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my first fanfic! The curse of missingno!

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    ok i have never done this before and never have i wrote a story before so please be nice if somethings wrong or the story is rubbish.WARNING: THIS CHAPTER AND OTHERS FOLLOWING IT ARE GORY
    thought i should put that so i dont get in trouble....

    ok I was dared by a freind of mine to write a book that could make the various glitches in pokemon blue/red fit into a plot. this is only the first chapter so....here goes nothing.....



    Chapter 1
    Seafoam island

    Professor Gary Oak had been working in his lab for hours. Several years of pain-staking research had come together in fruition. Had Gary been told about what he would be doing now just after he graduated from university he would have laughed but not now……16 years after the advancement in cloning technology that led to the creation of Mewtwo, another clone was to be produced. A clone whose powers Would overshadow Mew two a thousand times over would soon enter the world.

    When Gary was approached by a mysterious solicitor with a request from a client who wished to hire him for a project in Pokemon genetic research, he was reluctant to do so. This is because it would mean getting involved in legal issues, as international law between Kanto, Jhoto, Hoenn and Sinnoh banned any form of Pokemon cloning altogether. However he put his concerns were put aside after Gary saw his possible pay check and now…….using the strange unknown DNA he was given by the solicitor….the specimen was finished. The creature was nothing more than a few mere sparkles in a tube reaching up to the ceiling and the only sign of life it gave was a gentle glow it gave from its core.

    He sat at his desk, still staring at the creature in the tube and opened his eighteenth can of Red Bull that night. Doubt crossed Gary's mind, all these years….for this? At 36 years old Gary`s life had gone downhill since he started this project. His wife had divorced him and refused to let him see his son. He took out his wallet to look at his son's picture. Rufus will be ten in a fortnight, old enough for a trainer licence Gary mused. What Pokemon would he receive as his starter from Professor Oak, his Great-Grandfather.

    His thoughts were abruptly disturbed when the door to his lab opened.

    "At last….Success!"." I must confess that my faith in your work was dwindling". A man in his late teens stepped into the room, Dressed entirely in black with a long leather coat he made an intimidating sight. He continued with his cold, calm voice echoing around the lab "Dear me professor you haven't been looking after yourself have you?"." Your lab is a mess, you have not shaved for weeks and your scent is most unpleasant".

    Gary looked up at him "What do you want Wolf?"." The clone is complete so I can't add more DNA, I doubt the creature could survive it anyway".
    "I am well aware of that Prof.Oak and that is one of the reasons behind my visit"
    Gary didn't bother looking up and continued drinking "Just tell me why you are here"
    "I would have thought it obvious, I came for your creation"
    "That was not in the agreement"
    Wolf smiled, showing a collection of unusually sharp, glistening white teeth. "Indeed my good man it was not but my previous employer passed away recently and his successor desires that I put forward a new agreement".



    Tossing the can to one side he gave the teen a sceptical look "And what's that?"
    "Simply hand over your research and your creation in exchange for the continuation of your good health".
    Gary began to laugh "Are you threatening me?"
    "If you so wish to put it that way……yes"
    "What makes you think…" But Gary was cut short. The clone had begun to stir and started to thrash around inside the tube. Once again Wolf gave his sinister grin "Quite feisty isn't it? But back to the point will you comply with my request?"
    "Fat chance!"
    The intruder sighed "what a shame….well then….goodbye professor"
    "Leaving? Smart move, now get lost you….."

    A single bullet was shot right in between The professors eyes, he fell back of his desk and hit the floor with a sickening crack. The thick red ooze was flowing out of his head incessantly, leaving a puddle of half congealed blood lying on the floor.

    Wolf sighed and holstered his gun "I do hate it when I do that"
    He muttered. He moved over to the tube where the clone was still thrashing aroung. Suddenly it became still and it began to glow white.

    And then…It exploded.

    Wolf was thrown back against the wall by the sheer force of the blast and by the time he got to his feet the clone was gone and the door was nought more than a puddle of molten metal.

    "DAMM!!!!!!!!!!!"


    Chapter 2: Pallet town

    Rufus was lying on his bed staring at the ceiling. A few hours ago he had been attending his fathers funeral. It had been a small event with most of Gary Oaks family not being there, that had surprised Rufus as although he knew his Dad was not the most popular person around he did not think he would be snubbed by nearly his entire family and his few friends.

    A week had passed since Rufus had returned home to find his mother crying and two Officer Jenny's in the kitchen. Since then…..Rufus had hardly spoken to anyone. Although he had not seen his Dad for years he had always made an effort to call or write to Rufus to see how he was. However although he was upset Rufus Oak was more confused about what he had been told. His fathers lab on Seafoam Island had been destroyed by a fire and when the fire service had finally doused the flames it was too late for the Professor, he had burned to death.

