My Poem- PAST TIME

[BluePhoenix]

Hello all. I wrote this poem when I was 6 years old. And today when I was clearing my room I found this in a box. Here it is-

PAST TIME
Dragons breathing smokes
and flames:
Little men with funny
names.
Princes' with heart of Ice
Elves and Leprachons for more spice.
The world was younger and more stay.
When magic happened every day.

The thing I meant by the word stay means that they were staying in a peaceful state.
Please post your comments.
~RAP~

 

[mizu-dragon]

Very thoughtful for being written when you were six. It seems to contemplate on youth past, how the imagination dies in most people and they can never quite seem to grasp it again...

 

[Natsuki]

PAST TIME
Dragons breathing smokes
and flames:
Little men with funny
names.
Princes' with heart of Ice
Elves and Leprachons for more spice.
The world was younger and more stay.
When magic happened every day.

The thing I meant by the word stay means that they were staying in a peaceful state.
Please post your comments.
~RAP~

Awws, what a cute poem! <3~~~ I once found a ton of poems that I wrote from a long time ago. XD If only I still had them I'd post them too. ^_____^ Anyways, great work Rahul! I think it's sooo kawaii. ^^

~Kelsey

 

[Other Lip]

Well it is pretty good being consirding it was written as a six year old but I have one complaint. 'Elves and Leprachons for more spice.' That line was a thyme maker and it did not sound natural... Oh well...

 

[BluePhoenix]

Thanks for all the comments everyone.
Well Other Lip that line is just to support the other lines.
Oh and I have one more poem but I lost the page. I wrote that one when I was 8. I will post it when I can find it. By the way will I make a new thread or post it here. please tell me.
~RAP~