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Old October 2nd, 2003 (2:17 PM).
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    Some of ya'll from tha' old PC saw this poem on my sig, and well, I was wonderin' if I could get some feedback.

    I am SOOOO worried about getting in trouble for posting a similar hread it isn't even funny! So if a Mod or Admin is angry with me for this, I'M SORRY!!! -very afraid- Seriously, I am...

    Okay... Here's the first poem.

    -Lonliness-
    She stood alone, clutching her body
    As the light engulfed her slim figure
    And she accepted it all
    Hoping never to see her faults reflected
    Never to see her wrongs
    Yet he pulled her back
    Into his warm embrace
    Where she would stay in his arms, forever more
    Wishing everything away
    Until she woke from her dream
    And snapped back into reality.

    This poem has a deep underlying meaning. Ask, and I shall tell you. But first, I just want to see if anyone can get what the main thought of the poem is.
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    Old October 3rd, 2003 (1:15 PM).
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      Very good.:D

      Me like...XD!


      I like wrting poetry about the weather,death,life and love.

      What do you like writing it about?
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      Old October 3rd, 2003 (4:40 PM).
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        I write a lot of depression oriented poetry. I also tend to write about love, where one partner dies of lonliness ect. Obviously what I write is VERY dark. Like the following poem.

        Browned and golden leaves encircled the twosome standing under the harvest moon
        The orange glow illuminated the pair, their features more visible against the light
        One, a cold and distant man, the other a warm and harmonic woman
        Her auburn eyes lifted to meet a pair of gray that were set before her
        The time of death grew closer, creeping upon its beholder
        Her timely breath grew short, her racing heartbeats coming to a halt
        Joyful pupils became stone, as the lids closed, framed by plethoras of copper-colored eyelashes, and sealed with the kiss of winters frost
        He held her lifeless body in his weighted limbs, his branches sagging under her
        The atmosphere that surrounded him wilted and perished as his despair deepened, just as he had done
        The world grew frigid as autumn soon became no more, the colors of winter gaining control

        My CLUE English teacher had me change it sooooo many times, she thought it was about a gruesome murder. @_@ This is just basically what I prefer to write. Anywho, whaddya think?
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        Old October 4th, 2003 (2:28 PM).
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          Very good.

          I think your poems are great!
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          Old October 4th, 2003 (3:54 PM).
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            Very good.

            I think your poems are great!
            Wow, that's is SO nice of you! I love getting feedback no my poetry. Thanks!
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            Old October 4th, 2003 (6:49 PM).
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              Wow, you're very good at writing poems. They all seem sad, but they're very deep...
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              Old October 5th, 2003 (10:50 AM).
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                Wow, you're very good at writing poems. They all seem sad, but they're very deep...
                Arigato, Kayleigh! For all of my fans (lol) out there, here's my newest one.

                All or Nothing

                Im in too deep for my own good
                The walls are gonna keep me in
                Crushing me until I give it all up
                Unless I fight the power within
                Bringin' forth the fighter in me
                I defeat the demons in my soul
                And nothings been given
                Cept my love, wasted on you.

                I wrote this pretty quickly, it makes me think of the song In the End by Linkin Park. It's a little different then what I usually write.
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                Old October 6th, 2003 (3:09 PM).
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                  I love the song "In the end" and i also love that poem.
                  Once again another great poem by PC`s great poetry member.
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                  Old October 6th, 2003 (5:36 PM).
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                    -blushes fiercely- I just write my emotions out on paper. I think about the stuff that happened that day or whenever. Or I think about my passion for love and lonliness. Y'know, next time ya write, try drawing your inspiration from something that's happened to you or is going on.

                    Thank ye, again, Shelz, for the flattery, it means a lot!
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                    Old November 26th, 2003 (4:52 PM).
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                      If you were still am member I wish you would post more beautiful poetry.
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                      Old November 26th, 2003 (5:58 PM).
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                        Shelz, I may write beautiful poetry, but I think few will read it after viewing that chat you posted. Besides... Everyone thinks I've left, if I come back abrubtly, it'll look like I'm a drama queen.
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