A small poem I wrote while listening to my music.

[Ciera]

Aye... I wrote this at like, 2am, dont yell at me, and no flaming.

Longing

Longing to touch him
To look in his eyes
To give him a kiss
And see his surprise

To ruffle his hair
To hold him near
To know he is longing
To fight off my fear

To close the door
To watch the flame
To watch the man
I will not name

To say the words
'I love you'
And to hear the reply
'I love you too'

To kiss his cheek
To hold his hand
To watch him close
To adore this man

To caress his cheek
To hug him tight
To sit and watch
Him every night.
-Ciera

I wrote this, because I had posted another poem at another site, and the admin there said to use less I, me, you. So here it is.

*bows, then falls over, asleep*

 

[jokestr2004]

Heh though its not exactly my type of poem, and that its hard for me to get the feeling of it.. because I'd have to probably... imagine I was a girl... and stuff blah, its a pretty nice poem. There's no flaws that I can pick out, besides the fact that I'm the one reviewing it (Awful reviewer). I'm not that critical about poetry, as long as it is something that my little brain can interpret, and has well-composed rhymes, I havent any mistakes to pick out. Keep it up, I say.

 

[Lokhlan]

Wow, I like the poem a lot! Very um, sensual. >.<

I like these types of poems.

 

[Shana]

I like this poem a lot...it is full of emotion.

 

[Ciera]

I am glad you people like it ^^

lol jokestr