Emerald's Journeys - Book #1: Sin of Sinnoh

Started by Lady Berlitz July 28th, 2007 11:59 PM
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An igloo in Canada
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Posted July 20th, 2011
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Pokemon: Emerald's Journeys - Book 1: Sin of Sinnoh

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Hello, everyone!
About a year ago, I created a fanfic, with the main character being someone named Glen. He was a trainer who owned a Porygon. Due to my recent "destructive" recovery on my computer, I lost all data on my old fanfic, therefore I am creating a new one, this one.
I am going to make this fanfic dedicated to my favorite Manga character: Emerald. Now, I will tell you a little bit of history about Emerald, I will not use this information in my story, I will use a completely different story. Emerald will be a completely different person, although I will add a few details from this. Emerald normally owns no Pokemon, he is a gifted child who is shorter than normal kids, and carries along soil from all over Kanto, Johto, Hoenn, and all over the world. When facing Pokemon, Emerald uses the soil, which soothes the Pokemon, thus making it easier to fight and/or catch. Emerald is normally at the Battle Frontier, and usually wins his fights. He is aquainted with Crystal (Crys), who usually lends Emerald her Pokemon, and the two legendary dragons, Latios and Latias, who fly Emerald to the Battle Frontier. Emerald's age is unknown, and no one knows where he came from, the only thing that anyone knows is that he is the guardian of the wish-making phantom Pokemon, Jirachi. Emerald is one with nature and Pokemon, and can command them to do anything. In the games Ruby, Sapphire, and Emerald Versions, Emerald is not included because they either didn't have enough room, or forgot. In the Diamond and Pearl Versions, Emerald was included as the rival character, instead of your opposite gendar. There isn't much similarities between the game and the Manga, but it is figured by most people. They look much different because in Diamond and Pearl, everything is "futurized", and therefore Emerald is older than in the Manga, and therefore he is more manly, and lost most of his powers, and therefore, he wishes to act as a man and will set off on his own journey.

Now, before I get into the story, I want to give you a few support banners/userbars, or whatever you want to call it, so people will know that you have read, or like, my story. So far I have **1** support image, if you would like to contribute to my story, or add/suggest a banner, please, go ahead. I would like this very much.



Now, I have not much reason that I like Emerald, the only thing is that we share not very much in common. I was born very small, and wear clothes that are usually too big for me. I am also writing this story because I love writing, it is my dream to become an author. This is probably an original idea, if not, maybe 1 or 2 have ever tried this. I haven't been learning this kind of stuff at all. If you know that this is an original idea, PM me, or post on this thread. Anyway, enough of the talk about me, here's the story! Do NOT tell me to delete the above, it an important aspect of the story, to clear out some weird guesses or questions. These DO NOT have ANYTHING to do with the story, therefore it is not a spoiler for it.

Prologue - Storytime

"Hey, mom! I'm leaving now!" yelled Emerald, hurrying.

"Wait, Emerald! Did you forget? It's already 10 O'clock at night!

"Uh... Oh yeah..." sighed Emerald, walking back upstairs to his room.

"Emerald..." said Emerald's mom, following Emerald.

"Want to hear a story, Emerald? You haven't heard one since you were little." said Emerald's mom.

"Mom! I'm not little anymore!" yelled Emerald, "oh, well... Fine, mom. You can read to me."

"Yay! Now, I will start. I will read the book that we never got to when you were little. This is about a legend that happened in the vast region of Kanto, many years ago. It is about a war that happened just after the Earth War. It is called the 'Warriors of Twilight', written by Daniel Claide." said Emerald's mom.

"This s-sounds interesting." said Emerald, trying to focus by crossing his legs and closing his eyes, but still twitching unbearably, hard and fast.

"Okay, Emerald. Calm down. You need to have a calm mind if you want to listen to this story."

"Sorry, mom... I'll try... concentrate... concentrate... concentrate..."

"Now, Emerald... Are you concentrated enough?"

"concentrate..."

