Better off...

[Cybex Mewtwo]

(Best title I could think of...XD)
Here is a new poem that came to me after listening to the same song that got me It Is time...


Will you please break the tie...
Spare me the cry...
Go on, spread your wings and fly...
Leave me here wondering why...

I loved you...
Why did you do this?
Leave me stranded...
Alone in this world...

I loved you...
And this is what you do?
Figured your ideas...
Your plan is unfurled...

Now...

Will you please break the tie...
Spare me the cry...
Go on, spread your wings and fly...
Leave me here wondering why...

I cared for you...
And you were a lie...
You ditched me
and now I'm alone...

I cared for you...
And now I don't...
As you told me that message
Over the phone...

Now...

Will you please break the tie...
Spare me the cry...
Go on, spread your wings and fly...
Leave me here wondering why...

I respected you...
And you betray me...
Drop me like a bad habit...
Only to pick up another...

I respected you...
And it shows up now...
You left me even though...
We said we'd be together...

Now...

Will you please break the tie...
Spare me the cry...
Go on, spread your wings and fly...
Leave me here wondering why...

I adored you...
Yet you played me for a fool...
Your hideous plans...
Under all that faux romance...

I adored you...
Yet here I am wishing...
I never met you
Because you never gave me a chance...

now...

Will you please break the tie...
Spare me the cry...
Go on, spread your wings and fly...
Leave me here wondering why...

Leave me alone...
You stupid girl...
Mistakes were made and
You don't deserve me.

Leave me alone...
Go away...
Never turn around...go forward and run!
Run from me silly girl! Run and flee!

Now.

I hope you break the tie.
And now I won't cry.
Hope you don't spread your wings and fly.
I will never winder why.

 

[Sumomo & Kotoko]

OMG, That was uber-great!! Me-sa lovez it!! :( ;)

 

[Cybex Mewtwo]

Thanks. That means a lot.

 

[angel]

WOw thats great cyber mewtwo.

 

[~Ozy~]

Again, very emotive. Problem and resolution spelled out nicely without hitting the reader over the head with it. That was well-done. Your technique, though, could still use some refining. Particularly your word choice, it's a tish sloppy in areas. Otherwise, well done, though I don't like it quite as much as "It Is Time."

Emotive score: 7.5/10

Technique score: 6/10

Overall score: 7/10

 

[Cybex Mewtwo]

Again, very emotive. Problem and resolution spelled out nicely without hitting the reader over the head with it. That was well-done. Your technique, though, could still use some refining. Particularly your word choice, it's a tish sloppy in areas. Otherwise, well done, though I don't like it quite as much as "It Is Time."

Emotive score: 7.5/10

Technique score: 6/10

Overall score: 7/10

T_T.....okay then..........thank you. I think.....yeah. Thanks for the opinion.

 

[Midori Chi]

Whoa! Nice, as usual! ^^ Very long too!

*thumbs all the way up*

 

[~? Northern Lights ?~]

Wow, that's brilliant! ^^ I wish I could write as good as you, but I seem to not have the biggest imagination... XD