Freedom

Started by Sumomo & Kotoko July 21st, 2007 2:46 AM
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Sumomo & Kotoko

Seen February 14th, 2012
Posted February 14th, 2012
1,947 posts
18.8 Years
Freedom

I'm still haunted by the past,
the memory of us isn't fading fast.
It keeps me up, for hours on end.
Sleepless, restless, thinking
of everything we could have been.
You're like a diamond in the ruff.
You talked big, but I called your bluff.
It ends up you were hollow.
Fake, heartless, and shallow.
Walking away from you is
the best thing I've ever done.
My reward? My freedom,
and all your lies that come undone.
Now I stand, on my own and alive.
And this is my anthem,
to my soul I have arrived.
Seen August 17th, 2009
Posted July 20th, 2009
925 posts
17 Years
I found that really sweet, actually~

... I couldn't figure out how to make 'Hollow' and 'Shallow' rhyme.. even though they should! right? ._.

Anyways! I liked it alot. Great piece of work! :2:
~because everything in life has a beat~

Sumomo & Kotoko

Seen February 14th, 2012
Posted February 14th, 2012
1,947 posts
18.8 Years
Thanx guys, I'm glad y'all liked it.

Soulofinfamy, I don't know if I can teach you how to write poetry.
I think its something self taught, no one taught me how to write.


If you want some pointers I'd be willing to do that.
Send me a PM if you want. =)
Age 32
In a fantasy world!
Seen November 23rd, 2008
Posted March 12th, 2008
80 posts
17.9 Years
Ooh great poem! Definitely one that alot of people can relate to! You can really feel the emotion behind it. =) I really like the ending! =D Sorry I'm not elaborating too much, I'm a bit tired and my brain isn't functioning too well but I really did like the poem! =D
Bill Bandai: Everyone will by my seemingly innocent toys and pay their hard earned money for them!
Bill Clinton: So then the toys will rise up and destroy them?
Bill Bandai: No you ninny! They just SIT there, people will go mad wondering WHEN the toys will rise up and destroy them!!!!


The greatest thing, you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return