Evaporation

[Lily]

'Tis just something I wrote when I felt like ranting, or just rambling off shreds of random words. =O





Life unwinds
Slowly, one by one
Unraveled pain
Contemplation
Of death

Beginning ?til
A new sun?s risen
Threads of gold
Weaving across
Cut by scissors

A child?s play
Life in their hands
Relishing
The sweetness
Tasting the bitter

Succumbed to facts
Aesthetic ethics
An altered law
No more bliss
Or mere foolishness?

Deep within
The pits of black
A strangled line
Of losing time
Too late to turn back

Simple first
Inquisitive meet
A dangled kiss
Abandoned of lust
Frowned upon both

Mystified looks
But she does not care
A naivet? heart
For the one she wants
Reason she aches

Opposing one
Reflection of hers?
Him, a willful pride
A stubborn streak
He does not care

?Tis too late
She had been warned
Futile pleads
A desperate cry
To nonexistence

Morning dew
Resting on leaves
'though cut harshly
Sun?s golden threads

Evaporating

 

[mizu-dragon]

Ah... I love your descriptive language. The poem itself seems to twist and turn as thoughts in one's mind so often do. The words touch on many topics at once as they float softly towards the ending... a very good work indeed.

 

[Natsuki]

Awwwwwwws, Melody, yet another masterpiece. <3~~~ I swear, you make my writing look like a pile of moosh. XD This poem was confusing yet had a lot of meaning behind it.

It gave the reader a feeling that you need to find the will to go on. You have to keep on moving forward in life, for going back and facing your past is not an option.

It also made me think of an undying love. Or even a love that has already been cursed by death. Very nice work Lily, me wubs it. <3~~~ *stamps the "Kelsey Seal of Approval" on Melody's poem* ^^

~Kelsey