    He heard a knock on his door, Rufus didn't even move "Hmm"
    A boy who looked slightly older than Rufus entered the room, He was dressed casually as are most Pokemon trainers in jeans, trainers and a blue shirt. As soon as he saw who it was he sat up "Daz! What are you doing here?"
    The tainer smiled "hey man, just heard about your dad while I was in Fortree city, sorry dude how you coping?"
    "Don't know really, it just seems….odd, Dad was really organised and careful when it came to his work, a fire starting seems strange"
    Daz came and sat down beside him "yeah well…if there is anything I can do man…"
    Rufus turned to look t him "Well…. There is something"
    "What?"
    "Your Pokemon know surf don't they?"
    "Yeah Lapras does, why?"
    "Could you take me to Seafoam Island after I get my Pokemon tomorrow?"
    "Dude, do you think that is a good idea?"
    "I don't know, I think I should go though"
    "Well…ok, after you getr your Pokemon I will bring you there"
    For the first time in weeks Rufus smiled "Thanks Daz"
    "Don't mention it" and he left.

    Rufus was thinking about why he even wanted to go to Seafoam, he knew his mother would not like it so he would have to keep that quiet. He was also thinking about Daz. Daz Ketchum had in less than two years become a top trainer and had already been asked to become leader of the new gym in Lavender town. He laughed thinking about how Daz responded to this. The Mayor of Lavender had come personally to ask him to take the job but Daz just stared and him and said
    "What? And hang around with Dead people, pensioners and some suicidal weirdoes? Do I look like a freaking Emo?!?!?"

    That was good Rufus thought, even better when the Mayor said yes he does look like an Emo and Daz set his Mightyana on him. Thinking about that he actually fell asleep as he had not been asleep for days. His lasts thoughts were of his birthday tomorrow and what Pokemon he would get.


    Chapter 3:Seafoam Island

    Wolf was back on Seafoam island looking at the ruin of the Late Prof Oaks laboratory. He was not alone however as every now and then people would emerge from the lab with a variety of objects that had survived the fire. He saw a woman with blue hair further ahead and went to approach her "Any advancements Ms Jenny?"
    The Woman sighed, turning around to show her police uniform "Not yet, no traces of anything of what could have started the blaze"
    "I see…….well……what in your opinion do you think happened?"
    Officer Jenny began to laugh "Officially no, but we are near Cinnabar Island after all and a fire Pokemon simply could have managed to get across somehow. It I not the first time they have done that, its happened in Pallet town after all!"
    "I suppose but One must consider it seems odd that a fire Pokemon managed to cross the sea doesn't it?"
    She began to look thoughtful "Yes it does but I must say Wolf for a Lawyer who's client who's dead and is not being paid to investigate the case you seem to be taking a great deal of interest here hmm?"
    He shrugged "Of course I am interested, I must visit the victims family tomorrow to inform them of his will and I also wanted to also tell them how it started….the fire that is"
    "Oh ok….must say it is a relief you are doing that, I cant stop thinking about when I broke the news to that poor kid"
    "Indeed, this is a most grizzly business. I too am also dreading the visit. Ah! a little late but no problem" A helicopter had come into sight "It appears I must leave now" Wolf Extended his hand "I must thank you for you time"
    "Your welcome, will you be returning?"
    "Probably not" He stepped into the chopper and it instantly began to rise.

    A teenage girl with black hair reaching all the way down her back was the pilot. They were both silent until Seafoam island was out of sight then she was the first to speak "God I damm cops!" she handed him some files.
    "Calm down Lily, they are actually being beneficial to us here"
    "Well that isn't the point! There all ugly, fat cows! The lot of them! And this assignment, its completely blows , I mean, this is no job for executives! We should be sending some grunts to do this crap!"

    Wolf began to laugh "Are you so naïve that you think some grunts could manage a hit like this?"
    "Well lets face it mate, you screwed it up too, letting that.…thing get away like that"
    "Hmm….yes you are right I give you that but lets be fair, perhaps I would have completed the assignment if my partner had actually come on time".
    "Well sooooory! Forgive me for not being a pompous selfish, serious freak like you!" she snarled and looked around. "Sorry dude but anyway what is with the teeth? They look….sharper than yesterday."
    He gave her a quizzical look "My teeth? Lily…..you are much mistaken, nothings different with them, you look tired, when did you last sleep?"
    "About two days ago ok….forget that." she winked "Where does my little taxi drop you off?" ."by the way Giuseppe wants to talk to you tomorrow"
    "Ok, drop me off near Viridian forest could you? I need to look over these files, sure they are accurate?"
    "Yep"
    "What about the transfers?"
    "Sorted, the bank is empty and we got about 98% of the Pokemon with Gary Oaks ID"
    "Excellent, just go down here thank you"
    "no prop, the team on Cinnabar have not found anything, could it have died leaving the Islands?"
    "I very much doubt it but yes it is a possibility after all, anyway goodnight"

    Before he could walk away Lily called out "Wolf?"
    "What?"
    "Why do I always drop you off in Viridian forest? Your place is ages away"
    Wolf shook his head "Lily, we cant have a chopper land right in Viridian city can we? That would look suspicious"
    "Ha ha…. Good point"
    "But anyway I do have something to attend to now in the forest tonight so anyway… you will need to return to Cinnabar correct?"
    "Yeah I better get back, ok Later Wolf" and the chopper rose in the air. Wolf waited unstill she had left. A good executive he thought but she can never keep her mind on the task. He sighed and entered the forest.
     
