my poem

[One Charmed Dude]

ok this is the first poem i'm doing off the top of my head so be nice but be honest!

The Charmed Ones:
The Power of Three is the ultimate power,
the Three gain strength by the hour.
If you demons only knew,
mabey you could get a clue!


To the Three the source of all evil,
is a power oh so feeble.
So demons take one more breath,
be vanquished, meet thy death!


Good will shine!!!
Defeat evil with but a ryme.
It won't take long to hear
good's song.
The Power of Three Will Set Us
Free!!!

 

[Furea-chan]

For a top of the head poem it's pretty good as I told you before, but I've just noticed and I'm going to give construtive crtisime is where's the emotion. Besides that it is very good. Keep up the good work.

 

[One Charmed Dude]

thanks. what do you mean by where's the emotion? i thought it had emotion,oh well thats my opinion lol! would some one please post and give an opinion????

 

[One Charmed Dude]

come on people would you please post???????

 

[code zerro the deluge]

no need to double post just edit your first one.

It was good poem. just wehn he said no emotion it wasnt like there any of these !in it.

Overall good job

 

[One Charmed Dude]

thank you i appreciate your opinion!!!