Misty loves Ketchum, I love ketchup.

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    Misty loves Ketchum, I love ketchup.
    by Totodile

    Disclaimer: I do not own Pikachu or Pokemon

    AAML Poem



    Misty loves Ketchum,

    I love ketchup.

    How do I know?

    Well I?ll tell you so.

    I may be just a little electric rat

    But I?m smarter that a dumb blind bat.

    I see the way she looks at my trainer.

    If you ask me it?s really a no brainer.

    She practically drools at him whilst watching him sleep.

    Ever so quiet, without a peep.

    She often is overly worried and full of concern.

    No matter what is wrong, a tummy ache, a scratch, a burn.

    She?s got it so bad

    And it seems I only know

    She should just tell him.

    Just let it go.

    She is good for him I think, anyway.

    I hope I see them together someday.

    So you see this is my proof.

    That the red head is in love,

    With my trainer the goof.

    She watches him whenever she gets a chance.

    She looks away the second he gives her a glance.

    It is silly if you ask me.

    The girl has it for Ketchum.

    Just as bad as I do for my tasty ketchup(yum.)

    So red, So good

    So now I hope I am understood.

    So farewell to you.

    Now that you can see it is true.

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    Cuuuuuuute!!!!! Bravo! ^__^
     
    funny!funny poem! n_____n
     
    Good job! I really really liked it... but next time, could you put into stanza's instead of double spaced lines? It just helps the poem make more sense that way. All in all, a very cute poem indeed.
     
    But the spacing separates your poem into different sections and ideas! For example, check out my poem, Confused, and notice how I use spacing to separate topics, ideas, and feelings....


    I'm sorry, I'm not trying to adverise my poem here, I just want to offer some constuctive critisism.
     
    Renta's Necklace, that's good. Amusing but not stupid, singsong, but far from overly so. No blank or free verse (uggh...I can't stand them). Good rythm. Only things are, put it into stanzas, as has been said, and contract a few of the lines for better flow.
     
    Very, very cool. I should note, though, that Ketchem doesn't rhyme with Ketchup much. :D
     
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