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    thanks a lot! Thats actually quite tame and it gets a little bloody later on. when I finish chapter 2 i will post it on the bottom of chapter one.Yeah I need to cheack over the grammer and spelling not to mentionthe huge amount of typos I made!
     
    There are quite a few errors. Next time, you should run your story through a spellchecker.

    Lyulf said:
    Proffesor Gary Oak
    Should be Professor Gary Oak.

    Lyulf said:
    coming together in frutition
    Should be coming together in fruition.

    Lyulf said:
    Had Gary Oak
    You don't need to say "Gary Oak", just "Gary" or even "he" would suffice.

    Lyulf said:
    graduating from university and tolfd
    Should be graduating from university and told.

    Lyulf said:
    he would have laughed nut now...16 years after the avancement in cloning technology that led to the creation of mewtwo another clone was to be produced
    Should be he would have laughed; not now... 16 years after the advancement in cloning technology that led to the creation of mewtwo, another clone was to be produced.

    Lyulf said:
    When Gary was approched by a misterious Scolicitor with a request from a client who wished to hire him for a projest in pokemon genetic reaserch. He was reluctant to get involved as international law between Kanto,Jhoto,Hoenn and Sinnoh banned any form of pokemon cloning altogether.
    (Note: there are alternative rewrites for this possible) Should be When Gary was approached by a mysterious solicitor with a request from a client who wished to hire him for a project in pokemon genetic research, he was reluctant to do so. This is because it would mean getting involved in legal issues, as international law between Kanto, Johto, Hoenn and Sinnoh banned any form of pokemon cloning altogether.

    Lyulf said:
    prossible paycheck
    Should be possible paycheck.

    Lyulf said:
    And now...using the strange unknown dna he was given by the scoicitor....the specimen was finished.
    Should be And now... using the strange unknown DNA he was given by the solicitor... the specimen was finished.

    Lyulf said:
    The creatuer was notheing more than a few mere sparkles in a tube reaching up to the celing.
    Should be The creature was nothing more than a few mere sparkles in a tube reaching up to the ceiling..

    Lyulf said:
    Theonly sign of life it gave was from the gentle glow it gave from its core.
    Should be The only sign of life it gave was the gentle glow it gave from its core.

    And this is just in the first two paragraphs. With this many typos, you desperately need to use a spellchecker. They are way too distracting.
     
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    Thanks for highlighting the errors I will corret them when I get the chance but just for someone elses opinion what should Rufus Oaks starter be?
     
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    Yep. Nice story. Though the Missingno stories are now a bit unoriginal these days. But yours is original and imaginative ^_^
     
    Yep. Nice story. Though the Missingno stories are now a bit unoriginal these days. But yours is original and imaginative ^_^

    THANKS THOUGH i HAVE TO SAY THAT i HAVE FINISHED CHAPTERS 2 AND 3 IT MAY TAKE ME A WEEK OR 2 TO PUT THEM ON THE THREAD AS I HAVE BEEN GIVEN THE BIGGEST PILE OF COURSEWORK I`VE EVER SEEN AT COLLEGE (i WILL FINISH THE STORY THOUGH) BUT i WILL CHANGE CHAPTER ONE SO THAT RUFUS IS NOT JUST STARTING TRAINING POKEMON BUT I THUINK IT WOULD BE BETTER IF HE HAD 7 BADGES INSTEAD.
     
    Why are you using caps-lock in your post? o_o It looks rude, because it seems as if you are yelling at your reviewers.

    Just giving you a quick warning that if your next chapter isn't free of all basic spelling errors (ones that the English dictionary recognizes) then your story is considered to be lacking in quality.

    If you don't have a word processing program that has a spell-checker, here's a link to a free online spell-checker: Spell-checker

    It will help make your story more readable, as Acrutheo mentioned in his review. But that's all you should work on for now.
     
    Why are you using caps-lock in your post? o_o It looks rude, because it seems as if you are yelling at your reviewers.

    Just giving you a quick warning that if your next chapter isn't free of all basic spelling errors (ones that the English dictionary recognizes) then your story is considered to be lacking in quality.

    If you don't have a word processing program that has a spell-checker, here's a link to a free online spell-checker: Spell-checker

    It will help make your story more readable, as Acrutheo mentioned in his review. But that's all you should work on for now.

    Thanks for the link sory about the caps lock it just my typing skill is dreadful
     
    This is a great story. I am looking forward to seeing what starter pokemon Rufus is going to pick and I also want to know where the cloned pokemon has gone. Keep up the good work even tho you have spelling errors it is still good.
     
    Hi, well 2 more chapters are now here, sorry it took so long, had hardley any time recently LOL :)
     
    Umm......Excuse me but you will find that this is my fan fic. I never finished all of it but you shouldnt copy my work.
     
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