Love-this feeling

[fallen_angel]

OK this is my second poem I wrote. I hope you like it. Tell me what you think of it!.

What is this feeling?
I can't talk when i'm near you
I blush when i see you
All I want it your eyes on me

When you speak I hear
nothing but you and your fears
when I heard you were going
My heart broke in two

You left I felt like a shell
I know what the feeling was I can now tell
It was love,percious love
now your gone like a dove
The love is still here

I'm waiting for you to return
I can wait a enternity
I doesn't matter to me
Because you are my only one
The person for me​

 

[Envy]

Awwww,tohru don't feel sad....Think the bright side of things!^^I really liked it,tohru!!My best friend!!!!!!!

 

[Natsuki]

What is this feeling?
I can't talk when i'm (I'm) near you
I blush when i (I) see you
All I want it (is) your eyes on me

When you speak I hear
nothing but you and your fears
when I heard you were going
My heart broke in two

You left I felt like a shell
I know what the feeling was I can now tell
It was love, percious (precious) love
now your (you're) gone like a dove
The love is still here

I'm waiting for you to return
I can wait a (an) enternity
I doesn't matter to me
Because you are my only one
The person for me

Aww, what a sweet poem this is. <33~ It shows what true love is like. For when one finds true love...that special person is the only one they can see. Nothing else matters except the happiness of that person and all you want is to be with them. But when things happen, as they do in this world of ours, sometimes we are torn from those we love unwillingly. And if the saying is true, then love can transcend all time and distances. <3

Now, in the quote I have corrected some spelling and grammatical errors for you. X3 Very nice job overall tohru~! ^_____________^

~Kelsey

 

[shadoweyes11]

Hey i luv this poem It is sooooo nice!!^^ you have soo much potiential then me

 

[Cybex Mewtwo]

I must say this is an incredible peace. You conveyed your feelings well in an entertaining and schweet verse. *thumbs up* I likes it quite a lot.

 

[fallen_angel]

Thanks everybody! :D Thank you Typhlozion for the advice! :D