interrupted, however, as a rotund man wearing a purple suit ran up to them. His eyes sparkled as he looked the trio over.

"AAAAAH. Pokemon trainers! I could spot you from a mile away! And you're not just the worthless Youngsters or Bug Catchers either. You're TOP CLASS! Perfect... perfect..." The chubby man rubbed his sausage-like fingers together, grinning madly.

Dawn raised an eyebrow. "Who the heck are you?"

The man looked like he'd just been slapped in the face. "Who am I?!?!? WHO AM I?!?! Why, I am the President of the Poketch Company!" He laughed jovially, stroking his little goatee.

"Uh... cool?" Taze sweatdropped.

"SO!" the President said, raising a fat finger. "I am running a special campaign right now, but I only allow the elite trainers to partake! And YOU three qualify as elite! ISN'T THAT JUST WONDERFUL!?"

Lucas laughed a little. "...Mister, sorry, but we just started yesterday, we’re not elite--"

"NO MATTER! You should be on your knees right now, thanking me for being so generous. You see, all of the joke trainers like the Bug Catchers are boycotting the Poketches right now, since I won't let them have any, and so... business has been slow for a while."

"Why don't you just sell them the Poketches? Isn't the whole point of your huge business to make lots and lots of money? Shouldn't people like you not care a thing about your customers, so long as you keep raking in the cash?" Taze asked.

The President nodded very slowly, rubbing his round red nose. He reminded Taze of Santa Claus.

"Hmm. Yes. You have a point. But Poketches weren't meant to be something just ANYONE can have. Only the good trainers. Which is why I'm going to be nice and give you the chance to WIN them!"

"YAY!" Dawn squealed. "Can mine be green?"

"NO." The President glared at Dawn. "Yours HAS to be pink."

Dawn was slightly scared at this point. "What...? Why? I HATE PINK!"

The President's lips curled into a giant smile then, and he burst out laughing. "I was only kidding! BWAHAHA! Sorry, I just love to pull people's legs."

Random passersby were now stopping to watch the scene. Lucas looked at them uncomfortably.

"Hey, are we going to get on with the campaign or what?" he asked.

"OH YES." The President nodded, clearing his throat. "It goes like this. There are three clowns that you are going to have to find… or chase, rather. So you see, it won’t be easy, seeing as this city is giant.”

Dawn, Lucas and Taze nodded, listening intently.

“Anyway, you can choose to track them down in a group, or you can split up. There are virtually no rules, except…” The President trailed off, smirking.

“Except WHAT? What?!” Dawn asked. “HURRY UP, the suspense is killin’ me.”

“Except, you CANNOT USE YOUR POKEMON! BWAHAHAHA!” The President snapped his fingers, and out of nowhere, three tall men wearing yellow clown suits jumped on Taze, Lucas, and Dawn respectively, snatching their Pokeballs from their belts.

Dawn’s clown had tackled her to the ground, and he got up and ran away into the crowds of people immediately.

“Hey! HE DIDN’T EVEN HELP ME UP! The jerk…” Dawn rose, only to see that Taze and Lucas had already started chasing their clowns.

“Hmm. Guess we’re splitting up. Fine, then.” Dawn dashed after her clown, who was weaving through the crowds toward a giant cinema.

Dawn bumped into several people as she sprinted, even causing one woman to drop her bag of groceries.

“SORRY LADY! I’d help ya, but I’m not going to! Bwahah!”

Dawn gave the lady the best guilty look she could manage, but when she turned around, the clown was nowhere in sight.

“Now where’d that little thief go…?”

Dawn wandered over to the cinema, which wasn’t open yet. It was roped off, but she snuck under the ropes anyway and went inside, following her gut feeling that the clown had gone inside.

The interior was gigantic, and there were flashing signs and lights everywhere. The walls were golden, which complemented the plush crimson carpet nicely.

Dawn went down a dark hallway, which led to the different theatres. She shivered. The place was so big and dark, and empty…

Bump…

“Eep!” Dawn gasped, looking around, but then realized that someone had just gone through a theatre door. She tiptoed down the hallway, wondering which theatre the sound had come from.

She decided to go into the theatre with a sign reading, “The Woes of Missy the Machamp” and closed the heavy door slowly so it she wouldn’t give herself away with a loud sound. She crept around the corner of the theater and then stood up, looking over all of the seats for any sign of the clown.

Dawn walked down the aisle, looking down the rows of seats, but the theatre seemed empty.

“BWAAAH!!”

“AH!” Dawn screamed, jumping back in shock from the sudden noise.

The clown had just jumped up from the very front row, where he had been hiding, and zoomed out the emergency exit door.

“GET BAAAACK HEEREEE!” Dawn screamed, running after him through the exit and into the bright morning light.

She shielded her eyes, unable to see very well, but managed to spot the clown running across the road into a giant shop called Toy World.
Taze sighed, sitting down on a bench on the side of the road. He had no idea where his clown had gone… maybe he Dawn and Lucas should have stuck together and found the clowns one at a time, instead of spreading out?

The blond boy watched people walk past, and he heaved his large brown shoulder bag over his head and set it down beside him.

“I wonder how Dawn and Lucas are doing… I bet they’ve already caught their clowns…”

Taze felt his stomach rumble. All he’d had that to eat that morning before setting out for the city was a couple Cheri berries they had found on the ground.

No, they hadn’t packed any food, being the geniuses they were. The grocery store was supposed to be their first stop in the city, but of course, they had all quickly forgotten about eating as soon as they entered the giant city.

Taze ruffled his messy hair and closed his eyes. He was tired… he hadn’t slept well last night.

He kept having nightmares about that creature he’d met the night before.

Bidoof boy…

What was the deal with him, anyway?

It was like he had been controlled…

By that dark shadow thing…

Taze pushed those thoughts out of his mind, trying to enjoy the feeling of the warm sun on his eyelids.

It felt nice…

His thoughts drifted elsewhere, to subjects that any thirteen-year-old boy would think of, like Pokemon battling, and food, and girls…

Like Dawn…

“WHAT?! What am I thinking?!” Taze said out loud.

He opened an eye and saw an old lady give him a strange look. Taze screwed his eyes shut again, shaking his head vigorously.

“Hey, Mommy, look! A clown!”

Taze’s eyes shot open, and he nearly jumped out of his seat. He looked into the street and saw a little girl pointing to a clown in a yellow suit running into a giant toy store. He didn’t know if it was his clown, but he might as well run after it.

After putting his shoulder bag back on, he sprinted into the crowd after the clown.

5/End