A Small Rap

[<<-_Lord-Krishna_->>]

I was bored and I made this quick rap...


Ya got one shot don't miss
Its now or never just give her a kiss
You always liked her just ask her out
Don't wait one more second they all count
Cuz soon you'll be too old to date
Who's gonna want you once your second rate
Do it now cuz your young and handsome
You will go all your life sayin "Never got some"
Some what? Dates thats what I meant
Don't be shy she likes you too
Theres no need to look so blue
And if you do I feel sorry for you
Cuz being blue wont do a thing
Do it now give her a ring
Make sure she's yours someone can take her away
Hurry up theres only one way
Give he a kiss
And make sure you don't miss

please give any comments and FRIENDLY critizism

 

[MegaDitto]

I liked it good work. I liked how it rhymed. I am not a big fan of rap but that was a great song.^^

 

[THIRTY-SIX]

its good i might give her a ring XD its more like a poem or the chorous to a song

 

[Jeremy]

Kinda short rap sweetie, but it's good nevertheless. Nice jobie!

 

[<<-_Lord-Krishna_->>]

Thanx for the comments guys. I'll try to post a better rap later.

 

[Lust]

It's more of a poem than an actual rap. Pretty good though.