"I'll take that as a yes. So... Can I start reading? ...The story takes place in a land not so far away from here, not so long ago. It takes place in a region well-known as Kanto, the 'Region of New Beginnings'. Three giant, deadly, winged Pokemon were having wars. Ice, electricity, and fire Pokemon were all fighting in the exact same war. Volcanoes erupted, burning down forests and villages, lightning came down and struck tall and short buildings, collapsing onto others. Water froze, and the air got still, sinking islands and suffocating people and Pokemon. This was a war that went on for hundreds of years, the three Pokemon were so evenly matched, that there came a time that they wanted to end it. They flapped their wings heavily, bent their heads back, and huge balls of ice, electricy and fire appeared inside of their mouthes. When their energy reached their max, they set of a beams that was able to destroy the entire region, maybe the world. But suddenly, just as the blasts were about to hit, a boy, about 8 years old, wearing green all over, with a green gem in his forehead, stepped up from atop a tree, and called out a Pokemon. A Pokeball went flying in the sky, and in the flash of a light, a giant, green, serpent-like Pokemon came out. Emerald called the serpent to attack, and a powerful, green blast came and intercepted the other's blasts. The three Pokemon got scared, and they promised that they would never fight like that again. One Pokemon flew to the North, one to the South, and one high into the grey thunderclouds. The boy was seen only a few times, preventing countless wars from happening. The boy, who eventually became a man, became a legend, and was known as the 'Warbreaker'. Ever since the Warbreaker came into the world, the world was a peaceful place. No one knows where he is right now, but we'll know how we'll find him. THE END!"

"Thanks, mom! That helped a bit! So, we'll find him at the next Pokemon war?"

"If that's what the story is, then yes."

"Anyway, thanks! That was a great story! Good night!"

"Your welcome, Emerald. Sweet dreams!"

Emerald's mom tucked Emerald in his bed, and he fell asleep.
He couldn't wait until the next day, where he would start his journey.

*End of Prologue*
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Lily

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Seen February 26th, 2017
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Okay, first of all: Never, ever, ever, ever pamper your readers with excessive details. Mandatory ones, okay, I understand. But srsly--that last and first bit of your post indirectly insults the readers' intelligence. You don't have to tell us everything; it's up to you to put it in the fanfiction itself, not a bunch of author's notes. Plus, it's annoying.

Prologue...okay, not shabby, it's passable. It'd help if you elaborate on the mother's tale a bit. Everything she says sounds as if the story is coming out of some rushed fanfic/summary, which, by the way, screams unoriginality. That story is the most critical point in the whole prologue- don't rush it. Also, paragraphing helps! Please do so in the future. If you can write this in a more appealing aspect, it'd help, 'cos all I'm getting is the usual trainer fiction by the prologue. But, judging by your first author's note (>_>), I hope it gets more interesting.

One more note: 'Zzzzzzz' conveys sleepiness, yes, but don't be lazy. Actually word it for a better effect.

Otherwise, that's all I have to say. Good luck.

( ‿‿ ) PM me for a contract.
An igloo in Canada
Seen December 17th, 2014
Posted July 20th, 2011
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Emerald Heheheh Emeralds a funny name he shouldn't have any friends cause his name is Emerald
Uhh... yeah, Emerald is his Manga name, I will use Manga names throughout the whole story.
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An igloo in Canada
Seen December 17th, 2014
Posted July 20th, 2011
1,770 posts
16 Years
Okay, first of all: Never, ever, ever, ever pamper your readers with excessive details. Mandatory ones, okay, I understand. But srsly--that last and first bit of your post indirectly insults the readers' intelligence. You don't have to tell us everything; it's up to you to put it in the fanfiction itself, not a bunch of author's notes. Plus, it's annoying.

Prologue...okay, not shabby, it's passable. It'd help if you elaborate on the mother's tale a bit. Everything she says sounds as if the story is coming out of some rushed fanfic/summary, which, by the way, screams unoriginality. That story is the most critical point in the whole prologue- don't rush it. Also, paragraphing helps! Please do so in the future. If you can write this in a more appealing aspect, it'd help, 'cos all I'm getting is the usual trainer fiction by the prologue. But, judging by your first author's note (>_>), I hope it gets more interesting.

One more note: 'Zzzzzzz' conveys sleepiness, yes, but don't be lazy. Actually word it for a better effect.

Otherwise, that's all I have to say. Good luck.
Thank you, you are a great story rater. I will change all of these. Thanks.
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An igloo in Canada
Seen December 17th, 2014
Posted July 20th, 2011
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16 Years
Im sorry, I will quit this for now.
Please close/delete this thread.
I am going a bit slowly and my calendar is quite busy.
Thanks! P.S. I will repost the story on another post :)
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