Mistaken

[Anacortes]

It is my treasure yet your garbage,
But it is you who has taken it.
I tried and lost my place,
But you made it to the end.

It's your worst nightmare you've always feared,
It's also that one piece of heaven I'd longed for.
Listen to me today as a final word of advice,
From a dear friend who cares for you no longer.

You are high above me now,
Never to come down.
You think I was luckier,
As not to go through the same.

Don't you understand it's what I've wanted,
More than everything in the world.
Just as how you would think also I believe,
We are mistaken in the world.

If our fates had been turned around,
We would all be forever perfect.
What can you say my friend,
If the mistake can be undone?

I must leave you now,
Never to see you again.
I don't want to see you have what I wanted,
And still feel out of place.

There's one thing we have in common,
Out of all of this.
The very thought that is so true.
We have been mistaken...


This poem is based on a true event that had just happened a few days ago, so yeah...

 

[Miyu-chan]

I loved how you used alot of contradicting terms, oxymorons, to emphazize your whole theme.

And the last verse was so beautifully done, sad, yet beautiful.

 

[Natsuki]

Awwwwwwwws! <3 This poem was very well done. ^^ The first thing I noticed that you used the right kind of punctuation! Yeeeeeeeeeees!! XD *glomps*

This poem gives you a feel for mistakes and finding your place in the world. ^^ For everyone makes mistakes, it's pert of being human. Some mistakes are more costly than others, yet they keep on coming. Sometimes it's those very mistakes that make you wonder why you're here. You wonder what your purpose is in life and so you must seek it out. ^.~

Shweet job Ana, me wubs it. ^^ *stamps the "Kelsey Seal of Approval" on Ana's poem* ^^

~Kelsey